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5/12/2012 4:53:22 PM

Victoria Rose
Posts: 3
far from the ground,
a sun faced sea shines on me.
no trouble i see - but a sail with no wind
to catch no worry in the air.
should i swim so long, and tire arms

to reach the golden glaze ahead?
and rest on islands set in silk,

to catch a glimpse
of flocking beasts and friendly herds.
edited by victoriafirefly on 5/12/2012
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