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Alan V Michaels - all messages by user

8/31/2017 10:15:10 PM
Fire Away	Split it up abcb and organize stanzas
8/31/2017 10:18:58 PM
Fire Away	Drop the connecting words
8/31/2017 10:20:15 PM
Fire Away	Synchronize the tempo
8/31/2017 10:20:51 PM
Fire Away	Keep the rhyme
8/31/2017 10:31:22 PM
Brian Strand...I'm your huckleberry.	Gift of the Gifted For every person in need, Exists another bathing in greed. There is always enough to go around, Why does poverty knowingly abound? Ask about gifts no strings attached, The giver will reminisce of joy unmatched. The gifting action gives one pleasure, Often returned in infinite measure. While some exist to extoll and deceive, Those in true need should not believe, Asking for help is a sign of weakness, Piercing the gift of humility and meekness. In a perfect world, need would not exist, This world is choked with opportunity missed. The ability to give, is plagued with doubt. While the propensity to ask singles out. Judgement should be reserved for the gifted, Givers should not bear this burden shifted. Give as much and as often as can be beared, All that has been given is meant to be shared.
8/31/2017 10:34:49 PM
Brian Strand...I'm your huckleberry.	Now that we're both on Main Street... Let the lead fly. Fill me with holes.
8/31/2017 10:45:28 PM
Midlife Crises: comments please.	You have 5 supporting stanzas... Pick the best 3. Drop 2...make it rev. You have my problem. I say too much. Less said, more powerful...let the reader fill the gap with self.
8/31/2017 10:53:11 PM
im new around here..	Sounds like you have some great material. Express it openly, but stay away from the I, me, and my to avoid the narcicism. Everybody is damaged. Which means everyone can relate. Give everyone something to relate to. Best of Fortune.
8/31/2017 10:55:32 PM
im new around here..	If you ain't damaged, ya ain't living.
8/31/2017 11:05:09 PM
Go in seargh of Style	I agree that poetry should.come.naturally. if so, why study others? Can you really develop style? Do you see the irony 😉
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