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6 th Sonnet Crown - Debbie Guzzi's Blog

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Deborah Guzzi writes fulltime. When not writing she’s reading. She travels for inspiration. Her new book The Hurricane is available now through Prolific Press. Her poetry appears in: Existere - Journal of Arts and Literature in Canada, Tincture in Australia, Cha: Asian Literary Review, Hong Kong, China, Eunoia in Singapore, Vine Leaves Literary Journal in Greece, and Ribbons: Tanka Society of America’s Journal, Sounding Review, Kyso Flash, The Aurorean, Crack the Spine Literary Magazine, Liquid Imagination, Concis, The Tishman Review, Page & Spine and others in the USA. 

6 th Sonnet Crown

Blog Posted:1/31/2014 3:45:00 PM
Crown of Sonnets, 7 will be picked to win in the contest, seven that  fit  the best together.  

It is a 7-sonnet sequence in which

the last line  of  each sonnet is repeated in the first line of the  next.

The first line is repeated as the last line  of  the 7th. sonnet;
These will be MODERN   SONNETS, 14 lines, 10 syllables per line

 abab cdcd efef gg/ I want  flow  but strict meter is not necessary.

 [we'll try 3 at a time & pick what works best] blend your writing style with Caleb's.

REMEMBER big Boy & Girl  Pants On

1. Caleb
2. Charles Henderson
3. James Goff
4. Isaiah Zerbst
5. Roy Jerden & Kelly Deschler& binibining P. iNk    
6. Carrie Richards, Joyce Johnson & Andrea Dietrich
7. Eileen Ghali, Sarah Kendrick & Dane Ann Smith Johnson

Everyone who tries will rank, the 7 in the crown will get a first place. 


Stone in the Cold

By Caleb Smith

#1 Caleb Smith
 Through the North's dark I come a stealthy hand
who but a man shadowed could be so bold?
My eyes hunt, take a reckon of the land,
look into the hollows, constant and cold.

My companion's solitude still as stone.
I  am the seeker of winds, and of scent.
By the trees yonder, I wait not alone;
my aim is true, and my purpose unbent.

Yet, death does not bring a smile to my  lips,
 nor a lift unto this wayfaring heart;
 in grief I am fed,  from silence I sip,
 and from the old wood, I shall never part.

Caleb am I, a hunter true, and I pursue
a life that no death can ever undo.

#2 Charles Henderson 

A life that no death can ever undo,
for  there are portals I've yet to find.
Hidden life in the green I wish to pursue,
oh, the secrets of life and death entwine.   

I search and search, I will know no defeat.
Each corner turned will find new paths to tread.
The deer or  the  bear, the fox that I meet
will reveal the secrets of life not death.

So, let the wood talk, hear what it reveals.
Riddle its meanings there to be understood.
The less armor worn, we brandish or wield,
higher truth follows our message of good. 

Come into the woods as in days of youth,
we  still face the test of absolute truth.

 #3 of 3 James Goff

We still face the test of absolute truth,
the nights coming fast, I travel unheard.
The reverence I feel, was born in youth,
tempered by sage, burnt offerings for birds.

Tormented by brambles whose thorns I collect
I come to remains of struggles long gone,
feathers and crushed bone, on these I  reflect.
I'm hoping once more, my arms are still  strong.

A pine marten scurries, close to my step,
the sweet scent of birch gum, his claws unearth.
My arrow's still sheathed, for creeks I have leapt.
though I grow cold, my spirit is rebirths.

Tracks at the creek, the water I savor
the brush moves, my aim must never waver. 

#4 Isaiah Z

The brush moves, my aim must never waver;
with strengthened arms, I bend my bow of yew:
my eyes pierce the  brush, intent to savor
the sights of a good hunt, an arrow true.

The  bracken parts, rattling, empty sighs;
 my draw fingers quake from the constant  chill.
My quarries' breath floats to the clouded sky;
my own breath  muffled as I track my kill.

Overhead, an arrow in deadly arc
speeds  toward the bear I'm seeking, still as stone;
a shadow moves, the arrow strikes its mark.
The hand that looses the shaft is not my own.

I am a man shadowed; death comes knocking:
The hunter hunted; the past comes a stalking.

#5 Roy
The hunter hunted; the past comes stalking
as three men in the high grasses arise
they're enemies all, my skill they mock
they wounded the bear, now they want their prize.

From my quiver I load, I pull, the shaft flies
there's one man down, but two others advance
I round the still bear, turn toward their eyes
buck knife in hand, I fight on in a trance.

My senses heighten, I exult in pain
So crisp is each leaf and each grassy blade.
So fresh the air, and each wet drop of rain.
Three down and the bear wounded in the glade.

Death songs stir memories for this woodland.
Ahead, the bear in sudden motion stands.


Ahead, the bear in sudden motion stands.             

 The CLIMAX needs to be at the END of 5 or BEGINNING of 6

Ok here where we are Caleb [who we have naked with a muffler & a bow  quill & a buck knife -nice look by the way hubba hubba] in the North woods, there are ferns thorns & birch tree deer, bear, fox, pine martins

3 enemies are down [out of the fight for now - sure if they are totally incapacitated, will revive or dead] the bear is wounded [we don't know if it's a mortal wound] It's cold enough to see your breath [so like 32? degrees Fahrenheit] cold, wet. Since Jimbo did burnt offering he has matches - probably in his quiver?

