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across the table pink-eyed – not even Alice’s rabbit either – the impenitent sat – stooped – round as a fatted pig – full of pride in service – unabashed by his kill count – he spoke of philosophy Paris and London – his son following in his footsteps - Afghanistan his war – Perrier green glass sparkled – heat withheld – lust present & accounted for – lust for the military bit

across the table sat Alice - unknowing peacemonger – she observed his head turtling into his neck – she didn’t comment on his war stories – caffeine drove her to the precipice of honesty - lemming like she fell – but not for him – the hour spent down the rabbit hole passed – the sustenance she fed him swallowed - they parted ways

no company found – matchless – burnt-out flames – neither the better off for the meet 

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 5/6/2018 5:44:00 PM
Two different world views collide. Very stimulating poem! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 5/6/2018 7:20:00 PM
Thanks, Matt, afterward he wrote me the meanest, nastiest, email; it was pretty horrid.
Date: 2/22/2018 2:04:00 PM
Sounds like someone you do not like Debbie, some interesting metaphors in this ...
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Date: 1/22/2018 8:16:00 PM
In a backwards world I might be a replacement for the fatted pig. Sorry you got a mean email Debbie. It says more about him than it does about you.
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Date: 1/22/2018 7:01:00 PM
My mind and neck swiveled throughout this piece, I fear my head might tumble down the rabbit hole. Perhaps an apple will be placed strategically in my mouth.
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Date: 1/22/2018 7:46:00 PM
that's what my head felt like when I got home from that meeting WOW you should have seen the mean email he wrote me! Why would an apple be in your mouth?
Date: 12/31/2017 1:22:00 AM
Indeed, impenitence; perpetuator of war. A fine, incisive write, Debbie, love the ending. Have a good new year. Viv x
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Date: 11/1/2017 9:07:00 AM
Fabulous write my friend. I like the ambiguity of it all. Worldly, while intimate. Brilliant.
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Date: 11/1/2017 7:33:00 PM
thanks Scott!
Date: 9/11/2017 3:46:00 AM
Wonderful piece Debbie. It's a familiar place for me, sitting across that table.
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Date: 9/1/2017 8:24:00 PM
A very nice one Deb,kudos to you and proud u making us know the world of literature wont go into oblivion....kudos
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Date: 8/28/2017 1:18:00 PM
Metaphorically creative, Debbie. Many are taken in by arguments in favour of war, but nothing beats those which promote peace. Warm regards // paul
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Date: 8/27/2017 9:33:00 PM
wow, Deb, I love the way you did this. This is the kind of verse I want to read if I cannot be reading rhyme. VERY Smart!!
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 8/28/2017 8:05:00 PM
Thank you Andie!
Date: 8/16/2017 10:37:00 PM
enjoyed reading dear friend
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 8/28/2017 8:06:00 PM
Thanks Eve! :)
Date: 8/15/2017 2:31:00 PM
I like Alice because she knows her own mind. Perhaps she was taken in by him at first, but then got the better of herself. One question, should your line read "..sustenance she 'fed' him..."? Anyway, it's a very strong piece. But then your works always are.
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Date: 8/15/2017 7:40:00 PM
yes Dale THANK YOU! I will fix it ASAP!
Date: 8/12/2017 1:31:00 PM
Beautifully Written. Nice Piece
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Date: 8/2/2017 5:20:00 PM
Beautiful Metaphoric poem in a world where we politically percieve the opposite. Please accept an italian hug!
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Date: 8/2/2017 7:26:00 PM
Oh yes, Ralph - I appreciate hugs!