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5/25/2017 12:25:32 PM
Topic:
Mist by Felicia Jarvis

Felicia Jarvis
Posts: 7
Thank you. I rewrote this poem and made a completely different poem. I really appreciate your advice.

zaq12wsx wrote:
The 2nd line is a bit awkward. "Dew" is defined as "tiny drops of water that form on cool surfaces at night", so I don't think "dews" is a word. How about "The plants breathe tiny dewdrops"?

You might want to make the 1st and 2nd lines one sentence, with a semicolon after the 1st line.

I think the 3rd, 4th and 5th lines are too long compared with the first two, so you might want to break each of these lines into two lines.

You might want to begin the 3rd line with something like "So mist is born.." to continue the theme of the first two lines.

"Blended" should be "blend" to match the present tenses of the previous lines.

5th line: "The dew dies after.."

6th line: "return" should be "returns". How about "The mist finally returns to the ground,/ To the place to which I was led."
edited by zaq12wsx on 5/23/2017
edited by zaq12wsx on 5/23/2017
5/25/2017 9:26:24 AM
Topic:
Poem to save love

Karlo Karloz
Posts: 1
Hello everyone



My girl got me into poems, and she left me a mystery I still have not solved till today. I've been looking for so long but I just can't find it.




She said 3 keywords which will lead me to a poem




1) Atticus (Which stands for atticus poetry)

2) E.H. (Initials I guess)

3) 13 (number of poem perhaps?)




Long story short, I'm trying to get her back with this particular poem, it means a world to me, I hope it will to her aswell. I don't have enough knowledge to find it, been looking forever. If you know something about it, everything is welcome. Thank you




Just a man madly in love
5/24/2017 9:47:00 PM
Topic:
My Introduction!

Marilyn Newman
Posts: 1
Hey Kevin

Welcome to Poetry Soup. This is a fun community to share poetry. I have eleven years of experience writing poetry myself. I'm just starting to publish all my poetry. I'm looking forward into reading your poetry. =)
5/23/2017 3:18:29 PM
Topic:
How do we write a poem?

Annette Gagliardi
Posts: 2
I sometimes begin writing a poem by writing down my thoughts in prose. I try to get to the gist of what I want to say in the poem. Then, I glean from the prose paragraphs what the poem will be. After that, I look at wordsmithing - are the words I used the exact one needed. Do I need all the words? Or perhaps I need more. Can I rhyme? Can I use alliteration? What images jump out at me. These questions help me compose a poem from the kernel of truth I want to tell.
5/23/2017 2:39:06 PM
Topic:
Mist by Felicia Jarvis

Jerome Malenfant
Posts: 18
The 2nd line is a bit awkward. "Dew" is defined as "tiny drops of water that form on cool surfaces at night", so I don't think "dews" is a word. How about "The plants breathe tiny dewdrops"?

You might want to make the 1st and 2nd lines one sentence, with a semicolon after the 1st line.

I think the 3rd, 4th and 5th lines are too long compared with the first two, so you might want to break each of these lines into two lines.

You might want to begin the 3rd line with something like "So mist is born.." to continue the theme of the first two lines.

"Blended" should be "blend" to match the present tenses of the previous lines.

5th line: "The dew dies after.."

6th line: "return" should be "returns". How about "The mist finally returns to the ground,/ To the place to which I was led."
edited by zaq12wsx on 5/23/2017
edited by zaq12wsx on 5/23/2017
5/23/2017 1:02:02 PM
Topic:
My Introduction!

Kevin Sundelin
Posts: 1
Hi there! My name is Kevin, I'm a 16-year-old FtM gay guy from Linköping, Sweden. I mostly write poetry about my depression, gender dysphoria, and things that I think are important. One day I just really felt like sharing my poetry since it's just been stuck in a writing app for a few years. I also write some rap songs that I have never performed or shared cause I have stage fright and I'm too insecure about my voice to record it. I hope that people read my poetry and can either relate to what I'm writing or at least like what I write. That's all about me, what about you?
5/23/2017 11:31:32 AM
Topic:
Please let me know how you feel. I need your help.

Felicia Jarvis
Posts: 7
Yes, you are right. The line is the most important part for me. Thank you.littlespear wrote:
You're right and they're wrong. In fact, it is the most necessary line in the poem. Keith O.J. Hunt
edited by littlespear on 5/20/2017
5/23/2017 11:29:58 AM
Topic:
Please let me know how you feel. I need your help.

Felicia Jarvis
Posts: 7
Thank you so much. I think so, too.

