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This Night

I’m driftwood, and I’m floating out to sea
as sun descends upon my home - the grove
of trees whose fragrance still remains with me.
And likewise, heaven’s work of art, a mauve
surrounding me, now permeates my soul.
Warm water, in the twilight growing cold,
is rocking me. Beneath dark blue, a shoal
moves swiftly; overhead there will unfold
the myriad of stars in semblance of
a giant carousel in dimming sky.
Those stars that glitter for the grove I love
will glitter too for me, where here I lie
alone, enraptured. . . and I think I might
drift evermore, enveloped by this night.

Copyright © Andrea Dietrich | Year Posted 2009

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John Watt Date: 12/30/2019 3:01:00 AM Andrea, there is not a stressful word in this sonnet. Every word and phrase communicates peace - floating, permeates, rocking me, enraptured, drift evermore, enveloped. The nature descriptions feed into this sense of peace, the mauve of the sunset, the warm water, the shoal. I especially love "the myriad of stars in semblance of a giant carousel in dimming sky". Makes me want to go floating in the ocean under the stars. Simply gorgeous. Hugs ~ John Login to Reply

Kurt Ravidas Date: 10/8/2019 3:25:00 PM Wow, 30 pages! Impressive. I chose the very first sonnet on purpose. In my opinion, this is the best form for a poet to demonstrate his skill level. You were already a high-level poet when you joined PS. It's obvious. And enjambements, for sure) Login to Reply

Line Gauthier Date: 2/11/2019 9:35:00 PM Beautiful, Andrea. Congrats on your win. Login to Reply

Sandra Haight Date: 1/31/2019 4:44:00 PM Such a beautiful driftwood personification, Andrea, written with amazing smooth enjambment and imagery. Congrats on your win in the contest. Hugs, Sandra Login to Reply

Wendy Watson Date: 1/31/2019 1:55:00 AM A beautiful description,Andrea. Congratulations on your placement. Login to Reply

Mark Toney Date: 1/30/2019 10:33:00 PM Andrea, a lovely Sonnet, excellent word choice and brilliant metaphor! Congratulations on your win on mile 13 of my 2019 Poetry Marathon contest! Thank you so much for supporting my contests. By continuing to place in the contests you are accumulating points toward the final. ~Mark Login to Reply

Vesna Kovrlija Date: 10/29/2017 4:23:00 AM Brilliant! Login to Reply

Hannah Borke Date: 10/26/2017 7:54:00 AM Creative description of loneliness Login to Reply

Debbie Duncan Date: 6/17/2017 1:23:00 AM Love the Sonnet :) Login to Reply

Francis J Grasso Date: 6/15/2016 9:16:00 PM I like this one very much. I think I must learn how to write a sonnet. This draws me in and takes me away. ...Fran Login to Reply

Paul Schneiter Date: 8/30/2015 1:15:00 PM This poem, like your others, is rich in imagery. But also like many of your others, it excels in creative word usage; i.e., "a giant carousel in dimming sky." Finally, it demands the reader's attention (a "think piece"). Beautiful work, Andrea. I wish I had written it. Hugs. Login to Reply

Skat A Date: 5/9/2015 5:19:00 PM Enjoying some of your poetry all over again Andrea. A nice one. SKAT Login to Reply

Scott Thirtyseven Date: 1/5/2015 7:11:00 AM Your first Poetry Soup Sonnet was for a Chan competition. Wow, the history. I came to ask if you had ever put your 400 odd sonnets in a compilation? But gosh I didn't expect to see the history in this piece. Wow... An amazing poem, the first few lines blew me away. I really dig our metaphor. Oh and; a sonnet can be written in this form, huh? Login to Reply

David Williams Date: 12/20/2014 2:25:00 AM Andrea I like the journey this took me on....David Login to Reply

Maurice Yvonne Date: 11/1/2014 6:04:00 PM WOW, like a Shakespearean sonnet. This is better than anything people who put up blogs complaining about lists can write. I Love how talented you are Andrea. You are brilliant. Login to Reply

Rob Carter Date: 3/13/2014 5:38:00 PM I stumbled across this and glad I did. Beautifully written rhyme, conjures up a calm scene. Rob Login to Reply

Roger Horsch Date: 12/11/2013 6:51:00 PM Hello Andrea, Congrats on your well deserved Win. Such a wonderful poem....Hugs...Roger Login to Reply

David Fisher Date: 12/11/2013 4:58:00 PM Way to go on the rhyme contest. I enjoyed the story, yet I really like the layout with mid-sentence rhymes. Very cool! Login to Reply

Connie Gildersleeve Date: 12/11/2013 4:27:00 PM Enjoyed this wonderful read. I can imagine so easily the myriad of stars in semblance of a giant carousel in dimming sky. Congratulations on your well deserved win. Warm hugs and smiles, Connie Login to Reply

Dr.Ram Mehta Date: 12/10/2013 9:17:00 PM Congrats on the win, Andrea Login to Reply

Poet Destroyer A Date: 12/10/2013 8:29:00 PM it is awesome, Andrea...luv..linda Login to Reply

Debbie Guzzi Date: 12/10/2013 6:49:00 PM Go sonneteers! Now you have personified driftwood and I a stump LOL Congrad's on your win, Light & Love Login to Reply

Kelly Deschler Date: 12/10/2013 4:47:00 PM Just beautiful! This was so relaxing and easy to read, and the imagery is so dreamy! I love the smooth flow and the rhyme. Congratulations on your well deserved win, Andrea!...Thank you very much for the kind congrats on my poem. It really means a lot! Login to Reply

Mark Peterson Date: 12/10/2013 12:09:00 PM Utterly transcendent. Indescribably good and worthy of the top spot. Applause for your win. Login to Reply

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 12/10/2013 11:43:00 AM - Congratulations on your winning poem in: "Put Your Best Rhyme Forward" contest: Sponsored by: Just That Archaic Poet - Nice to take part - a pleasure to read yours Andrea - oxox // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply

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