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10/12/2013 1:57:21 AM cheung shun sang Posts: 24	Prime…. How can you shape your life? If there are no prime in nature then how can step in lawfully. If you had no keys to door that grand then how you can come in. Innings have ways and tricks. Labors of loves have laugh at last. Words are lace works and forces are means. With no lattices draw in red then there are no blue. Babe blues are sets of moods. Life propositions are loves and wealth. Physiology all are may be normal as shaped. All across the boards are buys and sells. Buy me but no sell me. Who look up to china commie and who just look up to loose cannons. Life that made as FRAUST would be living hard devices and lame questionsfor life. What are news? As china commies black out our worlds or acting about with laws that bador with hearts that false. To be primed to do our propositions must be good but lured. Lusts are sexes. Who play a trick or pull a stunt. Genes of deer could be horses in case of fake syllogism and china tyrantdictators’ means of words and literary persecutions. Can fetus be conceived by men? Of courses but there are china forced abortions and men torments both. What is true that resemble prime? -----------Cheung Shun Sang=Cauchy3------------
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10/12/2013 8:04:45 AM Just That Archaic Poet Posts: 89	Based on the irregularity of your vocabulary and omission of articles, pronouns and plurals (etc.), I must conclude that this is either a translated poem or that English is not your first language. Or possibly you just hastily threw this together and was not careful, resulting in typos. In light of any of those scenarios, this piece needs a lot of refining and polishing.
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