Barry wrote:
Did the site give an alternative expression they thought was more correct? It might depend on whether the site expected poetry or prose. I find there is more freedom in sentence construction in poetry than prose. Poetic form allows for rhythm and meter which is not required in prose. Personally, in a poetic form I see nothing wrong with it.
5/23/2017 7:48:42 AM
Topic:
Violin

Darren White
Posts: 7
I id edit some. If I am to work more beau into the poem, I'd better rewrite it completely. If I do that, I will start a new thread, but it will take some time
5/23/2017 7:00:04 AM
Topic:
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Posts: 1
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5/23/2017 1:28:22 AM
Topic:
Wedding poetry

Carole Duet
Posts: 2
Hi Jlaws! Here is a wedding poem I wrote.

Promises

I promise not to leave you.
I promise my love.
I know you, my darling, were sent from above.

I promise loyalty.
I promise support.
My arms will encircle you and be your fort.

I'll stand by your side with love and with pride.
I'll give you my hand.
I'll be your bride.

So give me your promise to love me too.
And be with me today
In your suit of blue.

Promise me a smile in your quiet way.
And give me a kiss
To seal the day.


By: Carole O'Terry Duet
Copyright: 2005
"All Rights Reserved"
5/23/2017 1:21:49 AM
Topic:
Something feels missing with this one

Carole Duet
Posts: 2
I would change the last line to: "Til then, I swim". But, that's just me.
5/22/2017 7:29:16 AM
Topic:
WritingForums.com has a vibrant poetry community

J-Mag Guthrie
Posts: 12
For those who are interested in an ad-free poetry experience.



They offer two free-to-enter monthly poetry challenges for members, one of which is for the most-improved poem (after revision based on critique) rather than the best poem to begin with.



Worth checking out.
5/22/2017 6:47:40 AM
Topic:
Violin

Darren White
Posts: 7
Yes, exactly... We say "boo" instead, so I was a little confused if that was what you were hinting at. Merci beaucoup!
5/22/2017 5:49:18 AM
Topic:
Violin

J-Mag Guthrie
Posts: 12
"Beau" is said to sound like "bow" (they are homophones or homonyms -- I've heard people use both terms) the thing that you draw across the strings of the violin. It means boyfriend/lover/intended. It's an English borrow from the French.



The English word "beautiful" is a cousin.
5/22/2017 5:22:40 AM
Topic:
Introduction...

Suzanna Sladojevic
Posts: 1
Hi people,
How nice to have found you all here in poetrysoup.com. I have recently begun to write poetry. It feels so natural to do so, especially after the loads of reading I have done over the past two decades. The large amount of reading has also led me to be like a speed reader. For which I shall ensure you that I shall read as many of your poems as I can. And, I shall be looking into a speed reading competition too. Most happily, Suzanna
5/22/2017 4:32:52 AM
Topic:
Something feels missing with this one

Tony Devers
Posts: 7
I think the last line works well. It leaves an absence - what, or who, do you answer - that pulls the reader back into the poem, and thus into the shark infested waters.
The use of rhyme adds emphasis and reinforces the drive of the poem. Perhaps be careful of over doing it though.
As for something being missing - perhaps trust the reader to fill in the gaps?
edited by Tony Devers on 5/22/2017
5/22/2017 2:50:12 AM
Topic:
Wedding poetry

Jlaws
Posts: 1
Hi all.

My friends have asked me to do a reading for their wedding in June.

They've been together for 16 years and are partners in every way. I'm very close to them and wish to pick a poem that will always mean something for them.

Ideally I'd like something 20th/21st century. Any suggestions would be greatly appreciated!!!

Thanks
5/21/2017 12:31:34 PM
Topic:
Violin

Darren White
Posts: 7
Oh boy.... I really wish we would get a notification when someone replies to your forum posts... I only see this now.
Thank you for replying to my test-post. I was mostly posting here to see if the forum gets livelier, it's not really the most visited place on Soup.

Thank you for your comments.

You are absolutely right what the -ing words are concerned. This is one of my earliest poems I've written in English, and I wasn't aware of this. I hope that in my more recent poems I have improved this (I do believe they belong in a poem, just not too many!)

Eyes and dancing. You are right! Do you know I had not even noticed that until you mentioned it?

What exactly do you mean by "beau".
You mean the word we usually differently use: "boo"?



Thanks,

Darren.
edited by dWite on 5/21/2017
5/21/2017 9:47:45 AM
Topic:
Rhyming woes

TSHEPO MBHELE
Posts: 1
Sometimes it may be difficult to come up with words that rhyme but don't forget that your poem still needs to make sense.So try to find things that do make sense and go together.



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