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6/25/2010 12:39:50 PM

Paul Hankewicz
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Section 2(b)

Can't express my ideas,
Might as well dread instead
Like a suppressed set of Koreas

At risk Asterisk,
Soon to be dead.

Can't express my doubt
Might as well blanket my eyes.
World divided, together without.

Give rise to their disguise.

Can't express my belief,
Might as well block my ears
To get some sense of neural relief

Never to give into fears,
unadulterated truth.
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7/1/2010 8:06:53 AM

I think you did an excellent job on this one, can't think of a thing to critique. Catie
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