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10/9/2021 5:48:24 PM
Love Letter To The American Dream	Love letter to the American Dream Time has not been kind to the Giantess Of American fame. With dreams they come Attracted to the bright beacon promise, Only to be dashed against the fear-dome Of freedom lost. The Sea-washed, sunset Walls Stand tall, guarding a crushed and crumbling Empire. Her ruthless eyes watch for any exiled souls That dare cross, clutching in hand a warning pyre. “What has happened to my American Dream?” The people cry, “Promised were we, a welcome-world For the tired, the lost and homeless.” “Whim, Were those words. Turn back. As lies you were told.” The titan glare glowed world wide, gates were shut. Hopes dimmed. But like Lazarus, would rise again. This poem is in response to The New Colossus. I kinda cheated with the sonnet format, need help in trying to fix those. Otherwise how does the theme carry out? Would love any kind of feedback. I'm learning to get better at writing so I don't mind harsh criticism. Thanks in advance.
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10/9/2021 5:48:24 PM

Love letter to the American Dream
Time has not been kind to the Giantess

Of American fame. With dreams they come

Attracted to the bright beacon promise,

Only to be dashed against the fear-dome

Of freedom lost. The Sea-washed, sunset Walls

Stand tall, guarding a crushed and crumbling Empire.

Her ruthless eyes watch for any exiled souls

That dare cross, clutching in hand a warning pyre.

“What has happened to my American Dream?”

The people cry, “Promised were we, a welcome-world

For the tired, the lost and homeless.” “Whim,

Were those words. Turn back. As lies you were told.”

The titan glare glowed world wide, gates were shut.

Hopes dimmed. But like Lazarus, would rise again.

This poem is in response to The New Colossus. I kinda cheated with the sonnet format, need help in trying to fix those. Otherwise how does the theme carry out? Would love any kind of feedback. I'm learning to get better at writing so I don't mind harsh criticism. Thanks in advance.

pages: 1