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saneromeo - all messages by user

10/22/2011 11:42:46 AM
A piece of work for you to advise me on! I am thinking the sad girl is you, and that is why "everyone but me" sees a lying smile. The poem could use more visual explanations (I was always told to show not tell) to the what, why and who of the girl. I like the amount emotion, you do manage to express quite a bit of pain, but again I think more imagery would tighten the theme of this poem up.
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