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11/22/2011 4:52:31 PM

warren marc
Posts: 1
He has left his touch ,

I know this much by the vacant stares they posses .

He has since passed through ,

And his evil too with the curses I loathe and detest.

His reign will not end ,

Until man is condemned and all that he seeks is wiped out ,

All pure is consumed ,

Savaged and ruined

Left to rot without doubt.

The stench that remains ,

Drives a stake through the pain ,

To remind of the torture that's been ,

Felt but not touched ,

Though tasted too much ,

So alive - it'll never be seen

For hope cannot thrive ,

If there's no hope alive ,

Nothing but dark destitution ,

Your spells here won't work ,

On the demons that lurk ,

For this is our last retribution.
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12/16/2011 4:13:39 PM

Janet Setters
Posts: 4
Well written and very perceptive.
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