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7/1/2011 11:42:26 PM

Juanita Warden
Posts: 24
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As she sang her song she looked all around
Angels in Heaven did she surround
They flew in and out, through Heaven's doors
They were busy doing, Gods daily Chores'.
She wanted to be an Angel, an Angel with wings
She wanted to do all of God's daily things
"I want my wings now" she said,with a sigh
" I have waited and waited, I want to fly"
The Angel with blonde hair was sitting nearby
"You have to walk darling, before you can fly.
Wings, my Dear you have to earn.
There is so much more, you have yet to learn.
Up here in heaven we take our time.
Slowly and surely we make the climb.
You have forever to get An Angel in Waiting your wings,
For now, my dear, we need you to sing.
Your sweet voice is what is needed to greet
The new souls that are entering Heavens' Retreat.
At first they are lost until they find their way
That's why we need you here, singing everyday.
Your sweet voice tells them they are herewith God.
Its makes them feel welcome and safe inside.
So see, My Dear, you are needed right here
To welcome them all, with your good smiling cheer".
edited by Juanita Warden on 7/1/2011
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7/2/2011 12:08:13 AM

Juanita Warden
Posts: 24
Please comment on this for me..Thank you.
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7/2/2011 11:31:44 AM

alexis bracken
Posts: 6
Juanita, I like this poem better than the other one I just read.... but they both are still very good. They both have a very definite depth of meaning in them.
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7/2/2011 12:54:07 PM

Juanita Warden
Posts: 24
Again I thank you. This is what I need to know.
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