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5/11/2010 6:17:25 PM

Daniel Corcoran
Posts: 28
the great will fall
in the fall of math
resonant shapes crumble
tangents and radius' melt
multiply pain by infinity
and wallow in sadness

circles contain no answers
mathbooks burn alone at night
divide the earth in percentages
the fall of math
has come at last

we all evaporate into nothing
logic has abandoned humanity
if you cannot add things up
then you will be subtracted

scream into the darkness
scream with all your might
scream for the return of math

no-one answers but emptiness
nothing answers but pi

math has finally fallen. mourn
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5/12/2010 9:07:16 AM

Chris D. Aechtner
Posts: 47
I am guessing that you are part of the contemporary movement of poets who don't want to use capitilazation, commas, periods etc. So as a contemporary, modern-stylized poem it works then. This is supposed to be about critique right? I would be most endeared if you could add a line about vomit into your poem. I actually really like this poem, lots of neat little analogies. Vomiticus.
edited by DeLicht on 5/12/2010
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