5/27/2017 11:45:34 AM
Topic:
about me
GINA VITOLO
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Gina is my name. not famous. writer of memoir. now concentrating on poetry. Where? on MUDFISH LITERARY MAGAZINE, NEW VERSE NEWS, LITERALLY LITERAL, one YA novel DON'T MY FEELINGS COUNT? An English teacher, but not a know it all. Accepting of criticism. Currently posting on poets who want to share poems about resistance to Trumpism but also muting my disappointment.
love classical music which stirs my imagination. Very difficult avoiding material which has pervaded the news recently, but willing to attempt since the subject is fascinating while also dire.
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5/27/2017 11:24:02 AM
Topic:
Introduction
Alfonso II Warally Chris
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I am A.W.Chris, new poet.
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5/27/2017 5:36:20 AM
Topic:
introduction
Akan Udofia
Posts: 3
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Akan Udofia is a Marketer, Blogger, Writer and Poet.
He was born and raised in Lagos, an indigene of Ikot-Odiong Ididep, Akwa Ibom State, Nigeria. A graduate of Yaba College of technology, Lagos, Nigeria.
His works are published on his blog www.akanudofia.blogspot.com, on major poetry websites, facebook poetry groups, poetry anthologies, magazines, literary journals and also published monthly on Alimosho Sun Newspaper Nigeria.
He is an outstanding writer whose works have impacted the heart of many readers both local and internationally.
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5/27/2017 5:36:12 AM
Topic:
My Introduction!
Akan Udofia
Posts: 3
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Akan Udofia is a Marketer, Blogger, Writer and Poet.
He was born and raised in Lagos, an indigene of Ikot-Odiong Ididep, Akwa Ibom State, Nigeria. A graduate of Yaba College of technology, Lagos, Nigeria.
His works are published on his blog www.akanudofia.blogspot.com, on major poetry websites, facebook poetry groups, poetry anthologies, magazines, literary journals and also published monthly on Alimosho Sun Newspaper Nigeria.
He is an outstanding writer whose works have impacted the heart of many readers both local and internationally.
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5/27/2017 5:36:06 AM
Topic:
A little about me
Akan Udofia
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Akan Udofia is a Marketer, Blogger, Writer and Poet.
He was born and raised in Lagos, an indigene of Ikot-Odiong Ididep, Akwa Ibom State, Nigeria. A graduate of Yaba College of technology, Lagos, Nigeria.
His works are published on his blog www.akanudofia.blogspot.com, on major poetry websites, facebook poetry groups, poetry anthologies, magazines, literary journals and also published monthly on Alimosho Sun Newspaper Nigeria.
He is an outstanding writer whose works have impacted the heart of many readers both local and internationally.
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5/27/2017 1:55:36 AM
Topic:
New form of poetry Poem within a poem rhyme
Jerome Malenfant
Posts: 19
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I think the structure of the original poem, with alternative long and short lines, was much more interesting, as well as easier to read, but it could use some minor revisions, (such as in the punctuation, among others), to make some of the lines clearer, as indicated by my and others' comments.
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5/27/2017 1:38:03 AM
Topic:
Disrespecting children
Andy Morfett
Posts: 7
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I wasn't going to comment on your thread until I read it through thoroughly. Your somewhat effusive language in your description of kids is worrying, to be frank. You come across like someone who is rather too interested in children, to be honest... It may help explain why your thread has had almost a thousand views but this is only the second comment... May I suggest that you take the time to re-edit your post so that it doesn't come across as quite as creepy as it does at present?
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5/27/2017 1:30:36 AM
Topic:
This place is a joke
Andy Morfett
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I share the frustration of those who have commented before me. I actually find it slightly insulting to see that various of my works have had several HUNDRED views and not one single comment. That smacks of either (a) laziness on behalf of the reader; (b) snobbishness on the part of the reader deeming my work not worthy of comment or (c) pure unadulterated ignorance.
Not one person on this site - or any other site like it - is above criticism, critiquing or learning something new, however well established they may be. The only way we learn and improve is by giving and receiving feedback on our work. No-one is above that.
I've written stories and poems for more than forty-five years and still consider myself a 'novice' in the field. Yes, some of my stuff is good - very good at times - but not brilliant. I would like to get better at what I do but as nobody ever bothers to tell me how and where I can improve I'll never learn.
Anyone who reads another's work and does not bother to comment is doing that author a disservice. Shame on you!
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5/27/2017 12:07:00 AM
Topic:
New form of poetry Poem within a poem rhyme
Brenda Chiri
Posts: 9
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Thank you all for your comments but now, I am totally confused! Was better before or as is?
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5/25/2017 6:13:04 PM
Topic:
Beautiful
Bernie Mac
Posts: 1
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Hi guys,
First time poster here. Can you please give me your thoughts on my latest poem? Please be honest, thanks in advance.
