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9/6/2021 4:37:33 PM

Ally Faye
Posts: 2
This time it's clear
he's no better than
you just because he
lives in the loft
like a throne room.

It's a funny
mess you're in,
living off other people
like a wet sack of meat.

You won't keep
long without help.

So help me understand
confusion around the
dinner table:
"So, what's new with you?"
"How're they treating you?"
"You still wasting your life?"
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