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6/7/2010 11:51:57 AM

The Silence of Victory - Michael Hertel

Shattered hearts

Disturbed minds

Severed limbs

Detached world

Tanks and M4’s are all we need to sustain

Yet with victory, sweeps in the incessant pain

Our bodies are broken and torn and dirty

Riddled and rattled by the public enemy

Fear in the essence of vigilant crosshairs

Loaded chambers, barrel pointed to multibillionaires

It’s mine for my people, I must do what is right

I must kill if I intend to survive this dreaded plight

While RPG’s and 88’s persist into the heat of night

Greedy old men sit and chat under veils of naïve delight

Heavy cost

Max profits


One purpose

The corporate spearhead delves deeper into the wounds

Excavating, extorting, exasperating power tycoons

Uniform in duty and in his thoughts

The cost of what you’re fighting for is severely overwrought

With grotesque patriotism in spotlights at home

While brothers die slowly in the shells of bile and foam

Surrender ourselves in the hopes of world peace?

Or puppet our minds for the rich, oily feasts?

A new world order in which we are the police

As our children blindly follow the songs of these beasts

“It is sweet and honorable to die for one’s country”

Yet, the children murdered lie faceless under war’s debris
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6/8/2010 3:05:07 PM

There is a lot of truth in what you say except that:' It is sweet and honorable to die for ones country" Nobody has ever died for their this Country but The American Indianst
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