We don't know the time of day but to see shadows it is day. Do you all see how we have MOVED HIM NOWHERE

so from verse 1-5 we had him stand, think, observe, load his bow shoot down 1 man grab his buck knife [I guess he dropped the bow BUT the quiver is still attached to him] fight to incapacitate 2 more mean around the body of a wounded bear & the bear alone REVIVES

What does the naked hunter do now, what time of day is it? He must be freezing? hungry? thirsty? TIRED? and alone in the same spot he started in the North woods. [Apparently he didn't get wounded at all during all this?]


This is not you, it is not your voice [ie the language you use] it is not your morals. Don't say "I would never say that or I would never do that ... if you read Caleb's blog you can get


The is Caleb, the place is simply the woods, the man thinks...thinks.. he is being shadowed night is falling [how does he react to the night coming on when he thinks he is being shadowed?] no mention is made yet of how far from home he is or what his
supplies are, does he have a camp set up? does he have to set a camp up with dark coming on? He's too far in the woods to get home now before full dark. Is there an old hunters cabin or a hunters platform he can go to? where the water? What's he eating? Is he cold? Perhaps there is no shadow perhaps he has a fever mounting?

 [no fantasy or magic, a real person in real time, who hunts to put food on his table not for sport a woodsman who has hunted since he was a child]

