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10/29/2011 10:40:33 AM

Robert Burgess
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Please take off your mask, sit down and relax
The constant bombing around you wont last
I promise that, the clouds will clear fast
You can take off the cast that's been covering your past
Take a step into this gate but don't look through the glass
The caskets you see wont be you I promise that
So take this I promise you can see where they sat
Put up your smoke and mirrors in spite of the constant lambaste

Let me feel what you feel don't keep it all sealed
You can scratch until you peel but your wounds wont heal
You hide behind the wheel because you wish your claws were steel
Don't forget to appeal to anguish and all he conceals
Put in your memories, one by one in this creel
Sit it next to you and let the waves take the wheel
Let the currents take you away, but please be sincere
Don't be filled with fear what you feel is what you hear

But now I regret, can't seem to take my eyes off the sea
You never came back and I know you're not free
You're stuck in a new cage and it's all because of me
You got swept off your feet by the nightmare of your dreams
You know the place where I promised you'd never be?
There lies a tree where you fly so I always believe
I know I glued your eyes shut regrettably
But because of what you taught me, I can finally see.

edited by Autumnwind on 10/29/2011
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