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Afi 9th Art Wave

his breath
clouds the night air
board grinds rail
the lamppost’s light reveals
his heart pounds as red lights swirl

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Thomas Martin

May 26, 2015 at 8:59 AM

Great use of tanka form!

Eve Roper

May 3, 2015 at 10:45 AM

Wow Debbie, they don't realize the pain they put us through. I had one of my students go down a steep hill into traffic never knowing the consequences. a 7

Debbie Guzzi

May 3, 2015 at 12:19 PM

My son used to have folks film him doing that INTO D.C. traffic!

Maurice Yvonne

April 3, 2015 at 11:55 AM

Wow Debbie your son is a skateboarder, that must be so hard on you always worrying about an accident.

Debbie Guzzi

April 3, 2015 at 1:45 PM

yes it was but mostly I wasn't there when he flew down a rail into on coming traffic BUT he made sure to film it and show it to me later!!! GAH!!!!

Kp Nunez

April 3, 2015 at 11:17 AM

I can feel the pounding of the youth's heart...this nightly adventure powers his excitement, even as the authorities run after them! There's danger, yes...but also youthful daring. A 7! Kim :)

Maurice Yvonne

April 2, 2015 at 9:35 AM

Another great piece of art Debbie. I spot the red on the hand rail. The blood of the adventurer? If you fall off your board you get right back on? Maybe merely represents the passion of the rider. Love your Tanka correct in style and leaves the door open to so many interpretations.Excellent!

Debbie Guzzi

April 3, 2015 at 11:51 AM

yup my son is a skateboarder - lots of near death experiences!

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