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Date: 2/4/2014 9:25:00 AM
I don't see anyone stating that he is naked. Why do you say he is? I don't see any naked hunters running around in our northwoods.
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Date: 2/4/2014 7:56:00 AM
Okies Guys Jimbo, copy everything above from this page YOU put the blog up NOW I can't even start a new blog! grrrrrrrrrr - and we have a naked mufflered, bow,quiver& buck knife carrying caleb tired, wet, cold with 3 downed men somewhere in the north woods in the ferns & thickets WITH a wounded BEAR- JIMBO used the revised version of Roy's ONLY put up sonnets 1-5 cut out the rest
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Date: 2/4/2014 7:13:00 AM
Ok if I can get the blog page to copy all for me I will use the rewrite of Roy's & Mark, when we are done, we can go back and tweak the meter [we have to plot to the end] all & all I wish we had actually shown what Caleb looked like but it's TOO LATE now
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Date: 2/4/2014 6:49:00 AM
Also really like imagination in Kelly's re-work....the "camo coat" line, bit weak...
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Date: 2/4/2014 6:43:00 AM
love Roys too....just have hesitation 'bout the weak line "there's one man down"
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Date: 2/4/2014 3:46:00 AM
On poem number 5, I didn't really consider p.ink's because of her disregard of the syllable count which was a stipulation of 10 syllables. I liked KD best but his version not Deb's quite as much. The story line wasn't quite as good as the rewrite of Roy's. So, I will have to vote for Roys for the good of total crown. If we can redo Kd's closer to the story line and still preserve his write. I would be happier. As it is---- Yea Roy!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Date: 2/4/2014 1:24:00 AM
Ok my vote goes to K.D. original one as it not only stays very close to caleb's theme but it also has elements of his as well, it is intense as well as mysterious, voices from brooks, eyes are everywhere, something is near....very good.
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Date: 2/4/2014 12:49:00 AM
Honestly, and this pains, all three seem choppy and in need of polish, not far short of rewrite. Of all, I like Roy's original, which needs only a tweak or two and a bit more drama.
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Date: 2/3/2014 11:36:00 PM
If we don't want gore why are we writing a hunting sonnet? The rhyme is compromised in the third verse of K.D.s 2nd version. I still vote for Roys.
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Mark Peterson
Date: 2/4/2014 12:51:00 AM
Date: 2/3/2014 9:46:00 PM
Diggin' the Nikko re-write! Oh yeah!!!
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Date: 2/3/2014 9:09:00 PM
Soup working on fixing my blog page I can't copy this to a new blog with verse 5 until the do [sigh]
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 2/3/2014 9:21:00 PM
if it's not fixed by tomorrow morning I figured out a way around it.
Date: 2/3/2014 9:08:00 PM
I'm not quit sure what's being asked of me, but I will say that my fave sonnet of all the ones here is #3. Earthy without being smarmy, I like that. Thanks for inviting me to your blog, Debbie, is cool to read you and see some old friends here! Namaste ~N
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Date: 2/3/2014 8:33:00 PM
This is so hard, but I think I'll pick the last version, just for the new twist to the poem. :) They are all so great!
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Date: 2/3/2014 7:14:00 PM
I like Nikko's but it makes me want to "get romantic" with the next sonnet and I think the one by Roy would make me want to keep talking about nature, so I vote for that one.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 2/3/2014 7:20:00 PM
man I wish they'd fix my blog page
Date: 2/3/2014 10:40:00 AM
ok last one I think-- the ending couplet is so different from how I wrote it, oh shucks :(! I was trying to be coherent to Isaiah's sonnet, wherein there was an arrow shot by someone else-- and I tried to address that there PLUS the idea of the "past stalking" enters in as well, with that hand being of the huntress-- someone from the past of the hunter, and also somehow referring back to Caleb's line of "I wait not alone" --it could have a double meaning of other animals or persons. Sorry if I nitpicked here a bit... hope you understand. It's not that I am not open to suggestions, I just feel the need to explain why I wrote it in that manner...
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kabuteng P.iNk k.
Date: 2/3/2014 1:04:00 PM
I enjoyed writing this, made me explore some stuff I wouldn't normally write, thank you.
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kabuteng P.iNk k.
Date: 2/3/2014 1:00:00 PM
as for me not showing the hunter being hit by the arrow, for me it does-- thus the "beads of sweat"-- for me that shows some kind of reaction from the wound. Hmm, as for searing, I don't mean sear as in verb, but as in adjective, as in describing the type of pain? A piercing kind of pain? Ok, have to sleep now :)
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kabuteng P.iNk k.
Date: 2/3/2014 12:57:00 PM
It's ok if my plot wasn't used, seriously, I just enjoyed putting up my ideas for this, I don't want it to appear that I am pushing for my plot (I think Roy's and Kelly's are very interesting), so I won't say how I think my last couplet does have potential, I explained already below why I wrote it as such---
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 2/3/2014 12:43:00 PM
line 4 the bear is wounded by the man line 12 I took [keeled] as in keeled over - okies - let's see whose plot get picked?
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 2/3/2014 12:42:00 PM
if your plot is used your last couplet is not forward moving enough of the plot - verse one is basically the same content only changed for syllable count & clarity, verse 2 line 1 the man is wounded by the bear, [your line one does not show the hunter winged by an arrow - too tricky seared is what meat does when touched by hot metal]
Date: 2/3/2014 10:33:00 AM
Another one-- again, L4S3 kind of bugged me as well, since I didn't know how to bring the message across right--but what I was trying to imply there was the disbelief that the bear suddenly keels over, and not by the hands of the hunter---from how I interpret the revised line, it's more like disbelief from being attacked by the bear-- or maybe I didn't read it right?
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Date: 2/3/2014 10:23:00 AM
