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War and Peace

across the table pink-eyed – not even Alice’s rabbit either – the impenitent sat – stooped – round as a fatted pig – full of pride in service – unabashed by his kill count – he spoke of philosophy Paris and London – his son following in his footsteps - Afghanistan his war – Perrier green glass sparkled – heat withheld – lust present & accounted for – lust for the military bit

across the table sat Alice - unknowing peacemonger – she observed his head turtling into his neck – she didn’t comment on his war stories – caffeine drove her to the precipice of honesty - lemming like she fell – but not for him – the hour spent down the rabbit hole passed – the sustenance she fed him swallowed - they parted ways

no company found – matchless – burnt-out flames – neither the better off for the meet
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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George   Avatar
September 10, 2020 at 6:44 AM
So deep and profound as only you can do, Debbie. So creative! Much to ponder here. Thank you! Light and love to you, Elaine
Anish Avatar
May 6, 2018 at 5:44 PM
Two different world views collide. Very stimulating poem! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
Guzzi Avatar
May 6, 2018 at 7:20 PM
Thanks, Matt, afterward he wrote me the meanest, nastiest, email; it was pretty horrid.
One Avatar
February 22, 2018 at 2:04 PM
Sounds like someone you do not like Debbie, some interesting metaphors in this ...
Lamoureux Avatar
January 22, 2018 at 8:16 PM
In a backwards world I might be a replacement for the fatted pig. Sorry you got a mean email Debbie. It says more about him than it does about you.
Lamoureux Avatar
January 22, 2018 at 7:01 PM
My mind and neck swiveled throughout this piece, I fear my head might tumble down the rabbit hole. Perhaps an apple will be placed strategically in my mouth.
Guzzi Avatar
January 22, 2018 at 7:46 PM
that's what my head felt like when I got home from that meeting WOW you should have seen the mean email he wrote me! Why would an apple be in your mouth?
Wigley Avatar
December 31, 2017 at 1:22 AM
Indeed, impenitence; perpetuator of war. A fine, incisive write, Debbie, love the ending. Have a good new year. Viv x
Thirtyseven Avatar
November 1, 2017 at 9:07 AM
Fabulous write my friend. I like the ambiguity of it all. Worldly, while intimate. Brilliant.
Guzzi Avatar
November 1, 2017 at 7:33 PM
thanks Scott!
Shetley Avatar
September 11, 2017 at 3:46 AM
Wonderful piece Debbie. It's a familiar place for me, sitting across that table.
Ekechukwu Avatar
September 1, 2017 at 8:24 PM
A very nice one Deb,kudos to you and proud u making us know the world of literature wont go into oblivion....kudos
Callus Avatar
August 28, 2017 at 1:18 PM
Metaphorically creative, Debbie. Many are taken in by arguments in favour of war, but nothing beats those which promote peace. Warm regards // paul
Dietrich Avatar
August 27, 2017 at 9:33 PM
wow, Deb, I love the way you did this. This is the kind of verse I want to read if I cannot be reading rhyme. VERY Smart!!
Guzzi Avatar
August 28, 2017 at 8:05 PM
Thank you Andie!
Roper Avatar
August 16, 2017 at 10:37 PM
enjoyed reading dear friend
Guzzi Avatar
August 28, 2017 at 8:06 PM
Thanks Eve! :)
Cozart Avatar
August 15, 2017 at 2:31 PM
I like Alice because she knows her own mind. Perhaps she was taken in by him at first, but then got the better of herself. One question, should your line read "..sustenance she 'fed' him..."? Anyway, it's a very strong piece. But then your works always are.
Guzzi Avatar
August 15, 2017 at 7:40 PM
yes Dale THANK YOU! I will fix it ASAP!
Dutta Avatar
August 12, 2017 at 1:31 PM
Beautifully Written. Nice Piece
Sergi Avatar
August 2, 2017 at 5:20 PM
Beautiful Metaphoric poem in a world where we politically percieve the opposite. Please accept an italian hug!
Guzzi Avatar
August 2, 2017 at 7:26 PM
Oh yes, Ralph - I appreciate hugs!
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