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down comforter down under under the covers under the bed bed the man bed room room for more room for rent rent a u haul rent a house house in the burbs house of the damned damned foolish damned lonely lonely lingerers lonely nights nights in white satin nights without end end of the universe end of the game game on the table game players players are soulless players stack the deck deck the halls deck boards boards interlocking boards of the porch porch light porch swing swing under my arm swing between my legs legs get you up legs let you down down town down beat beat me beat time time to move on time to move over over the rainbow over the line line dance line markers markers on signs markers write over over bruises over cuts cuts bruises

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 8/27/2015 12:03:00 PM
I have been blitzed by your cleverness! Love it!
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Date: 8/27/2015 4:01:00 AM
wow that's some blitz Debbie.. still have some difficult dealing with this form but I really tried.. I like it... ~Olive Eloisa =')
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Date: 8/12/2015 4:05:00 PM
ditto
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Date: 8/12/2015 1:58:00 PM
STAY over the raibow..stay over line,,,#loved the words and the story they have..TY FOR SHARING
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Date: 8/9/2015 1:49:00 PM
It's nicely written. It's true whatever you do to fill in, if you don't find the right person and right environment you'll even feel lonely in a crowd
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Date: 8/7/2015 11:20:00 PM
Debbie, okay now I have it (hopefully ) you are so right it was like making a puzzle making all the parts fit
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Date: 8/7/2015 10:57:00 PM
Good time under all these lines. Hugs Eve
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Date: 8/7/2015 9:55:00 PM
oh my, I just don't know, Debs. This looks really difficult but great example for us!
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Date: 8/7/2015 8:27:00 PM
Debbie good example for your contest, I have done some editing on mine, I think I got it going now, I think!!!
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