Sorry, I feel some of the ties I put in there got lost in the revision...Admittedly, I was a bit vague in my 2nd stanza-about Who actually had that flesh wound-- the bear or the hunter? It's pretty open for interpretation, in my mind though, it was the hunter that was wounded this time (ths "the hunter hunted"-- but yes, either way, there WAS a second shot of an arrow (implied by quivering of leaves and the word "sears"-- I'm no expert, but I can only imagine a shot of an arrow would have a searing kind of pain)--it makes for more suspense, both of them being wounded--but yes, a niggling thought for me as I wrote this? why would he be shot at? accident or intentional? it remains to be seen I guess. cont'd
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kabuteng P.iNk k.
Date: 2/3/2014 10:27:00 AM
ok, i know my own quivering line is a bit vague, but with the revision, it's still a bit vague as to how the flesh wound appears? was it done by the hunter? or by the bear?
Date: 2/3/2014 10:16:00 AM
Hi! Ok, umm I see some revisions have been made (I have no qualms with the syllable changes) but yes, I do have some concerns over some of the changes, Debbie-- I hope it's ok if I point it out and Why... it sort of deviates from what I had in mind (and yup, I am keeping the previous sonnets in mind) hear me out pls and bear with me, it's gonna be kinda long-- oops, I know I keep going on about my captchas--they are freaky it says "mum" now, but nope, I won't be mum, haha
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kabuteng P.iNk k.
Date: 2/3/2014 1:09:00 PM
it definitely could ;) ok really going now...sorry if I kind of hogged this blog-- won't be here much tomorrow, that's why...oh one last, yes, it was "keeled" over but another party caused it to, it keeled over After the hunter is on the ground...thus the disbelief. sorry I explain myself too much, maybe I wasn't so clear with how I wrote things, sorry.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 2/3/2014 12:30:00 PM
maybe it mean Ma, mummy, mommy ;)
Date: 2/3/2014 9:46:00 AM
I'm waiting on Cyndi's invective for use of the "huntress" term. Just kidding...
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 2/3/2014 3:14:00 PM
nothing wrong with it nikko, Dee objects to being called a poetess, Dee is a person the comment was to her, the huntress is a fiction figure.
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Roy Jerden
Date: 2/3/2014 1:28:00 PM
Sorry, kind of an inside joke. I don't have a problem with huntress. However, if your poem is picked, and it is already established that there is a huntress, it might be more effective to not reveal that until close to the end of the complete crown, to add an element of surprise. Maybe we can get a name from Caleb, otherwise I suggest Diana, of course.
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kabuteng P.iNk k.
Date: 2/3/2014 10:47:00 AM
yes, she definitely is! please don't let me change the word "huntress"! What's wrong with the word "huntress"???
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 2/3/2014 10:03:00 AM
LOL Dee will let me be me ... and this woman is the hero! So I'm fine ;) ;)
Date: 2/3/2014 8:39:00 AM
I'd like you to NOTE the SEEING added to Kelly's we now know how Caleb is dressed for the weather and where his camp is and have a scene set up for more suspense BUT possible safety ... FROM the climax we must slowly roll to the end, a firm conclusion with a 2 line more or less moral?
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Date: 2/3/2014 7:08:00 AM
The two lines below now have only 9 syllables as both have been changed from what I submitted. The 2nd one now has the word "stands" instead of "descends", so this word is used in both of the last two lines of the poem. I don't see this an an improvement./ "wait his pounce upright and unafraid."/ "A deadly still stands upon these lands"
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Roy Jerden
Date: 2/3/2014 8:37:00 AM
OK, thanks. Fix when you can.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 2/3/2014 8:35:00 AM
sorry Roy as I said the cut and paste function of the blog isn't working & I had to hand type jumping back & forth front the Word program to the blog page, it was just a mistake on my part, let's see whose plot line is picked, I notified Soup of the blog page problem last night, it's not fixed yet.
Date: 2/3/2014 6:50:00 AM
Okies folks - which plot line are we going on with Roy's, Kelly's or Nikko's?
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Date: 2/3/2014 1:09:00 AM
Just to let everyone know, my original poem was inspired by Caleb's story, about how the forest can have a haunted feel to it, sometimes. So, I thought maybe this hunter from the past may be a ghost, and not a living person. I just thought it would be an interesting story...Debbie, I have read the comments below, and if you would like to add more action to my poem, then you may do so. :)
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Date: 2/3/2014 2:57:00 PM
Thank you, Debbie. I understand what you meant about my poem not fitting with the current storyline. And, I do understand why the changes had to be made to my poem. :)
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 2/3/2014 6:48:00 AM
Yes Kelly well done beautifully done, adding to it would simply be because of its placement in the whole thing, this would have worked without change for verse 3 or 4 & thank you so much TODAY WE DECIDE
Date: 2/2/2014 9:38:00 PM
I vote for Roy's. there is movement in it that gives coming writers something to start with toward a climax and finish. Joyce
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Date: 2/2/2014 7:43:00 PM
Nikko....love everything 'bout yer sonnet! Story...Action....Suspense...."these thoughts hound me as I clutch my knife close" for me, sounds smoother? Everything else...ACES! jimbo
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kabuteng P.iNk k.
Date: 2/3/2014 10:53:00 AM
Thanks so much, Jimbo, glad you enjoyed it :)! I really am kind of clueless when it comes to meter-- thanks for your suggestion but the end rhyme becomes different-- since I had "life" in the 2nd line, Debbie's revision was also good
Date: 2/2/2014 7:38:00 PM
"There, above me up the hill, a tree blind!"...Kelly ...love your story! Here's a thought for this line to smooth it out? Jimbo
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 2/3/2014 8:57:00 AM
Jimbo I try hard to keep the original intent & end rhyme patterns the poet has established, I think both line changes you have brought up do flow better but I think [hard to be sure constantly scrolling up & down] but you have changed the end rhyme & that snow balls!
Date: 2/2/2014 6:59:00 PM
Thank you Craig the blog page is not working so I haven't been able to add Nikko's revised verse
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Date: 2/2/2014 11:18:00 AM
Maybe I should have written about a yak? That's what my captcha is saying, that or my sonnet is yakky, whatever that could mean. I would honestly be happy if either Roy's or Kelly's versions were used, so much possibilities with theirs... I am happy as it is to have written something for this, thank yoiu! Off to sleep I go.
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kabuteng P.iNk k.
Date: 2/3/2014 10:55:00 AM
