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6/19/2017 8:09:29 PM

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Moron

What is wrong with that Holden?!
All he does is watch me scratch my bare chest,
cut my toe nails,
as he goes on about Jane or Jean or whatever her name is:
his damned girl crush he played checkers with.
What the hell has he been thinkin’,
dreamin’ about,
some young woman I barely made out with,
he couldn’t even write me a simple paper for class.
He wasn’t even in the room,
writing about some baseball glove
his emo brother covered with poetry.
That damned guy, Holden,
he’s too young to be jealous of boyhood crushes
and lookin’ at men who are not concerned
about his skinny, whining, pasty pud
goin’ on about giving women the time they want.

I’m sure what’s-her-name didn’t give a crap
about all her kings in the back row,
just like she didn’t give a crap
when I gave her Holden’s regards.
She was fun to be with.
We had fun in Banky’s car.
I just wish we could have spread out
and enjoyed ourselves more.
That’s why Banky bought that big old luxury tuna boat of a car.
Stupid Holden, goin’ on about his childish crush,
his voice breaking up and getting high,
I wanna punch him,
firm and easy on the shoulder.
I’ll keep swingin’,
keep making him act like a big baby
without any titty to put in his mouth.

Whoa!!!
That little fart!
He hit me on the side of my head!
There, you bastard!
Now bleed!
I can punch too!

Oh man.
He’s expelled.
He has nothing to lose.
What if he reports me to the principle
and they take him seriously.
All he does is call me moron;
moron, that’s all he says,
he won’t shut the hell up,
even after I clouted him good!
Now he just looks in the mirror,
wearing that stupid red hat,
with tears running down his blood covered face.
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