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10/29/2010 8:43:56 AM

Jim David
Posts: 2
Turkey day is finally here, along with that mid-afternoon paralysis

Half the family made it this year, and thank God, 'cause we're short chairs!

Apple, pumpkin, and mince-meat pies fill the air with cinnamon dust-devils

Nevermind the barking dogs and screaming, running and tattling kids,

Kooky and drunk, your favorite uncle swears you can light a fart!

Surely we've got BIGGER fish to fry today.....how's them 'taters doin'?

Goodness knows how amazing Granny's poultry gravy is gonna be

I just hope some jerk doesn't bring that Jello with raisins, carrots, and lettuce......YUCK!!!!

Vodka is easily hidden in the various holiday beverages,

I swear it's the ONLY way I can tolerate half of my family!

No one's really that bad, but a little goes a long way!

God bless every single, dysfunctional, and oblivious one of us!

Dinner comes and goes........the herd migrates to the TV for pig-skin dramas

All say their goodbyes and don coats and scarves

YIPPE!!! They're all gone!!!......oh crap!!!! WHO'S gonna help with the dishes????
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