It is there, but oops, I think it could have been killed? Or maybe just badly wounded? That could be!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/2/2014 11:38:00 AM
oh, no, not a yak!! The bear has to be tHERE !!!
Date: 2/2/2014 10:39:00 AM
In the last one above...I prefer.."a snowy owl" drop the word "and" there is no such bird called "snow owl" but "snowy owl" YES! I have seen but one in my life up north in the woodlands...jimbo
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Date: 2/2/2014 10:39:00 AM
I like the revised poem with the bear back in the story. Hope K.D did not mind the revision. I hope either of these versions is chosen because the bear needs to be in the story, and not a dead bear but a threatening one!! There is one more being written?
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kabuteng P.iNk k.
Date: 2/2/2014 11:13:00 AM
just finished it, Andrea-- now I have droopy eyes....
Date: 2/2/2014 10:34:00 AM
In response to what was said about the August movie with Meryl Streep. Many movies are pointless but they should at least be INTERESTING. well, as an avid movie goer, I have to say, I agree with Debs on this one. This movie puts the DYS in Dysfunctional family. It had a few good parts .Surely the critics like it for SOME reason. Maybe for the acting!! but guys, the movie to see is LABOR DAY. OMG, best movie of the new year so far!!!
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Cyndi MacMillan
Date: 2/2/2014 3:24:00 PM
There are a few out there, Debs, who actually have lived outside the dysfunctional realm. Parents happily married, siblings all get along, no addictions, no abuse. I met some recently and I tried not to stare at them like they were aliens. LOL
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 2/2/2014 12:30:00 PM
yes wonderful acting by why would they think anyone would want to go THERE with someone elses family we all have our own and can barely take them 2 or 3 times a year!
Date: 2/2/2014 9:54:00 AM
I haven't much time. OH JOY family is visiting US... it rarely happens. We are almost always the ones packing up and traveling hours. Hey all, I am so moved reading down... seeing not only a crown being constructed, but PEERS and dear friends coming together and sharing a passion for word, putting art above all else, swaying with the breeze. Kudos to all who are trying on sonnets for size for the first time or are returning to a form they had once been smitten with, but had abandoned in that poetic drive for exploration. God bless Bet for her hard, exhaustive work, her passion for showing others the beauty in forms and for her love of all soupers... love to all. Happy Sunday xoxox
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 2/2/2014 10:01:00 AM
YIKES Dee family coming [gird your loins!] PS do not go see August in Osage County with Meryl Streep! OMG That has to be the biggest POINTLESS bum out family movie I have ever seen.
Date: 2/1/2014 9:18:00 PM
Isaiah stated...another's hand loosed the shaft....our man must survive...something must befall the others....terminal or not...matters not to me!
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James Marshall Goff
Date: 2/2/2014 10:31:00 AM
Schneikies....you make creative points...you smart Lady...; )
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 2/2/2014 7:00:00 AM
the main character is making that assumption because he thought he was alone in the woods now he is fearful he is NOT death can stalk in many forms [hypothermia, weather, a fall, a fever, no shelter, no food] & also death doesn't have to catch him YET
Date: 2/1/2014 9:11:00 PM
It would have been ok to say: my skill they're mocking (and also it gives exact rhyme with stalking!)
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 2/2/2014 6:56:00 AM
yup it was that way
Date: 2/1/2014 5:33:00 PM
Debbie has sanitized my first version, full of blood and guts and Indian warriors. I apparently went off the reservation. Anyway, I'll see what I can do. I'll likely make up a different poem with my original material.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/1/2014 9:08:00 PM
I am not like the other women, roy. I don't mind a story where a hunter kills three guys who were on his trail. But as they say, to fit with Caleb's first sonnet, it is better to make the fight end up between man and animal. I love the ending with the bear rising up!
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Roy Jerden
Date: 2/1/2014 7:51:00 PM
Actually, Debbie put in the knife work. I had one tomahawk throw, which likely wounded, no killing was involved. See my poem. http://www.poetrysoup.com/poems_poets/poem_detail.aspx?ID=539548
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 2/1/2014 7:02:00 PM
Hey Catie ..I took out the hatch scene ;) if we used the one above at least it doesn't SAY he killed them, they're just 'down' ;) ;) See Roy :P the gals would have headed for the hills if they read your version ;)
Date: 2/1/2014 11:32:00 AM
we don't know what he looks like, or how he's dressed, right now he's naked with muffler ;), a bow & arrow and a quiver - we know the woods has yews & bracken [ferns]- is he wet? is he dry? what does the woods smell like? does he smell of fear?
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/1/2014 9:06:00 PM
where do you get he is naked with muffler? what does that even mean?
Date: 1/31/2014 6:12:00 PM
This is getting exciting! I will get started on my sonnet, Debbie. I was just wondering, how much time do I have to send you my poem?
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/31/2014 6:51:00 PM
As soon as possible Kelly, the process is exciting for me too but wearing!
Date: 1/31/2014 4:44:00 PM
Deb...this needs to be published...you got sumthin' up yer sleeve?
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/31/2014 5:20:00 PM
It can't be hon the problems would be astronomical - too many don't take things they already think of as published [anything put up on Soup!] and then 7 people would need to sign off on it too much work for a publisher
Date: 1/31/2014 4:40:00 PM
Col...cool...cool! Incredibly exciting! This IS EPIC!
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Date: 1/31/2014 4:10:00 PM
Here we go!
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/31/2014 4:15:00 PM
yup lots of possibilities he could be woods crazy & imaging the man's following him? The storm in Mark's can still come in the next sonnet, the animals in Craig's can still stalk him
Date: 1/31/2014 3:47:00 PM
Please remember who is coming after you & I'm SURE these entries will be every bit as spectacular has the ones we have been getting. Even if your verse was not chosen for the Crown we want you here with your input. Every sonnet you do gets you closer to being a sonneteer!
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/31/2014 6:55:00 PM
a soupcon of sonneteers ;)
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James Marshall Goff
Date: 1/31/2014 4:42:00 PM
A soup sonneteer! I like it!

