A Feed of Chips

Jaws bulging, saliva drooling
Johhnie stood at the street corner
Digging furiously into his soggy bag
Large fleshy chips swimming in vinegar
Delighting his watering mouth.
Rain drizzling on his tired body
Johhnie momentarily oblivious to all,
His tedious life, his electricity bill,
His sick terrier, his drenched overcoat
And even his foul tempered wife
Who he could hear re-echoing
High cholesterol, high cholesterol, cholesterol..
For one ten minute period
He allowed himself the indulgence
That surpasses all on a hungry day
A good feed from the local chipper.
As he licked each finger one by one
Johhnie exuded a great contentment.
Retracing his steps, he shook the wet from his cap
And returned to the shop for a jumbo sausage.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 12/30/2009 10:02:00 PM
belly laugh.......better than Beckett!
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Date: 3/10/2009 3:24:00 PM
I LOVEEEEEEE it! I want it in my contest. Don't tell. 5 senses 5 elements (you don't have to use them all LOL) So of course you have Taste (saliva, drool) Touch (soggy, licked) Sight (bulging jaw) now Elements you have Water (of course!) Earth (salt) Fire (Johnny all animals are Fire energy) ...just marvelous! light & Love
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Date: 3/10/2009 9:59:00 AM
The imagery is this is great. My mouth actually started watering! One day of indulgence is an ok thing as long as your good most of the time! Thanj you for your thoughtful comment. Ahh, writers block! That, I can live without! Love, Robin
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Date: 2/22/2009 3:31:00 PM
Oh boy do I miss dripping, soggy, greasy chips!!! Not french fries - CHIPS!!!!!!!!! ...so vivid I could TASTE IT! BRAVO Deirdre!! Best wishes, Keith
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Date: 2/20/2009 2:59:00 PM
Deirdre, I can almost taste those "large fleshy chips." It's a bit of an ode to the angst of dieting, and I can hear his wife warning Johnnie about the cholesterol. Love that he ignored her and "returned to the shop for a jumbo sausage." Great writing, dear. Love, Carolyn
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