Just Desserts and Appetizers

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The sherbet orange light of a fall morning in Connecticut crackles with the scent pine. The lake’s parking lot overflows by nine thirty. The S.U.V.s park in a haphazard manor. The boat crew’s flight from reality – or the emersion in it—began in earnest hours ago. Neon-colored, plastic, kayaks adorn the grass skirt before the water’s edge. Dressed in shades as lively as their hulls, the small craft owners match themselves up with their water-horses. They shove off at random intervals.

geese
land and take off –
squirrels scamper

Disturbed, Lake Lillinonah ripples with the dip of paddle and the morning breeze. The cotton wood trees chatter to passing egrets. The smell of powerboats, only slightly mars the bathing-beauty glow of the day. Days end will find a conga line of cars pulling in to a local dairy for homemade ice-cream. Truly, God is in his heaven and all is right – at least here, for these few hours—in the world.

pink tipped tongues
lick sprinkles from the cone:
eyes roll

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 8/29/2015 9:05:00 AM
The weekend has come, and I'm tweeting the winners. Hope you get a few more reads. Again thanks for supporting this contest.
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Date: 8/29/2015 9:10:00 AM
Thank you for your support ALWAYS!
Date: 8/23/2015 9:48:00 AM
I remember reading this several times. I wonder how come I have not left any comment...but this is indeed a lovely haibun, Debbie.The imagery is so sharp and defined. Congratulations! kim
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Date: 8/22/2015 8:44:00 PM
Wonderful write Debbie...Congrats on your win
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Date: 8/22/2015 12:31:00 PM
The cotton wood trees chatter to passing egrets... Wonderful write and congrats on the win... Regards, Bobby
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Date: 8/22/2015 10:46:00 AM
Lovely poem, Debbie. Love the title.
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Date: 8/21/2015 10:17:00 AM
This is one great haibun, I like to go kayaking too, which helped me connect. I really enjoy how you painted this one. My mind is filled with the lake and those on it. Thanks for being part of this competition.
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Date: 8/21/2015 1:45:00 AM
Congrats on wonderful win Debbie with this amazing haibun!
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Date: 8/21/2015 12:33:00 AM
Debbie my huge congratulations!!!! I echo my previous comment... ~Olive Eloisa =`)
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Date: 8/20/2015 8:25:00 PM
Debbie these are the days you file away in hopes of recreating. Well done...as usual.
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Date: 8/20/2015 6:33:00 PM
Debbie, Congratulations on the win. SKAT
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Date: 8/20/2015 12:38:00 PM
Debbie, congratulations on your win and a 7 the image you have great you have brought to life in this peace. Hugs Eve
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Date: 8/20/2015 12:20:00 PM
Ahh!! Great quality work!! Way to go with this win..Congrats..Sara
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Date: 8/20/2015 11:49:00 AM
Dropping back with my congrats Debbie:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 8/4/2015 3:52:00 AM
I feasted on your amazing imagery Debbie - wow I hope to be able to write like this one day ... one day .... Fabulous write:-) hugs Jan xx 7
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Date: 7/20/2015 8:31:00 AM
Ahh~~~ We in the south now enjoy peach and strawberry ice cream at the peach packing shed..Enjoyed reading your very descriptive work..Thanks for the visit to my p age..Have a lovely day..Sara
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Date: 7/19/2015 10:42:00 PM
What a delightful feast of images. This is an interesting form and you are brilliant with it. Hope you are happy and well. SuZ
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Date: 7/19/2015 9:24:00 PM
Debbi, I enjoyed your Haibun very much, so visual and inviting, 7 and thanks for visiting my poem sisters...
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Date: 7/18/2015 7:31:00 AM
Poetically descriptive, captivating and adventurous, dear Debbie. Excellent piece of work!
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Date: 7/18/2015 4:31:00 AM
A lovely write and fascinating write here. Excellent.........A.M
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Date: 7/17/2015 4:16:00 PM
Hi Debbie! You narrate and describe with ease, filling the reader's mind with pleasure. All our senses are activated. Top marks to you. All the best...paul
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Date: 7/17/2015 2:35:00 PM
Nobody does it better !!! All's definitely right in the world of poetry!
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Date: 7/17/2015 10:10:00 AM
Your words play within our hearts and their magic comes alive and fills us with warm feelings. Emile.
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Date: 7/17/2015 8:56:00 AM
It sounds like a perfect afternoon. This is what I love about living near a lake and having an abundance of sunshine.
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Date: 7/17/2015 6:29:00 AM
Debbie, i like best the second part... ut sp like the first line of the first!!!! Still am thinking of a good topic here but i like to give a try in this form!!~Olive Eloisa :)
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Date: 7/16/2015 3:02:00 PM
I am not familiar with this form, Debbie, but I love the picture you have imprinted that lingers on in my mind. It has been along time, but I am back for a while. Elaine
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