My Past Blog Posts

Fear - Eternal & Everlasting
Date Posted: 9/21/2017 5:03:00 PM
Fear Contest
Date Posted: 8/31/2017 8:05:00 PM
Pretty Please - haibun contest UPDATE
Date Posted: 8/7/2017 7:41:00 PM
Contests UPDATE
Date Posted: 7/26/2017 9:42:00 PM
Date Posted: 4/25/2017 3:57:00 PM
1984 Time Has Come Again
Date Posted: 4/1/2017 5:15:00 PM
You Say You Want a Revolution JUDGED
Date Posted: 1/22/2017 6:27:00 PM
Congratulations on the Angel Contest
Date Posted: 1/6/2017 4:31:00 PM
Angel Contest - Terzanelle
Date Posted: 12/15/2016 4:53:00 PM
Shout out to my Students!
Date Posted: 7/14/2016 5:21:00 PM
Become Part of an Anthology!
Date Posted: 5/9/2016 10:51:00 AM
Robert Lindley - Danetta Barney - Teppo The Sonneteers
Date Posted: 2/23/2016 3:24:00 PM
Beg. of Line Rhyme Sonnet Teppo Gren, Acrostic Sonnet & Sestina Sonnet Barney & Lindley
Date Posted: 2/19/2016 4:21:00 PM
ECHO Sonnet by Robert Lindley and CHAIN sonnet by Danetta Barney
Date Posted: 2/15/2016 3:29:00 PM
6 Days 6 Poets 6 SONNETS - Contest without FEE
Date Posted: 2/5/2016 4:07:00 PM
Biographies and Cover Letters Let's Get to Work
Date Posted: 1/18/2016 4:16:00 PM
THE TENTH POEM & stragelers
Date Posted: 1/6/2016 9:51:00 AM
Santa Around the World
Date Posted: 12/15/2015 8:04:00 PM
Why Not Give Haibun Today a TRY
Date Posted: 11/27/2015 5:08:00 PM
Amazon Contest
Date Posted: 11/25/2015 3:19:00 PM
Wonderful, Wonderful Verses in the Retourne Contest
Date Posted: 11/21/2015 7:33:00 PM
Get By with a Little News from Your Friends
Date Posted: 11/16/2015 7:55:00 PM
Free Give Away
Date Posted: 9/30/2015 8:11:00 AM
Hello SOUPers!
Date Posted: 9/24/2015 8:44:00 AM
I Need Advice-Help Me Learn to TWEET
Date Posted: 8/30/2015 4:20:00 PM

