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The Mirage

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Boxed lures lay: belly-up, forlorn, caste off sinkers,
line-less, relics of peaceful bygone days. In vaudevillian 
colors of corny-orange: their hooks rusty, their prongs
dulled in an unalluring huddle; the bait lies unused

their drawers lowered like fathers, they recall summer 
days with their flies down fondly. The boxed lures lay 
belly-up forlorn, caste offs: boat-less, rod-less reminders
upon rickety tables, these tabled reveries of mist and sun

conjoin in conjugal tension. Soon sold to gen-millennial
to: decorate walls, ghost grandparents, mind-meld the screen
dancers to the much missed external world. Where the
fish-belly white daughters and sons could sun with fathers

disconnected from the umbilical cord of the Protestant 
work ethic. Box baited: belly-up, forlorn, these caste off sinkers
line-less amble past the detritus of peaceful bygone days
when seas and lakes and ponds provided food for the soul.


Published in the April 2015 issue of Eunoia Review

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 6/14/2015 12:29:00 PM
FYI, the group poem is now finished.
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Date: 6/14/2015 12:28:00 PM
Great picture and poem. I enjoyed reading this one again.
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Date: 6/4/2015 9:23:00 AM
this poem, as my imagination going and my attention also,,,is this a green thing, over fishing, thats how i perceived this wonderful poem,,if wrong no problem i'm often am...i miss your poetry debbie, in another world i would be glued to it if only to learn something worth while...
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 6/4/2015 12:56:00 PM
Harry how sweet you are yes on 1 level it's about fond memories of fishing with Dad, on another level it's about lures & what men are lured by and a side comment as indicated by the title is [how much of the pleasant happy memries are real and how much haave I elaberated on to give my childhood which is full of turmoil a safe harbour - how much is simply an imagined mirage?
Date: 6/3/2015 8:13:00 PM
I did, I left a message and it all so posted on my facebook page for those that love fishing
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Date: 6/3/2015 4:44:00 PM
love the photo :-) how beautiful
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 6/3/2015 7:49:00 PM
do go to the artist blog site so much beauty & so much great writing! You will love it!
Date: 6/3/2015 1:25:00 PM
Great poem, those rusty hooks, line, poles, and lurs are all sitting waiting for some one to take them out but hubby doesn't have the energy anymore :~) hugs eve
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 6/3/2015 2:55:00 PM
yup for lots of things aye?
Date: 6/1/2015 10:15:00 AM
Debbie, back to read this beautiful poem once more, well done and I also want to thank you so much for my win in your Summertime Fun contest, that sure was fun writing that poem . . .
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Date: 5/30/2015 2:30:00 AM
Woah sublime freeverse, great diction and extraordinary for me. I admire the figuratives such as 'disconectd from the umbilical cord' and food for the soul. Great to read frm u again. Warmest regards.
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Date: 5/27/2015 6:59:00 PM
Deb, this brilliant intellectual piece evolves with subtle nuances into a plethora of avenues that will keep me busy for hours contemplating. EXCELLENT!
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Date: 5/27/2015 1:15:00 PM
This doesn't say much for the computer-television set, extends even to the hard core rock kids. You have a wonderful, complicated way of kicking modern times in the ass. Love it. Love, daver
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Date: 5/27/2015 12:36:00 PM
you got me hook, line, and sinker.. cheers for being published, debbie.. SOUPiE!.. huggs
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Date: 5/27/2015 9:47:00 AM
I can tell that a lot of work and thought went into this poem, Debbie. Read it a few times, trying not to miss out on hidden references. Thank you for the help you provided with your replies! All the best.// paul
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Date: 5/26/2015 6:56:00 PM
Great poem on a the paraphernalia of fishingon . Congratulations on publication!
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Date: 5/26/2015 9:43:00 AM
