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7/14/2018 3:12:53 AM
Please crit	First of all, my condolences on your loss. You've conveyed the raw emotions through your words! They're simple, no fluffy language. If I would have anything to suggest just be careful with the syntax, like a few instances where two words didn't have a space between them (thisearth, asthere, etc).
7/14/2018 3:17:55 AM
Lonely in this World I Stand	Guard my eyes from evil, Lord Keep my ears from lies of old. Help me speak Your truth and love Tie my heart to Thine above. Lonely in this world I stand Longing for a helping hand. Darkness fills the hearts of men Like Daniel in a lions den, I lay my trust in Thee alone And all my troubles at Your throne. Keep my heart from sin's desire Cleanse me in Your flames of fire. Lead me down the narrow path Show me treasures heaven hath. Lonely in this world I stand Longing for the promised land. Love, no longer seeking here For perfect love doth cast out fear And hereby in this love I dwell That guards me in this passing hell. [This is a Christian poem I wrote about the loneliness a child of God often feels during their journey. Hope you guys feel free to leave some feedback!] edited by stenila on 7/14/2018
7/14/2018 3:19:42 AM
Lonely in this World I Stand	By the way, sorry the formatting turned out weirdly spaced out!
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