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5/30/2017 12:17:04 AM
Topic:
Introduction Brian Duffield

peter joe
Posts: 1
I am Peter Joe and I am a writer at Best law essay I wrote many poetry for own as writer I Faced any problem in the beginning but now I am an expert writer.
5/30/2017 12:16:47 AM
Topic:
Midlife Crises: comments please.

7angelique
Posts: 3
I like the way you inserted single lines throughout your verse, it was as if you were reinforcing your own thoughts from another side of yourself.
5/29/2017 11:57:54 PM
Topic:
The Tell

7angelique
Posts: 3
This is my first time to respond to any poem here, but I have to say I really liked this one! I like that you did the Biblical thing and kept it's pace slowed down as time itself would have done. I'm not a true critic, but I do know what I like. Thank you for putting this poem up and way to go for expressing and explaining each of the reasons for your inclusions. I mostly prefer rhyming poetry, so this one hit me by surprise!
5/29/2017 11:16:53 PM
Topic:
The Scribbled Universe

7angelique
Posts: 3
THE SCRIBBLED UNIVERSE


Of cadence
And rhythm
And rhyme we seek
When putting pen to paper
The words becoming lively
And their life
Becomes our pleasure


For imparting
As we long to do
Upon the parchment written
Our souls pour forth
Their meaning
Though to some
Are largely hidden


With banter
Wit and melancholy
What flows forth
Has its vision
‘Ere we are urged
By sacred things
As on a Preacher’s mission


While deep inside
Our stories lurk
To use us for
Their telling
Once in awhile
We chance upon one
Good enough for selling


Though money be not
The object nay
Our story’s more revealing
To tell it is
Our truest aim
From within
My pen is stealing


As verse or prose
Or sonnet sweet
They do linger
Ever near
In truth they’re
Only longing for
An anticipating ear


For words create
And build a world
We’d not have
‘Ere we wrote it
For their lore and wonder
Like a Bible
We do quote it


While scratching out
My quills delight
An element of awe
For what was once
Alone and blank
Now scribbled of
The Universe I saw
5/29/2017 5:59:47 PM
Topic:
3am

Ryan DeCicco
Posts: 2
Basically basic, muddled with mud.
Clearly clarity, for this old dud.

Definitively defined, nude and lewd.
Energetically energized, often seen rude.

Frantically frowning, obscene and mean.
Greatly gratifying, seeking a place to lean.

Helping hostility, dive and strive.
Inside idea, staring at a hive.

Justify justice, bide and hide.
Killing kindness, no ears to confide.

Liberally loose, trade and fade.
Musical mask, what is made.

Notably nubile, fated and hated.
Overly obscene, utterly inebriated.

Puny Patriotic, hopeless and faithless.
Quiet quake, cringing at the tactless.

Remedial remedy, smile and trial.
Stunning stealth, casting out the vile.


Truthful tenacity, bug and chug.
Universally united, reach out and hug.

Vilify victims, tilled and filled.
Wiley warming, you must be thrilled.

Xenophobic xylocarp, fast and mast.
Youthful yearning, subjugated at last.

Zealous Zen, mend and lend.
Always alone, live to not offend.
5/29/2017 5:53:43 PM
Topic:
Ancient Amateur

Ryan DeCicco
Posts: 2
- Once upon a time, I had hordes of my work stockpiled on a removable hard drive. Sadly all my work is gone. Around three in the morning, I found myself at my desk with my trusty Dollar Store black pen. In the morning I awoke and to my surprise, ancient arcane symbols were etched into a solitary leaf of paper on my desk. My first attempt at 'poetry' in almost a decade. -

Hello one and all, my name is Ryan. I come to you today with a desire to share and improve my feeble attempts to re-enter the world of poetry. In the past decade, I have found my self-writing short stories but often would dream of composing that mystical piece of work that would define my life. I will be posting the poem, eluded to in the first paragraph, shortly and welcome all comments.