My Recent Poems

Date PostedPoemTitleFormCategories
7/30/2017 war and peace Free verseage,betrayal,truth,
7/27/2017 Mein Kampf My Struggle Haibunanxiety,racism,
7/24/2017 Displaced in Kathmandu Haibunanxiety,fear,war,
6/8/2017 haiku 1a Haikulife,
4/24/2017 Swingin on a Star Free verseallusion,art,beauty,
4/9/2017 A Lost Kind Returns Sonnetfreedom,heartbroken,loss,
3/28/2017 Behind the Architects Crystal Lens Verseart,travel,
3/3/2017 Shadow Puppets Sonnethumor,
2/14/2017 Daughter of Oak and Ash Pantoumcaregiving,love,racism,
1/26/2017 The Moons Yellow Eyes Haibunevil,farewell,
1/10/2017 High Noon at Karnak Free versehistory,
9/21/2016 Cairns Edge Lyricage,autumn,ocean,
9/10/2016 Prickly Heat Haibunlost love,
7/19/2016 Repeter Depuis le Debut Free verseart,marriage,
7/19/2016 It Is a Rose Sprung Free verseabuse,meaningful,race,rel
7/8/2016 The Sparrows of Dom St Peter Versechildren,faith,music,
5/13/2016 Golden Disks and Whale Clicks Free verseearth,eulogy,
5/1/2016 Cathedrale St Sauveur Aix en Provence, France Verseart,faith,
4/12/2016 Neap Tide Blank verseage,beauty,love,
4/2/2016 Red Sky over Cairo Free verseanxiety,fear,travel,
3/31/2016 Monet's Garden Villanelleart,travel,vacation,
1/31/2016 A Hail Mary Pass to the Twenty-First Century Free verseanger,angst,bullying,fear
1/31/2016 Breathless Prose Poetryhope,
1/29/2016 The Guardian at the Gate Ekphrasismyth,
1/16/2016 You Gotta Have Heart Ekphrasisart,
1/6/2016 Spectors of Doom Shapeangst,war,
1/5/2016 Blood Masks the Lea Rondeaudeath,war,
1/4/2016 A Swallows Tears Sonnetaddiction,suicide,
12/14/2015 A Blooded, Virgin, Night Free versepain,
12/5/2015 Madelaine's Chalice Versedevotion,love,
11/29/2015 Blessed Be Versenature,
11/29/2015 Ho-Ho-Ho Haibunholiday,
11/17/2015 Golden Disks and Whale Clicks Free versespace,
11/9/2015 Spare Change Coupletseasons,
10/29/2015 Cymbals of Winter Free verseurban,wind,winter,
10/28/2015 fingertips Haikusilence,
10/28/2015 Death Undignified, Fort Laramie 1860 Sestinamemory,
10/27/2015 A Kneaded Life Haibunage,dream,love,
10/23/2015 The Sowing Free verseirony,violence,women,
10/21/2015 When Madness Rides on Moonlight Sestinaanxiety,art,depression,su
10/19/2015 St Brigids Well Sonnetchildren,spiritual,women,
10/13/2015 Lurkers at the Threshold Lovecraft Credited Verseanalogy,universe,
10/12/2015 Gobsmacked Gams Terzanelleallegory,art,childhood,
10/12/2015 To Dumb to Lay Down Free verseallegory,
9/20/2015 verbous and obscure Blitzallusion,
9/11/2015 Put the Past Aside - The Dark Side of the Moon Versedepression,
8/23/2015 The Melting Pot Prosechildhood,
8/8/2015 howl beyond reason Blitzanalogy,crazy,word play,
8/7/2015 under and over Blitzfear,universe,
8/5/2015 Vive la Liberte Free verseviolence,visionary,war,
8/3/2015 Underground Art Montmartre Free verseart,
7/23/2015 Maudlin Mary Ekphrasisallusion,symbolism,woman,
7/20/2015 Fire-Crackers Acrosticdeath,war,
7/20/2015 Mary's Shrift Free versedevotion,discrimination,
7/20/2015 Stoned Free verseanger,
7/20/2015 Top Dressing Free versespring,daffodils,
7/13/2015 Just Desserts and Appetizers Haibunboat,fun,summer,
7/7/2015 Brooding Rooted Free versebeauty,blessing,
6/26/2015 Summer Stews Sijofun,
6/19/2015 False Love Quintain (English)lost love,
6/14/2015 Risen from the Foam Ottava rimaallegory,beauty,love,
6/4/2015 Cling Sijoadventure,
5/14/2015 The Mirage Free versebeauty,family,
4/29/2015 A Day in the Life of a Bag of Potatoes Free versechange,
4/28/2015 Spider Robinson's Plug In Sijoaddiction,
4/27/2015 The Sandy Shoal Free versedeath,
4/26/2015 A Stream of Laughter Free versechildren,nature,
4/25/2015 Boxed In Free verseabsence,beauty,love,
4/21/2015 Pick Your Poison Acrosticabuse,death,
4/20/2015 The Tall Ships Burn Villanelleart,
4/19/2015 I, ICON Acrosticself,
4/17/2015 The Song of Deborah Bioallegory,
4/15/2015 Barred Camp Sonnetfunny,
4/15/2015 Cross Pollination Versefaith,nature,
4/13/2015 The Wayward Child Pantoumfairy,
4/12/2015 Straw Men Free verseallusion,planet,
4/5/2015 Elemental Answers to Being Verselife,
4/3/2015 Mother's Days Acrosticmother,
4/3/2015 A Crown of Thorns Crown of Sonnetsbeauty,betrayal,identity,
4/2/2015 Sun and Life Painting by Frida Kahlo 1947 Free verseart,
3/31/2015 AFI 9th Art Wave Tankaart,
3/31/2015 AFI TAG ART Tankaart,
3/28/2015 Van Gogh sans une Oreille Free verseart,
3/27/2015 School's Out Haibunkiss,snow,
3/21/2015 The Teetotaler Terzanellememory,
3/20/2015 The Sin and God Within Verseallusion,faith,forgivenes
3/20/2015 A Penny for My Thoughts Sonnetcreation,
3/18/2015 What Dreams Are Made Of Versefear,night,
3/15/2015 Steamers Free versesummer,
3/10/2015 A Mother Drawn Free versebeauty,birth,earth,faith,
3/9/2015 The Precipice Free verseart,
3/5/2015 The Score Free verseloneliness,night,
3/3/2015 Moonlight Serenade Haibunsensual,
3/1/2015 Trumpets of the Dawn Sonnetflower,
3/1/2015 Femme Fatales Balladbirth,mythology,woman,
2/28/2015 The Doldrums of March Free verseloneliness,daffodils,
2/26/2015 Death Tolls Free versebeach,beauty,bird,ocean,
2/24/2015 Forgotten Valentine Haibunsad,
2/21/2015 Ice Castings Pantoumbeauty,
2/20/2015 Amusing Free versemuse,

