Debbie Guzzi Poet Blitz

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Under and Over

down comforter
down under 
under the covers
under the bed
bed the man
bed room
room for more
room for rent
rent a u haul
rent a house
house in the burbs
house of the damned
damned foolish
damned lonely
lonely lingerers
lonely nights
nights in white satin
nights without end
end of the universe
end of the game
game on the table
game players
players are soulless
players stack the deck
deck the halls
deck boards
boards interlocking
boards of the porch
porch light
porch swing
swing under my arm
swing between my legs
legs get you up
legs let you down
down town
down beat
beat me
beat time
time to move on
time to move over
over the rainbow
over the line
line dance
line markers
markers on signs
markers write over
over bruises
over cuts
cuts
bruises

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Carrie Richards August 27, 2015 at 12:03 PM I have been blitzed by your cleverness! Love it!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser August 27, 2015 at 4:01 AM wow that's some blitz Debbie.. still have some difficult dealing with this form but I really tried.. I like it... ~Olive Eloisa =')

Mary Rotman August 12, 2015 at 4:05 PM ditto

Kamran Rashid August 12, 2015 at 1:58 PM STAY over the raibow..stay over line,,,#loved the words and the story they have..TY FOR SHARING

Samiha Zubair August 9, 2015 at 1:49 PM It's nicely written. It's true whatever you do to fill in, if you don't find the right person and right environment you'll even feel lonely in a crowd

Constance La France August 7, 2015 at 11:20 PM Debbie, okay now I have it (hopefully ) you are so right it was like making a puzzle making all the parts fit

Eve Roper August 7, 2015 at 10:57 PM Good time under all these lines. Hugs Eve

Andrea Dietrich August 7, 2015 at 9:55 PM oh my, I just don't know, Debs. This looks really difficult but great example for us!

Constance La France August 7, 2015 at 8:27 PM Debbie good example for your contest, I have done some editing on mine, I think I got it going now, I think!!!