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A Blooded, Virgin, Night

Brighter than a fall bonfire but with the chill of ice, 
the winter sun haloes a gray and barren woodland;
throbbing, almost hesitant, with a florescent pulse,
brazen in its unrelenting descent, it clings to the horizon.

How it hurt my eyes.

Thin skinned, the lids tinge orange, the white of sol’s merging.
Trunks, boughs, branches, twigs, 	welt the dusk, 
rouging the line between, blooding the virgin night.
Pricked, the brain pulses in tune, unable to look away.

How it hurt my mind.

Splayed fingers do not block the sharpened spears of screaming light.
The winter sun, indexed, and palmed, scratches the face of I.
Within a dakened room beneath a pall, behind hides blue veins, 
near comatose, I sigh, the light, the light, until shades and stars arrive.

How life and death	both hurt.


First Published in Dual Coast Magazine Issue 1 2014
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Bangalee Avatar
February 12, 2023 at 8:49 PM
full of great poetic writings; great flavor to read
Neumann Avatar
August 14, 2016 at 2:10 AM
Strong words, strong message. I like your work very much. Ruben suggested that I might want to read it, and I do. Congratulations...
Callus Avatar
January 5, 2016 at 8:55 AM
Beautifully expressed sensations, Debbie! You use imagery to the full to reach your objective. Thankfully, calm night arrives. ~ Regards // paul
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
January 5, 2016 at 3:34 AM
Hi Debbie, weeeeee such imagery and message that I felt it much! HAppy New Year! Smiles! ~Olive Eloisa =`)
Thirtyseven Avatar
January 4, 2016 at 6:16 AM
It's not the life and death that I fear, it's those moments in-between. Well done on the publication. Happy New Year Debbie. May we all succeed.
Guzzi Avatar
January 4, 2016 at 8:04 AM
Thank you Scott, I hope to see more of your work published this year too!
Nunez Avatar
December 30, 2015 at 6:25 PM
Ouch! This hurts, Deb! :-) Never seen a more creative way to describe my headache... Awesome lines... If I can write like you someday, I'll be fine with daily attacks... :-). Dropping by to wish you the best this holiday season and a great year ahead!
Guzzi Avatar
December 30, 2015 at 6:26 PM
Happy New Year to you too Kim! & Thanks
George   Avatar
December 29, 2015 at 12:05 PM
The last line is so powerful !!!! Wonderful, brilliant writing, Deb. Stopping in to wish you all the best in the New Year. Elaine George
Amah Avatar
December 26, 2015 at 4:05 PM
...& I've had the young doubts if mother knew this child had return'd to the hill-top ... & there's a mound of raw tales ... canny ...
Amah Avatar
December 26, 2015 at 4:00 PM
... stitching poesy like pieces of garments ... knowing each thread link should hold ... & those stiches rhyme ... great walk on the bush-paths of poesy!!! wow! canny ...
Fleming Avatar
December 26, 2015 at 12:09 PM
I really did enjoy the read, Debbie...One of the best poems I have read in a while - Very well done! My warmest wishes...And all the very best for the New Year! :) john
A   Avatar
December 25, 2015 at 10:25 PM
Debbie, Deb... Merry Christmas and Happy New Year May all your days shine and dreams come true. :) Every day should be a day with family and friends. I appreciate everyone. Sorry to all those I have taken for granted. SHAME ON ME. I promise, 2016 will be a new me. Merry Christmas!!! May the true meaning of the holiday season fill your heart and home. Always & Forever ~LINDA~
Lindley Avatar
December 15, 2015 at 8:36 PM
I HAVE FELT DEEP ANGUISH, GREAT PAIN FELT LIKE DYING. LIFE NOTHING TO GAIN. Yet this superbly written piece goes even deeper, even farther and does so with precision in edging the veil. Definitely a depth I can not reach. One day maybe, if I keep on improving my friend... A FAV FOR ME.. Thanks..
Lindley Avatar
December 22, 2015 at 8:49 PM
SEEMS I WAS LED ASTRAY BY THIS VERSE. "How life and death both hurt." I thought it was about a loss of love or a death of a lover. Trust me, I' d rather have had a migraine each time that deep misery bore down upon my aching soul. Merry Christmas to you and yours my friend!
Guzzi Avatar
December 15, 2015 at 10:10 PM
It's a mibraine Robert --- You have a Merry Christmas please & do keep in touch!
Guzzi Avatar
December 15, 2015 at 10:10 PM
migraine!!!!
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
December 15, 2015 at 7:15 AM
Excellent wordage and lines are as striking as the message.. love some phrases here.. =`) Happy Christmas in advance Debbie.. =`) hugs~Olive Eloisa
Andresen Avatar
December 15, 2015 at 4:20 AM
- Enjoy reading your powerful poems today, Debbie - Now that the time is near ....I want to wish you a peaceful and beautiful Christmas for you and your loved ones - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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