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A Brian Strand Contest: Retrospective 2024 Poetry... Submitted 28 Dec 24
sullen is this night bearing the burden of toil as footwalk grows bleak… crushed weeds, skeletal trees : molussk and corn wait not for anyone while sandstones drift mocking the light. Against kohl shadows time stalls to maim common workers peeling the dark...ebon craving for innocent stars; that even stalks weep slapped by winds-- how in blood of silence men, women,children wrestle with indignity leashed on tattered marrow , yet they reap hope until night’s edge--- restless thoughts gnaw and... they gaze past clouds finding comfort in the rain.

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Date: 1/8/2025 5:06:00 AM
Congratulations on your winning work in Brian's contest. Way to go. Sara K
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Date: 1/4/2025 6:33:00 PM
Dear Nette, congratulations for your success in Brian's contest with your exceptional poem. Your rich imagery brings a ray of hope despite the darkness. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 12/31/2024 2:27:00 AM
Wow! Congrats. Thanks for sharing this. May God bless you with a prosperous New Year... maligaya at mabiyaya.
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Date: 10/26/2024 10:08:00 PM
Deep and powerful poetry, Nette...."restless thoughts gnaw their ebon flesh, their birthright still ... ever unforgiven."
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Date: 10/23/2024 1:10:00 AM
What a deeply moving and profound take on the prompt, so many powerful lines and excellent word weaving throughout this really! I love especially “ craving for innocent stars” and “blood of silence” soul stirring, the ending is so touching too! Pleasure reading your poem! Best wishes Sending you light always!
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Date: 10/22/2024 2:25:00 PM
What a write/story you have here. Hope I can sleep tonight... "Good Luck"  Blessings you write away...........
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Date: 10/22/2024 10:07:00 AM
A really deep and dark take on the contest.. you really set the scene here and I love how you formatted it.. Best of luck in the contest..
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