My Photos

Fav Poems

God Free verselife,mystery,
Hard Times Cowboycowboy-western,family,fun
For Things Once Counted Rhymeintrospection,loss,uplift
Petal Verselove,
Defender of the Wastes Free verseart,life,parody,world,
Birth Imagismchildhood,life
this is why i woo words Verseart,inspirational,philoso
Forbear Free versesad,
Belongings Rhymeloss,love,me,mother,
Gold Fever Free versefaithfaith,political,pers
Splattered I do not know?life
Echo Quatrainlost lovewords,love,
Bells (after Poe) Lyricpassion
Respectfully, Emily Dickinson Lyricintrospection
Give the End Back to the Beginning Free versededication,faithme,
The Bruised and Rotting Pear Coupletfaith,hope
fly Free verseanimals
ABC's for a Young Captain ABClife
Not Entirely About Living In New York Free verselifeworld,light,light,
Woodcutter I do not know?warold,old,
Dreams Free versefaith,forgiveness
A Feed of Chips Narrativefunny
Weep O Willows Versedeath
Harlem Blues Free verseblack-african amerchildre
Summers Everlasting Free versenostalgia
EASTER IVY Narrativefriendshipeaster,cousin,
End of days Rhymeinspirational,lifeme,war,
Past-Life Nightmare Narrativemystery,autumn,
I dream of you (to JEW) Free verseimagination,lovenight,swe
jellyfish back strophe Imagismallegory,nature,on writin
Disposable Wisdom Rhymeage,cat,life,wisdom,world
Loneliness Rhymeintrospection,life
Remission (In Memory of William Watt). Elegybrother,death,nostalgiawo
The Day That Died Forever Free verseadventure,angst,art,confu
Heritage Quatrainadventure,cowboy-western,
Summer Matinee Narrativebrother,me,
The Moon and I I do not know?hope,life,love,nature,pea
Seeking, Searching Free verseimaginationlove,universe,
BEFORE SPRING CAME Narrativeadventure,animals,childho
Pledge Sonnetdevotion
Wild Cherries Free versedevotion,nature,nostalgia
Words from the Oracle Layallegory,philosophy
Science Free verse 
Mona Lisa resembles Chokaart
AND WITH MERRIEST SPIRIT Quintain (English)faith,father,holiday,insp
Cotton-Pickin' Paradise Versechildhood,life,nostalgia,
Where The Sycamore Grew Narrativeautumn,family,house,life,
Larks Free versedeath,devotion,imaginatio
Big Bang Limerickfunny,science,
winter (do not forget among the loss of flowers) me Free verse 
Violin Personificationdeath,love,rose,
Let I do not know?loveme,me,
He Was Smoking Hot I do not know?funny
Alabaster Night Free versenature,planet,sea,
Haunted Orb Haikufantasy,nature
This Night Sonnet 
Tombstones & Teacups Rhymeallegory,childhood,death,
Today Not Tomorrow Free versededication,depression,gir
Years Of The Rose Free verselost love,loveday,
The Joy that Sweetly Stays Free verse 
Cinder Girl Rhyme 
Biography (Thesis Statement) Versehistory,life,philosophyli
Figure Fusion Verseart,sports
Dancing Bird - with video link Free verseanimals,introspection,nat
Poem for a sensuous poet Free versefantasy,on writing and wo
The Road Walked Down Through the Years Rhymelife,on writing and words
The Iceman Cometh! Rhymenostalgia
He says/ She says Narrativelife
I've seen so many Sonnetintrospectionnight,night,
Searching for Michelangelo Free verseart,hope,life,people,imag
Indifference Free verse 
realisation of self (War Child) Free verseme,me,
Reporting Live On The Soup (Colorado) Rhymefunnyme,me,
Late at night Lyricimaginationme,fear,me,
Reverencing Nature Balladfaith,naturenature,heart,
Dreams Coupletimagination
Simple Pleasures Rhymehappinesssummer,summer,
I Exist Pantoumintrospectionlife,me,
Madrid: Circa 1974 Blank versenostalgia,travel,
Magnolia Song Free verselove,romance,
yellow bus roars through Haikuallegory,nature,places
Ethel's Remedies Rhymefunny,people
A Dream In The Mist Narrativefantasy,imagination,natur
volga 1 - 3 Prose Poetryfantasy
Mama's Cleaning Quatrainintrospection,life,mother
WAKING HEART'S VEINS Free verseangst,hope,
Revelation Free verseimagination,lifesong,epic
Sports Limerick Limerickfunny
The Snowflake Italian Sonnetromance,
Jack Lyricintrospectionlife,
The Ghost That Travels Far Personificationnature
Kite Flying - Test Free verseallegory,art,imagination,
Dining with Crow Rhymeanimals
Beauty, yes Sijohope,imagination,philosop
Smart and Final Prose Prose Poetrypeoplepeople,red,city,peo
Tiger in the Sea Rispettoadventure,animals,seame,t
A Song of Michael's Rose Narrativeme,
Where my True Love Lives - A Ballade Balladedeath,love,ocean,
Into Morning Free verselife
Play Me A Teardrop Rhymelost loveme,me,

Fav Poets

Carolyn Devonshire United States Flag United States Read
Carrie Richards United States Flag United States Read
Deirdre Omaidin Ireland Flag Ireland Read
Andrew Crisci United States Flag United States Read
Jim Fish United States Flag United States Read
Nigel Fawcett Italy Flag Italy Read
L'nass Shango United States Flag United States Read
Andrea Dietrich United States Flag United States Read
Robert L. Hinshaw United States Flag United States Read
Chris D. Aechtner Canada Flag Canada Read
nette onclaud Philippines Flag Philippines Read
Sidney Beck Russian Federation Flag Russian Federation Read
Sami Al-khalili Canada Flag Canada Read
Charlotte Jade Puddifoot United Kingdom Flag United Kingdom Read
Cyndi MacMillan Canada Flag Canada Read
T Wignesan France Flag France Read
Elaine George Canada Flag Canada Read
sharon Winter United States Flag United States Read
Michael Smith United States Flag United States Read
jack horne United Kingdom Flag United Kingdom Read
Paul Callus Malta Flag Malta Read
Charmaine Chircop Malta Flag Malta Read
James Marshall Goff United States Flag United States Read
Joann Grisetti United States Flag United States Read
Ravindra K Kapoor India Flag India Read
Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Philippines Flag Philippines Read
kathryn collins United States Flag United States Read
Teppo Gren Finland Flag Finland Read
Michael Jordan United States Flag United States Read