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Held inside, my third eye flies through the bars 
of this cage. On wing am I, mated I fly,
my spirit undaunted by this earthly stage.
Hollow bones and hallowed heart in play,
I find repast within the air though bars 
contain this sage. With tearful eyes, I fly. 
With brazen line, I seek to find a stage, 
to portray the core of me, swallows play. 
A soul who seeks cannot be stayed by bars.
Great Spirit gifts each man a way to fly,
a bridge between his eyes onto the stage
the road open, to the place where Gods play.
Mother, mother dear, I can't live this way.
I drown in dreams and drink, I cannot stay.

After:Swallows by Benjamin Chee Chee 1974

*Sestina Sonnet
First published by Ekphrastic: Writing and Art on Art - November 2015

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 8/1/2016 8:46:00 AM
Hi Debbie, this is a beautiful and deep Sonnet. Your words show each tear Debbie. An excellent Sonnet, brilliant content. Sestina Sonnet, i may try that style sometime. Well, have a good day Debbie. Hugs....Mike. XX. A definite seven.
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Date: 3/2/2016 7:56:00 AM
What a lovely page with a profound group of words. I am loving every aspect of this piece. Thumbs up friend and a definite 7
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Date: 1/9/2016 12:42:00 PM
Deep, strong and beautiful sonnet my friend. "Hollow bones and hallowed heart in play. Mother, mother dear, I can't live this way." My favorite verses, that speak to me due to my once stormy relationship with my mother! Tremendous poem..
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/9/2016 3:33:00 PM
It's a true story Robert
Date: 1/6/2016 9:47:00 AM
Very beautiful and touching sonnet, Debbie. T.J
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Date: 1/5/2016 9:13:00 AM
A swallow driven to such desperate plea...! Was her life such a prison, Deb? This reminds me of Sylvia Plath. Awesome write as always. PS. Do you tutor poet wannabes? :-)
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KP Nunez
Date: 1/5/2016 10:36:00 AM
Oh, sorry...I missed the connection. Thanks for the info. About that other thing...soupmail. :-)
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/5/2016 9:56:00 AM
Kim I would love to tutor! Might I earn a small amount for this? I could use the funds. Kim above is what happened to the artist Ben Chee Chee
Date: 1/5/2016 9:09:00 AM
This must be one of the best Sonnets I've ever read here in soup! :)
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Date: 1/5/2016 8:41:00 AM
The free spirit calls, Debbie! I am sure that were I to take a closer look now I would see an empty cage with an open door...This sonnet form tempts me to try it out. ~ Regards // paul
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Date: 1/5/2016 7:53:00 AM
Lovely, Debbie. Reminded me of the Dale carnegie quote. Viv x
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Date: 1/5/2016 2:11:00 AM
How creative Debbie.. touchingly beautiful!!
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Date: 1/4/2016 2:15:00 PM
Great Spirit gifts each man a way to fly/ A soul who seeks cannot be stayed by bars... So love these two lines , they say so much. An excellent post sweet ma.
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Date: 1/4/2016 11:39:00 AM
WOW, now that's a poem. DG, I've never read such gifted metaphors. A deep write by the way. hope the ending means you don't like that state of mind. Awesome. SKAT
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 1/4/2016 2:49:00 PM
The artist killed himself in jail SKAT. I'm fine :)