Hey Debbie, I wanted to thank you for selecting my poem "Baseball" as one of the winners of your "Batter Up" contest. I found out that I had placed because a few of the soupers were congratulating me on the win and I didn't know what they were talking about because I hadn't received a comment or heard anything from you. I thank you for thinking so highly of my poem. It means a lot to me. Be Blessed, Neva
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Date: 5/25/2015 11:55:00 PM
Huge congrats on this poem's publication. I read it three times and got some of it but only understood all after reading your replies to the other posters here. The title itself is a big pointer to much of the hidden message. A7
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 5/26/2015 9:10:00 AM
yes Robert one doesn't want to be too blatent & it still is enjoyable even if the first level is all the reader gets ;)
Date: 5/25/2015 3:39:00 PM
A very artistic one,Debs. BIG congrats in that publication. I promise to get around to giving you a blurb by the end of the week. Right now just hurrying while hubbie is occupied in the garage!
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Date: 5/25/2015 9:59:00 AM
Only you could hook my attention with such a piece of art as this. Wow.....you get better and better with each one.... Such a simple object comes to life, and I agree with Mystic....this is a keeper for anyone, but especially for an angler who loves the sport! Food for the soul of any fisherman! (And thank you once again, for being my mentor.....and giving such encouragement to my own writes! :)
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Date: 5/23/2015 2:56:00 AM
Wow! Excellent write, I like all the lines,the used of metaphor flow in lines and created vivid picture in my eyes,congratulate on being published.
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Date: 5/21/2015 8:22:00 AM
I like the mood this created. It is a good metophor, it makes me think of my dad. He married 4 times and was a womanizer. To this very day I hate fishing. Time alone with him was always a unique experience. Congratulations on being published.
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Date: 5/17/2015 5:47:00 PM
Whoaaa! Just spent 1/2 hr. at his blog....you're right...my kinda stuff....the Calvinists' ideas....where he finds inspiration (ordered book by Anthony Storr) took as much in as I could...saved to quick hit on this device...thanks! Deb!
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 5/17/2015 7:33:00 PM
I knew you'd appreciate his point of view if you go back tell him I sent ya!
Date: 5/16/2015 9:18:00 PM
Wow! Beautiful.....and so looks like my Pops metal tackle box of heirlooms! Bassarinos....slip-sinkers (he made his own)...frog immitators....etc...cool art....nostalgic poem....worthy of wide viewership it garners! mostly with my free time now I hike & throw boomerangs I collect from all over the world....listenin' right now to the "Minnesota Orchestra" under the direction of my favorite Conductor Osmo Vanska...playing in Havana Cuba for the first time since 1929... jim
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 5/16/2015 10:14:00 PM
Go to the artists website you will love his blog!
Date: 5/16/2015 8:58:00 AM
Such nostalgia in this poem, Debbie. Except for those directly involved with ball games, outdoor leisure activities have become increasingly forgotten part of life, much more with line-fishing. This reminds me of your previous write on couch potatoes...haha. Loved this. A 7.
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Date: 5/15/2015 6:46:00 PM
Debbie, I think your poem is truly wonderful,7 reminds me of my father somehow as he loved to fish and I remember all the lures in his fish box and I want to thank you so much for my terrific win in your Tam Lin contest, I am honoured
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 5/15/2015 7:35:00 PM
Constance you did what I asked for related that experience from the 1500-1600 to today ... some things never change!
Date: 5/15/2015 1:10:00 PM
Debbie this poem should be in the " workshop" ... ( only kidding ...) Glad Becca asked her question ... Makes perfect sense now ... Great poem ! Bev :)
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 5/15/2015 3:31:00 PM
You don't want to say those things too explitedly IF it goes over the readers heads - lucky them! - it is enjoyable on the superfical level of a daughter missing the alone time on the lake with Dad.
Date: 5/14/2015 9:30:00 AM
Thank you so much, Deborah, for posting my art with your engaging poem. I'm proud to be play a rold in this creative voice.
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david tripp
Date: 5/14/2015 9:31:00 AM
Can't type! "Role", not "rold"!