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11/27/2017 11:01:35 AM

Donald Lee
Posts: 5
How do you write a poem
When nothing really matters
Should i take this one too seriously
Or fill my words with laughter
Just based on how i'm feeling
I suppose i'll take the later

And now i’ll use a metaphor
To give context to this disaster
I’ll compare this to a red balloon
So bright and big and growing fatter
But truth be told it’s only air
it’s barely even there.
And everyone thinks its great
And i'm not sure that why they care
But i guess the balloon is still better
Then never being there.

I messed up the pattern i was after.
But i guess it doesn’t matter
This is, after all
A poem where nothing matter.

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12/30/2017 3:59:18 PM

Jack Webster
Posts: 63
hate the bold font. love the poem. it's depth belies its airy tone. Proof read it. Make sure the meter is as you wish, and you're done.
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