Thank You,
Ryan
5/29/2017 7:37:21 AM
Topic:
Can't reply soup mail

Abosede Ogundare
Posts: 3
Good day,

I have difficulty replying my recent soup mail. There seems to be a lock on it.
Please I need an urgent answer.
Thanks alot.
edited by mopelola on 5/29/2017
5/28/2017 1:54:06 PM
Topic:
The Lost Years

Kevin Shaw
Posts: 3
Apologies dear readers, there has been a bit of a copy and paste issue with some of the words joining up, Hopefully you can still read it. This is a poem, a story that I like personally, but don't know what to do with. It is written for the view point of Edie's brother Tommy Joe.
5/28/2017 1:34:08 PM
Topic:
The Lost Years

Kevin Shaw
Posts: 3
The Lost Years
Edie
Edie looks well for her age,
Hard to believe she’s almost94.
A widow wife these past 72years,
Lost husband Bill, in the 2ndWorld war.

Bill was presumed killed inaction,
Though his body, was never found.
Silently she grieved all theseyears,
Was he lying, in unmarkedground?

Edie lives in a small countrycottage,
In the High Peak town ofGlossop.
Moved from Ashton in theFifties,
To work in the local Hosieryshop.

Two siblings, Jean and TommyJoe
Good friends, who love her dear.
Whist Drive and Dom’s in theFeathers,
A Natter and glass of Stoutbeer.

Bingo at the Workers onSunday,
You’d be surprised how oftenshe’s won.
A feisty, keenly independentlady,
An old girl who likes to havefun.

Edie often asked herself thequestion;
Why did they send her Bill tofight?
A proud and gallant youngsoldier,
She oftenfelt something, wasn’t right.





One icy cold night after Bingo,
Edie slipped and fracturedher wrist.
A short stay in TamesideGeneral,
A break from the Feathers andthe Whist.

She met an old man in the dayroom,
Who appeared to catch her stare,
Watching TV with a foot inplaster,
“Two broken bones, don’t welook a pair”.

Gilbert
Badly injured and barelyconscious,
Gilbert was nursed by acouple in Dieppe.
They guessed that he wasEnglish,
Falling exhausted at theirdoorstep.

Eleven long years they caredfor him
Before they sadly passed away.
Loving, adoptive Frenchparents,
Made ready, his liberationday.

Gilbert doesn’t recall, lifebefore the war.
Left Dieppe for Manchester,Summer of ‘55.
In a curious, MancunianFrench accent,
Would say “I’m just thankful to be alive”.

Although he barely spokeEnglish,
He was drawn to theLancashire hills.
Learnt a trade in TimothyWhite’s,
and alifetime of dispensing pills.




Gilbert lives at Ashton GroveResidential,
A home befitting this BachelorKing.
No one really knows how oldhe is,
But he can certainly joke,dance and sing.

One night he tripped upon hisstage,
Falling awkward, he broke hisleft foot.
A short stay in TamesideGeneral,
Protested, but knew he muststay put.

Edie and Gilbert
Edie and Gilbert would talkfor hours,
During their rather impromptustay.
As if they’d known each otherforever
In some emotional, perceptiveway.

Gilbert had lost his earlyyears,
But reflected of a full andwonderful life.
Edie was gracious andcontented,
Despite 72 years, a widowwife.

Edie was as giddy as a schoolgirl,
As she listened to Gilbertsromancing.
In adversity had never felthappier,
Her young heart, ready fordancing.

He smiled in a way she’dremember,
Of a time that made her heartfill.
Smiling back, put her hand tohis face,
and witha tearful eye asked;

“is that you Bill”?
5/28/2017 7:19:04 AM
Topic:
Looking for a collaboration for music lyrics

Simphiwe Paul Ndlovu
Posts: 1
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5/27/2017 11:45:34 AM
Topic:
about me

GINA VITOLO
Posts: 1
Gina is my name. not famous. writer of memoir. now concentrating on poetry. Where? on MUDFISH LITERARY MAGAZINE, NEW VERSE NEWS, LITERALLY LITERAL, one YA novel DON'T MY FEELINGS COUNT? An English teacher, but not a know it all. Accepting of criticism. Currently posting on poets who want to share poems about resistance to Trumpism but also muting my disappointment.

love classical music which stirs my imagination. Very difficult avoiding material which has pervaded the news recently, but willing to attempt since the subject is fascinating while also dire.
5/27/2017 11:24:02 AM
Topic:
Introduction

Alfonso II Warally Chris
Posts: 1
I am A.W.Chris, new poet.
5/27/2017 5:36:20 AM
Topic:
introduction

Akan Udofia
Posts: 3
Akan Udofia is a Marketer, Blogger, Writer and Poet.
He was born and raised in Lagos, an indigene of Ikot-Odiong Ididep, Akwa Ibom State, Nigeria. A graduate of Yaba College of technology, Lagos, Nigeria.
His works are published on his blog www.akanudofia.blogspot.com, on major poetry websites, facebook poetry groups, poetry anthologies, magazines, literary journals and also published monthly on Alimosho Sun Newspaper Nigeria.
He is an outstanding writer whose works have impacted the heart of many readers both local and internationally.
5/27/2017 5:36:12 AM
Topic:
My Introduction!

