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Jack

She spent
her evening with a
friend named Jack.  Jack
stood out like a volunteer, making
no apology for himself (though he forward
marched through her life like a
soldier's foot-stomp parade,
minus pomp minus
circumstance).

Jack always
took his possessions at
first ever impulse, that is
to say he was the type of
man who could "carpe diem" with the
best of them.  She agreed.  "Play
the horn play the drum", she
thought, while given
to him.

Jack always
left his possessions at
second glance.  He was the
nothing-to-show-for-it type of man.
She did not want him to return. She did
want him to return.  He did not
want to come home.  He
did want to come
home.

She spent
her evening without
a friend named Jack, who
steals the thunder.  Jack sat on the
shelf like streamlined vodka.  Apologetically,
he backward marched a Saint Louis
funeral-in-reverse.  She
then nursed a wound
to remember
him by.

(Author:  Chad Wood -  This poem was entered in the contest "Create Your Own Form, Maybe
 ?" sponsored by Constance ~ A Rambling Poet! ~ Form:  Call this the "In and Out" form.  The
 stanzas have ten lines each, which expand and retract, with subject matter about 'something 
in life that comes and goes', can be as many or as few stanzas long as wished)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 11/23/2010 2:49:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in this fine contest..Sara
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Date: 11/15/2010 8:54:00 PM
quite an interesting invented form, Chad. Very creative and congratulations on your win. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 11/15/2010 10:10:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Chad in Constance's contest "Create Your Own Form, Maybe?". Love, Carol
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Date: 11/15/2010 12:01:00 AM
Chad ... Congrats on big win in the contest....Luv/Best wishes.....Hitendra Mehta
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Date: 11/14/2010 1:46:00 PM
Great inventive style. congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 11/14/2010 8:55:00 AM
Chad, this was one of the best entries I saw in the contest. Congratulations on your placement. Excellent work! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 11/14/2010 4:23:00 AM
Congratulations on this well deserved win, chad
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Date: 11/4/2010 10:27:00 AM
Gripping and clever poem, Chad. She's better off without someone like "Jack" adding confusion and pain to her life. What a unique form you chose for your poem. It works so well. Excellent! You should give this form a name and enter it in Constance's contest for new verse forms. I think it would be a standout! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 11/3/2010 11:00:00 AM
Thank you for posting your poetry that we may all enjoy it here at PoetrySoup Chad. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/3/2010 7:54:00 AM
Good work!! Witty!!
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Date: 11/3/2010 6:18:00 AM
Priceless, exquise! to my fav's, lovely page layout, each verse drizzling to a conclusion! Those Jack's can be "tough" I've loved one! Light & Love "Jack sat on the shelf like streamlined vodka. Apologetically, he backward marched a Saint Louis/ funeral-in-reverse. She/then nursed a wound/to remember/him by." fav part!
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Date: 11/2/2010 9:14:00 PM
HUM I am needing to reread but I do like the style of the words on the page. Good to the eye for me
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