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5/7/2013 7:13:02 AM

MaTia Boyd
Posts: 4
her, she sat out like no other...but her silhouette

her voice, it was music to my ears like no other..but her silhouette

her personality, it matched mine like no other...but her silhouette

her resistance, it was stronger than any other...but her silhoutte

her , she pulls me like no other...but her silhoutte

I don't get her and I do any other....but her silhoutte

I suppress my emotions and I do more than I have another...but her silhoutte

I made her go away, just like I did the others..but her silhoutte

I didn't really get my say....but her silhoutte

It's there all black..nice pretty hair..flowing down her back...and her cherubic face..yup her silhouette

Her voice I still hear..make me feign to have her near...yup her silhouette..

They say age is only a number...but all I get is her silhouette

It's her that makes me hesitate...but oh man her silhouette

Her silhouette is sitting there in a field...her hair blowing in the wind...she softly tells me to come closer...she wants me to be so within but she's unsure...she never looks my way..she's sitting so I cant see her shape...but man oh man..that silhouette..that silhouette..oh man..that silhouette..stands up turns to look at me..with eye's so hypnotizing they capture me...I walk closer and she takes a step do I want that silhouette....she says one thing and mean another..that I rush in..I try my best to grasp that silhouette..and I succeed..that blowing flowing my fingers they're mm mm the aroma of that silhoutte is something that I'll never forget yet i never got a chance to was created by flowers growing in the field..mmm..that silhouette...I pull the silhouette closer was just her silhouette..I kiss her on her to her cheek..then I softly touch my lips to the side of eyes look in they start to tell me this story...caress her I look a little closer into the eyes of what initially was an all black silhouette....I see a girl/ a woman...that is hypnotized by a girls a girl...she wants this girl so badly...but in the girls eyes...she's just the same....she tries too hard...for nothing...nothing nothing nothing....they start to talk...and it was only okay at one point...but afterwards it was always heated.....jelalousy became an element....anger became an element....but it's something that she still wanted...I put my glasses on to look in a little I pull the silhouette by her hips closer to relaxing and I am at peace...I look...this other girl....looks just like the's her...her eyes..her hair...her action...her resistance......the silhouette pulls away...pushes me off..then walks away......I try to say something...s s s s omething......I stutter and the words don't come out.......I wake up....I was dreaming.......but damn if I can't have her...can I atleast have her silhouette?
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