Akan Udofia
Posts: 3
Akan Udofia is a Marketer, Blogger, Writer and Poet.
He was born and raised in Lagos, an indigene of Ikot-Odiong Ididep, Akwa Ibom State, Nigeria. A graduate of Yaba College of technology, Lagos, Nigeria.
His works are published on his blog www.akanudofia.blogspot.com, on major poetry websites, facebook poetry groups, poetry anthologies, magazines, literary journals and also published monthly on Alimosho Sun Newspaper Nigeria.
He is an outstanding writer whose works have impacted the heart of many readers both local and internationally.
5/27/2017 5:36:06 AM
Topic:
A little about me

Akan Udofia
Posts: 3
Akan Udofia is a Marketer, Blogger, Writer and Poet.
He was born and raised in Lagos, an indigene of Ikot-Odiong Ididep, Akwa Ibom State, Nigeria. A graduate of Yaba College of technology, Lagos, Nigeria.
His works are published on his blog www.akanudofia.blogspot.com, on major poetry websites, facebook poetry groups, poetry anthologies, magazines, literary journals and also published monthly on Alimosho Sun Newspaper Nigeria.
He is an outstanding writer whose works have impacted the heart of many readers both local and internationally.
5/27/2017 1:55:36 AM
Topic:
New form of poetry Poem within a poem rhyme

Jerome Malenfant
Posts: 19
I think the structure of the original poem, with alternative long and short lines, was much more interesting, as well as easier to read, but it could use some minor revisions, (such as in the punctuation, among others), to make some of the lines clearer, as indicated by my and others' comments.
5/27/2017 1:38:03 AM
Topic:
Disrespecting children

Andy Morfett
Posts: 7
I wasn't going to comment on your thread until I read it through thoroughly. Your somewhat effusive language in your description of kids is worrying, to be frank. You come across like someone who is rather too interested in children, to be honest... It may help explain why your thread has had almost a thousand views but this is only the second comment... May I suggest that you take the time to re-edit your post so that it doesn't come across as quite as creepy as it does at present?
5/27/2017 1:30:36 AM
Topic:
This place is a joke

Andy Morfett
Posts: 7
I share the frustration of those who have commented before me. I actually find it slightly insulting to see that various of my works have had several HUNDRED views and not one single comment. That smacks of either (a) laziness on behalf of the reader; (b) snobbishness on the part of the reader deeming my work not worthy of comment or (c) pure unadulterated ignorance.
Not one person on this site - or any other site like it - is above criticism, critiquing or learning something new, however well established they may be. The only way we learn and improve is by giving and receiving feedback on our work. No-one is above that.
I've written stories and poems for more than forty-five years and still consider myself a 'novice' in the field. Yes, some of my stuff is good - very good at times - but not brilliant. I would like to get better at what I do but as nobody ever bothers to tell me how and where I can improve I'll never learn.
Anyone who reads another's work and does not bother to comment is doing that author a disservice. Shame on you!
5/27/2017 12:07:00 AM
Topic:
New form of poetry Poem within a poem rhyme

Brenda Chiri
Posts: 9
Thank you all for your comments but now, I am totally confused! Was better before or as is?
5/25/2017 6:13:04 PM
Topic:
Beautiful

Bernie Mac
Posts: 1
Hi guys,




First time poster here. Can you please give me your thoughts on my latest poem? Please be honest, thanks in advance.



Beautiful




You are beautiful because your eyes are lovely




You are beautiful because you look unbelievably good in your new dress




You are beautiful because your lips are so amazing to kiss




You are beautiful because you are fearfully and wonderfully made




You are beautiful because your skin is so soft




You are beautiful because you have the most perfect... (LOL .. OK I deleted a couple of lines and stopped this section)




Please know you are beautiful



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