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5/24/2010 6:41:55 AM

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When it rains,
The clouds kiss the tears in the eyes of the sun,
Reaching your footsteps, it pounds like a drum,
And painted with drops, the windows will show
My eyes as a child, reflections of snow.

And when it rains,
A rose that can breathe through the touch of a drop
Will falter its petals on a stoned, blinded clock,
And corals of shadow will sleep on my heart,
A drop at its core is blooming apart.
edited by sakura_blossom on 6/3/2010
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5/24/2010 9:07:51 AM

Michael Benkhen
Posts: 40
Epic Beauty!!!! Bravo!

The land is littered with the graves of animals I never killed yet somehow mourn.
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5/26/2010 2:52:01 AM

Loved Your Poem!
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