Beautiful
You are beautiful because your eyes are lovely
You are beautiful because you look unbelievably good in your new dress
You are beautiful because your lips are so amazing to kiss
You are beautiful because you are fearfully and wonderfully made
You are beautiful because your skin is so soft
You are beautiful because you have the most perfect... (LOL .. OK I deleted a couple of lines and stopped this section)
Please know you are beautiful
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5/25/2017 12:25:32 PM
Topic:
Mist by Felicia Jarvis
Felicia Jarvis
Posts: 7
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Thank you. I rewrote this poem and made a completely different poem. I really appreciate your advice.
zaq12wsx wrote:
The 2nd line is a bit awkward. "Dew" is defined as "tiny drops of water that form on cool surfaces at night", so I don't think "dews" is a word. How about "The plants breathe tiny dewdrops"?
You might want to make the 1st and 2nd lines one sentence, with a semicolon after the 1st line.
I think the 3rd, 4th and 5th lines are too long compared with the first two, so you might want to break each of these lines into two lines.
You might want to begin the 3rd line with something like "So mist is born.." to continue the theme of the first two lines.
"Blended" should be "blend" to match the present tenses of the previous lines.
5th line: "The dew dies after.."
6th line: "return" should be "returns". How about "The mist finally returns to the ground,/ To the place to which I was led."
edited by zaq12wsx on 5/23/2017
edited by zaq12wsx on 5/23/2017
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5/25/2017 9:26:24 AM
Topic:
Poem to save love
Karlo Karloz
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Hello everyone
My girl got me into poems, and she left me a mystery I still have not solved till today. I've been looking for so long but I just can't find it.
She said 3 keywords which will lead me to a poem
1) Atticus (Which stands for atticus poetry)
2) E.H. (Initials I guess)
3) 13 (number of poem perhaps?)
Long story short, I'm trying to get her back with this particular poem, it means a world to me, I hope it will to her aswell. I don't have enough knowledge to find it, been looking forever. If you know something about it, everything is welcome. Thank you
Just a man madly in love
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5/24/2017 9:47:00 PM
Topic:
My Introduction!
Marilyn Newman
Posts: 1
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Hey Kevin
Welcome to Poetry Soup. This is a fun community to share poetry. I have eleven years of experience writing poetry myself. I'm just starting to publish all my poetry. I'm looking forward into reading your poetry. =)
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5/23/2017 3:18:29 PM
Topic:
How do we write a poem?
Annette Gagliardi
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I sometimes begin writing a poem by writing down my thoughts in prose. I try to get to the gist of what I want to say in the poem. Then, I glean from the prose paragraphs what the poem will be. After that, I look at wordsmithing - are the words I used the exact one needed. Do I need all the words? Or perhaps I need more. Can I rhyme? Can I use alliteration? What images jump out at me. These questions help me compose a poem from the kernel of truth I want to tell.
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5/23/2017 2:39:06 PM
Topic:
Mist by Felicia Jarvis
Jerome Malenfant
Posts: 19
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The 2nd line is a bit awkward. "Dew" is defined as "tiny drops of water that form on cool surfaces at night", so I don't think "dews" is a word. How about "The plants breathe tiny dewdrops"?
You might want to make the 1st and 2nd lines one sentence, with a semicolon after the 1st line.
I think the 3rd, 4th and 5th lines are too long compared with the first two, so you might want to break each of these lines into two lines.
You might want to begin the 3rd line with something like "So mist is born.." to continue the theme of the first two lines.
"Blended" should be "blend" to match the present tenses of the previous lines.
5th line: "The dew dies after.."
6th line: "return" should be "returns". How about "The mist finally returns to the ground,/ To the place to which I was led."
edited by zaq12wsx on 5/23/2017
edited by zaq12wsx on 5/23/2017
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5/23/2017 1:02:02 PM
Topic:
My Introduction!
Kevin Sundelin
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Hi there! My name is Kevin, I'm a 16-year-old FtM gay guy from Linköping, Sweden. I mostly write poetry about my depression, gender dysphoria, and things that I think are important. One day I just really felt like sharing my poetry since it's just been stuck in a writing app for a few years. I also write some rap songs that I have never performed or shared cause I have stage fright and I'm too insecure about my voice to record it. I hope that people read my poetry and can either relate to what I'm writing or at least like what I write. That's all about me, what about you?
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5/23/2017 11:31:32 AM
Topic:
Please let me know how you feel. I need your help.
Felicia Jarvis
Posts: 7
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Yes, you are right. The line is the most important part for me. Thank you.littlespear wrote:
You're right and they're wrong. In fact, it is the most necessary line in the poem. Keith O.J. Hunt
edited by littlespear on 5/20/2017
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5/23/2017 11:29:58 AM
Topic:
Please let me know how you feel. I need your help.
Felicia Jarvis
Posts: 7
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Thank you so much. I think so, too.
Barry wrote:
Did the site give an alternative expression they thought was more correct? It might depend on whether the site expected poetry or prose. I find there is more freedom in sentence construction in poetry than prose. Poetic form allows for rhythm and meter which is not required in prose. Personally, in a poetic form I see nothing wrong with it.
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5/23/2017 7:48:42 AM
Topic:
Violin
Darren White
Posts: 7
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I id edit some. If I am to work more beau into the poem, I'd better rewrite it completely. If I do that, I will start a new thread, but it will take some time 
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5/23/2017 7:00:04 AM
Topic:
need help, comments
teenathomas
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