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7/31/2013 9:24:38 PM

Gabe Shelly
Posts: 95

Lady,

You sense me here,
And all I can do is stare--
For you are the fire,
Burning me with your flames,
And I am but a cool breeze on a cold day--
If you would but consider me...
In the stars you are written
For you are a goddess amongst men

7/27/13

(...there were all these gorgeous gals walking by in their business clothes everday to and from work. I couldn't help it, my ADD was going haywire, and what was worst they didn't even pay a passing glance at me. It was like they were models on the catwalk-- it hurt, but I guess I deserved it.)

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