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1/17/2013 4:21:35 AM

Tom Hyam
Posts: 2
An Empty Hole
Barren and cold but never sold
waiting for something to fill up
it's yearning need.

Empty but deep needing someone to keep
it warm and tender to it's needs
while it rests on it's knees.

Like old Mother Hubbard, it always stays covered
hollow and bare, just wanting a stare
to keep the solitude at bay

Just wanting to be warm, wanting another storm
to stop the drought of feeling
like this
Hi guys I would just like some high end analysis about one of my artistic pinnacles. Thankyou. Much Love. xoxoxoooooox
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