Andrea Dietrich Poet Sonnet

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This Night

I’m driftwood, and I’m floating out to sea
as sun descends upon my home - the grove
of trees whose fragrance still remains with me.
And likewise, heaven’s work of art, a mauve
surrounding me, now permeates my soul.
Warm water, in the twilight growing cold,
is rocking me. Beneath dark blue, a shoal
moves swiftly; overhead there will unfold
the myriad of stars in semblance of
a giant carousel in dimming sky.
Those stars that glitter for the grove I love
will glitter too for me, where here I lie
alone, enraptured. . . and I think I might
drift evermore, enveloped by this night.

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John Watt December 30, 2019 at 3:01 AM Andrea, there is not a stressful word in this sonnet. Every word and phrase communicates peace - floating, permeates, rocking me, enraptured, drift evermore, enveloped. The nature descriptions feed into this sense of peace, the mauve of the sunset, the warm water, the shoal. I especially love "the myriad of stars in semblance of a giant carousel in dimming sky". Makes me want to go floating in the ocean under the stars. Simply gorgeous. Hugs ~ John

Kurt Ravidas October 8, 2019 at 3:25 PM Wow, 30 pages! Impressive. I chose the very first sonnet on purpose. In my opinion, this is the best form for a poet to demonstrate his skill level. You were already a high-level poet when you joined PS. It's obvious. And enjambements, for sure)

Line Gauthier February 11, 2019 at 9:35 PM Beautiful, Andrea. Congrats on your win.

Sandra Haight January 31, 2019 at 4:44 PM Such a beautiful driftwood personification, Andrea, written with amazing smooth enjambment and imagery. Congrats on your win in the contest. Hugs, Sandra

Wendy Watson January 31, 2019 at 1:55 AM A beautiful description,Andrea. Congratulations on your placement.

Mark Toney January 30, 2019 at 10:33 PM Andrea, a lovely Sonnet, excellent word choice and brilliant metaphor! Congratulations on your win on mile 13 of my 2019 Poetry Marathon contest! Thank you so much for supporting my contests. By continuing to place in the contests you are accumulating points toward the final. ~Mark

Vesna Kovrlija October 29, 2017 at 4:23 AM Brilliant!

Hannah Borke October 26, 2017 at 7:54 AM Creative description of loneliness

Debbie Duncan June 17, 2017 at 1:23 AM Love the Sonnet :)

Francis J Grasso June 15, 2016 at 9:16 PM I like this one very much. I think I must learn how to write a sonnet. This draws me in and takes me away. ...Fran

Paul Schneiter August 30, 2015 at 1:15 PM This poem, like your others, is rich in imagery. But also like many of your others, it excels in creative word usage; i.e., "a giant carousel in dimming sky." Finally, it demands the reader's attention (a "think piece"). Beautiful work, Andrea. I wish I had written it. Hugs.

Skat A May 9, 2015 at 5:19 PM Enjoying some of your poetry all over again Andrea. A nice one. SKAT

Scott Thirtyseven January 5, 2015 at 7:11 AM Your first Poetry Soup Sonnet was for a Chan competition. Wow, the history. I came to ask if you had ever put your 400 odd sonnets in a compilation? But gosh I didn't expect to see the history in this piece. Wow... An amazing poem, the first few lines blew me away. I really dig our metaphor. Oh and; a sonnet can be written in this form, huh?

David Williams December 20, 2014 at 2:25 AM Andrea I like the journey this took me on....David

Maurice Yvonne November 1, 2014 at 6:04 PM WOW, like a Shakespearean sonnet. This is better than anything people who put up blogs complaining about lists can write. I Love how talented you are Andrea. You are brilliant.

Rob Carter March 13, 2014 at 5:38 PM I stumbled across this and glad I did. Beautifully written rhyme, conjures up a calm scene. Rob

Roger Horsch December 11, 2013 at 6:51 PM Hello Andrea, Congrats on your well deserved Win. Such a wonderful poem....Hugs...Roger

David Fisher December 11, 2013 at 4:58 PM Way to go on the rhyme contest. I enjoyed the story, yet I really like the layout with mid-sentence rhymes. Very cool!

Connie Gildersleeve December 11, 2013 at 4:27 PM Enjoyed this wonderful read. I can imagine so easily the myriad of stars in semblance of a giant carousel in dimming sky. Congratulations on your well deserved win. Warm hugs and smiles, Connie

Dr.Ram Mehta December 10, 2013 at 9:17 PM Congrats on the win, Andrea

Poet Destroyer A December 10, 2013 at 8:29 PM it is awesome, Andrea...luv..linda

Debbie Guzzi December 10, 2013 at 6:49 PM Go sonneteers! Now you have personified driftwood and I a stump LOL Congrad's on your win, Light & Love

Kelly Deschler December 10, 2013 at 4:47 PM Just beautiful! This was so relaxing and easy to read, and the imagery is so dreamy! I love the smooth flow and the rhyme. Congratulations on your well deserved win, Andrea!...Thank you very much for the kind congrats on my poem. It really means a lot!

Mark Peterson December 10, 2013 at 12:09 PM Utterly transcendent. Indescribably good and worthy of the top spot. Applause for your win.

Anne-Lise Andresen December 10, 2013 at 11:43 AM - Congratulations on your winning poem in: "Put Your Best Rhyme Forward" contest: Sponsored by: Just That Archaic Poet - Nice to take part - a pleasure to read yours Andrea - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

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