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The water lulls, soft, warm, salt-sweet like dew on bronze skin. In chains the boat at anchor rocks, cradled in a summer sea. Water accepts us, frail, human, each rise of sultry sand beneath the waves a blossom of delight. Suited to an au natural moment; we wade. Barely receiving permission to be bare, our legs and arms wave and waver beneath and through a languid sea. Ten toes curl and prod seeking dinner. The water in its abundance yields, each mollusk's breath rises a stream of silver bubbles exhaled marking their bed leading the diners to their dinner fare. First Publication at Eskimo Pie Summer 2013

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Date: 4/1/2015 1:53:00 PM
I really smiled through this one, Debbie. Reprobate that I am, the desired "au naturel moment" appeals to me. And then there is the last line of the poem--with the dinners about to consume their diners, really getting to me--that is a a choice piece of comic bewilderment that brought out an audible chuckle!
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Robert Ludden
Date: 4/1/2015 2:21:00 PM
sounds like fun
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 4/1/2015 2:01:00 PM
You have to watch me on breath & breathe too! Thanks
Date: 3/22/2015 2:21:00 AM
This poem reminds me of short-stories in my childhood about our parents in their youth and their friends having trysts at night to gather mollusks. For me it's pure romance, not the boy/girl type...but the type that speaks so much more. Your write captivate innocence and trust in nature and in God to provide for sustenance, symbolized by bountiful mollusks. I love this, Debbie. Sorry it took a while to visit. I wanted to have ample time and enjoy your creative writes. Hugs! Kim
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Date: 3/21/2015 8:02:00 AM
Beautiful! Your words drew me in. I could almost feel the waves over my barefeet. Thank you for your comment and advice on Are You Dead.
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Date: 3/18/2015 7:49:00 PM
This is an amazing piece Debbie. I love the originality contained in your verse. I am in awe! 7
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Date: 3/18/2015 4:59:00 PM
I love when you write like this. so beautiful, Debs! If I wrote this and used rhyme, that magazine probably would not even look at me.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 3/18/2015 5:05:00 PM
They seem to be kind of OK with pantoums, villanelle, teranzelle
Date: 3/16/2015 2:43:00 PM
Debbie, a beautifully written free verse with wonderful words and lines, well done and thanks for visiting my poetry . . .
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Date: 3/16/2015 10:39:00 AM
Great write Debbie...the first stanza is my favorite...hugs
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Date: 3/15/2015 11:20:00 PM
Beautiful pen Debbie! I truly enjoyed reading your piece, my dear friend. A 7 from me ! Have a lovely day! In his light! God bless! :) Love n' hugs! xxx D.
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