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5/25/2011 8:14:51 PM

Morton Stevens
Posts: 1
The child watches from his train station corner,
with dirty, tattered clothes that could be much warmer.
It's eyes bespeck years beyond me,
yet, I'm its age at least times three.

Cobwebs hang above its lice-filled head,
a cardboard box seems to be its bed.
Christian riders race past its place,
afraid that they may see its face.

I met its eyes as the train screeched to a halt,
but I wavered my nerve, was it my fault?
Was it a boy, a girl, or all one in the same?
I boarded the subway convinced we're all to blame.
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5/30/2011 10:55:41 AM

I really liked this poem. It has some real meaning and emotion and even rhyme. I can't down it, it is too good, the way poetry should be,
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5/30/2011 9:57:25 PM

julie heckman
Posts: 17
Since "we are all to blame" go one further and tell us what we can do about it. See my memorial page on Face Book. Your poem is very nicely done. Good luck
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