Afi 9th Art Wave

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Art by AFI

his breath clouds the night air board grinds rail the lamppost’s light reveals his heart pounds as red lights swirl

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Thomas Martin

Date: 5/26/2015 8:59:00 AM

Great use of tanka form!

Eve Roper

Date: 5/3/2015 10:45:00 AM

Wow Debbie, they don't realize the pain they put us through. I had one of my students go down a steep hill into traffic never knowing the consequences. a 7

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 5/3/2015 12:19:00 PM

My son used to have folks film him doing that INTO D.C. traffic!

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 4/3/2015 11:55:00 AM

Wow Debbie your son is a skateboarder, that must be so hard on you always worrying about an accident.

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 4/3/2015 1:45:00 PM

yes it was but mostly I wasn't there when he flew down a rail into on coming traffic BUT he made sure to film it and show it to me later!!! GAH!!!!

Kp Nunez

Date: 4/3/2015 11:17:00 AM

I can feel the pounding of the youth's heart...this nightly adventure powers his excitement, even as the authorities run after them! There's danger, yes...but also youthful daring. A 7! Kim :)

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 4/2/2015 9:35:00 AM

Another great piece of art Debbie. I spot the red on the hand rail. The blood of the adventurer? If you fall off your board you get right back on? Maybe merely represents the passion of the rider. Love your Tanka correct in style and leaves the door open to so many interpretations.Excellent!

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 4/3/2015 11:51:00 AM

yup my son is a skateboarder - lots of near death experiences!