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12/21/2011 6:36:48 PM

Allen Nuytens
Posts: 7
It's been a beautiful mourning
as the sunrise hits the rooftops
and my endless dysphoria
leaves my body in a rush of cool wind
that escapes our beloved river
the warm air makes me quiver
so please
Mother earth
Never leave
and hold me close
and remind me
that life is a fragile rose
Father time
Wake me with a chime
of blissful future
and guide me
toward the enlightenment
that lays on the horizon

It's been a day of bliss
one that I'll always miss
but I've learned to forgive
and forget the broken past
I now want to live
I want this day to last
and as i open
my awakening third eye
and look toward the flawless sky
and I await to find home
without neon distractions
and demeaning attractions
a sanctuary not of religions path
but, of enlightenment
and impartiality
There will be no corrupted parliament
just carefulness
a perfect world is a world never seen
So as i roam
to find a place I can call home
I'll be forever grateful
that i can have the ability
to say that i am truly alive
for the ship of madness has sank
into the sea
and there's only you
and me
So let's find what it means
to be
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