Heidie Buys Poet Rhyme

Loneliness

Such a finely honed sword is this loneliness
Slicing through tenuous sinews of yesterday.
I search for obscure corridors of happiness
Knowing that somehow I forgot the way.

From gloomy clouds I harvest the sorrow
Dripping into the cupped hands of my heart.
For there is no optimistic promise of tomorrow
As I curse my ship and unintelligible chart.

How bitter sweet this gateaux of quiet solitude
I garnish it with sprinkles of immense silence.
For loneliness is but a mere shift of attitude
From peaceful design to destructive violence.

I gather the jigsaw pieces of empty conversation
Falling snippets swirling on the winds of sound.
A soliloquy of madness expressed in futile oration
In chilling isolation the laughter of my soul is bound.

I strain to catch the words swirling on the breeze
Yesterday was surely a symphony of chatter.
This finely honed sword cuts deeply with ease
And though I bleed... it surely doesn't matter.

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Zzzzz Zzzzz June 17, 2011 at 1:24 AM P.P.S. I forgot to physically rate the poem 7/7 (Doh!), so I just came back to do that!

Zzzzz Zzzzz June 17, 2011 at 1:21 AM You capture the real feel and numbing reality of loneliness here. This is a great write! The rhymes are perfect, the imagery is vivid and the whole poem is one swirl of poetic Brilliance! 7/7! Some of the best poems are sad ones (like songs). Love and kind regards, Robert. P.S. If this "only" came 3rd the ones placed 1 & 2 must have been written by Shakespeare!

John Freeman October 15, 2010 at 5:39 PM Heidie, Congratulations on your most worthy presentation of third plac. Agape, Moses

Sara Kendrick October 14, 2010 at 4:33 PM Congratulations on your win..Sara

Robert A. Dufresne October 6, 2010 at 1:48 PM Heidie...excellent! congrats to you

Dr.Ram Mehta October 5, 2010 at 12:00 PM Congratulations on this well deserved win in the contest, Heidie

Debbie Guzzi October 4, 2010 at 5:03 PM exquiste! so sad we have to go through these things to put forth these gems. Conrad's on your win! Light & Love (7)

Carol Sunshine Brown October 4, 2010 at 4:26 AM Congratulations on your win Heidi in John Heck's contest "Blink". Love, Carol

Joyce Johnson October 3, 2010 at 1:31 PM Congratulations for your win in John's contest. Well done. This poem deserved its 3rd at the very least. Lonliness at its deepest here. Love, Joyce

James Burns June 24, 2010 at 12:38 PM I really enoyed your submission. I am very fond of narratives and yours is one of the finest that I've had the pleasure of reading. It really emotes the feeling of loneliness and leaves the reader somewhat shaken by the heaviness of it all. I look forward to enjoying more of your work. Take care and keep up the great work.

Carol Sunshine Brown June 3, 2010 at 8:49 AM Congratulations on your poetry making it through the first round Heidie. I wish you the best in the finals. Love, Carol

Daver Austin May 31, 2010 at 2:42 PM A stoic symphony. I catch the thread that no matter what is going on around loneliness is impossible to overcome. The last line says it all. Love, daver

May 31, 2010 at 2:12 PM Congratulations on making it through the first round of the Poetry Soup contest with this poem. Best wishes in the finals. Karen

Michael Jordan May 28, 2010 at 8:46 PM Heidi - as beautiful as the soul of the lady who penned it -Congratulations on having your poetry featured this week, God Bless, mj

Carol Sunshine Brown May 25, 2010 at 5:27 AM Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Heidie. May you have many more features and may you find loads of inspiration along the way. Love, Carol

Daver Austin May 24, 2010 at 5:17 PM A stoic sort of loneliness, Heidi, as though you stand off watching self. Congrats on this fine piece. By the way, where have you been? Love, daver

Janette Fisher May 24, 2010 at 1:16 PM Many congrats on your wonderful feature this week. Rgds Janette

May 23, 2010 at 4:21 PM The emotion comes through your words. Good use of imagery to share your thoughts. Congratulations on having your poem featured. Keep that creativity flowing. Wishing you continued success. Karen

Sean Kelly April 19, 2010 at 10:48 PM Heidie , it was great to hear from you and thanks for your kind words . Hoping to see more fine pieces of work , like this , well penned , but sad write ....

Trudy Diane Rider July 19, 2009 at 10:52 AM This is a wonderful poe, very expressive and the iagery is amazing, "A soliloquy of madness expressed in futile oration"...great line! Thank you for your comments also, ~Trudy~

Sue Mason July 11, 2009 at 6:47 PM Poignant write here Heidie ... I made so many grusome decisions in my life based upon loneliness that its only taken me 60+ years to be okay with me ... smile ... I love this write and hope to read lots more from you in the future. May I please have the day/month of your birthday so I can add you to my calendar?

Joseph Spence Sr July 6, 2009 at 4:02 PM This is an excellent rhyming poem. The flow of each quatrain is wonderful. The rhyming pattern certainly gives the poem a boost. Great job! ~Joseph

Matthew Anish July 5, 2009 at 2:47 PM Don't feel too lonely - there are always you "soup" friends - including me. I especially liked the line....the jigsaw pieces of empty conversation. Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Carolyn Devonshire July 3, 2009 at 6:33 PM Very profound write, Heidie. You capture the "chilling isolation" one feels in loneliness so well. Beautiful but sad write! Love, Carolyn

Sara Lokken June 30, 2009 at 10:03 PM Okay, there's like a HUGE EXPLANATION POINT in my mind!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This is so freaking amazing! "Dripping into the cupped hands of my heart....From peaceful design to destructive violence....In chilling isolation the laughter of my soul is bound...." I am so jealous, but in a healthy way, of these phrases.....I don't know where you have been, but in these months you've turned into a genius! Love and hugs, Sara:)

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