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1/11/2012 10:01:32 AM sherry smith Posts: 2	As I stand before you And say the words "I do", I give to you my heart, my soul For they belong to you We have been togather Many days, you and I And I know that we will make it On this journey called life So as our love we proclaim Before God amd family We will start our life as one And togather we will always be -- sherry smith
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3/17/2012 4:08:42 PM David Smalling Posts: 4	A great poem cannot be about the self, the self must only an analogy for the world ... this is the poem's universal appeal and not its title, which only can promise an argument in the mortal conversation about immortal anxieties. Best wishes, Sherry. edited by dlsmalling on 3/17/2012
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3/17/2012 4:21:06 PM David Smalling Posts: 4	I stand before you now trying To remember when we were one "I do" wish what I wsas thinking Was suddenly naked in the sun Again. Love is a hide and seek Game until we find what we are I pray my thoughts does truly leak Like my pores, for thoughts dare My will not hide my soul again. I Want to defy the odds love's history To live with you for you until I die At pundits, sage, and sin scoff and defy I marry you to recover my place Where your heart beats above my face.
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