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6/18/2012 6:33:42 AM

Sha'ntez Jefferson
Posts: 2

Never meant to add skepticism to her already hectic life
Just tryin to be her optimism see her through rough nights
But sometimes when were called upon we have the best intentions
The road is blocked probably be late it wasnt our decision
And when i get there understand you'll have my full attention
I'll sit you down and take your hand I've mastered how to listen
Experience this ambiance Im caught up in your essence
We'll share our minds and when were done we've taught each other lessons
Heal mental wounds no surgery you wont even need stitches
The seeds we plant bear fruit so sweet and now we've found our niches
I see beyond facades of calm when reckless still respected
Lips kissed upon close like lip balm my hearts close like a necklace
Arms intertwined half drunk off wine this time like your love priceless
I'd give my spine long as your mine give life if you were lifeless
Steal you the moon get sentenced soon breakout were never captured
Were so in tune nothing could ruin I'm caught up in your rapture
And this I'll do good health or flu as long as I am breathin
Always be true and real with you Im someone to believe in.

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