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Welcome KMart shoppers blares through the air as a mosh pit of greedy Holiday buggers hurl themselves through the glass and aluminum doors—Obese bodies press (children jammed between white-bread). Trolls in strollers screech in pain and howls of Christ mask laughter. The shopper's feet bombard the glossy, line-oh-lea-ummm floors as the overwrought, over-privileged, truffle sniffers, poke through the hundred and fifty percent marked-up—mark-downs, for things they already own in triplicate. 

canned music
jiggle bells the room:
torn wrapping paper

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Date: 1/3/2016 6:46:00 AM
:) - Happy New Year, Debbie :) - Best wishes and hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/3/2016 6:52:00 AM
Happy New year to you as well Anne Lise!
Date: 12/24/2015 3:33:00 PM
I liked this one when I read it earlier..Congrats on your win..Sara
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Date: 12/21/2015 7:35:00 AM
Love this Debbie one of my favs and very funny!!
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Date: 12/20/2015 7:24:00 PM
Debbie, Congrats on your Haibun Free-Style win. ~LINDA~
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Date: 12/20/2015 12:48:00 PM
I never doubt your ability to write Haibun. Unfortunately for this contest though I was trying to launch a new form, the Haibun FreeStyle, in which the poem can be anything but a haiku. And your wonderful entry with it's cynicism, and humour, looks to me to end with a haiku. As always though, love your work.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 12/20/2015 3:49:00 PM
No problem Scott I miss you b home soon
Date: 12/20/2015 11:14:00 AM
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Date: 12/5/2015 8:40:00 AM
Very descriptive work..Like the use of metaphors..Truffle sniffers takes the cake..I am one of those truffle sniffers..LOL..We don't have a K-Mart anymore but I am sure that Wally World is just as bad..Sara
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Date: 12/1/2015 7:31:00 PM
Debbie, you captured it perfectly, I just hate the commercial aspect of Christmas, the meaning is totally lost, you deserve a big fat 7 for this ~
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Date: 11/29/2015 5:56:00 PM
HI DG, No thank you, I will stay home. Order online, glad to read. LINDA
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