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This poem was winner of PoetrySoup's International Poetry Contest after I first arrived to Soup in 2010. Thanks to this poem, I won my lifetime membership here. A producer in England contacted me after he read it and wanted to showcase this poem, along with 19 other poems of mine, in an artistic movie called Six Days of Sistine. This seems like a good place for me to show a link to his movie. It is available either for sale or for online streaming with Amazon Prime.

https://www.imdb.com/title/tt7710360/

Cinder Girl

An ember sparked will softly glow,
and fed by fuel, will grow and grow.
I once was cinder, sparked by you,
first timid. . . till the flames then grew.

And so our start was touch of dawn,
with amber hue, for I was drawn
to eyes so welcoming and warm
I never guessed you’d do me harm.

Like morning glory, love in June
the rapture of mid-afternoon,
romance of which the ancients wrote,
our passion had no antidote.

And with the dusk, though scarlet tinged,
our love began to come unhinged,
for clouds arrived, which filled your eyes,
extinguishing bright twilight skies.

With cold of night came shadows’ pall,
and I could not tear down your wall.
By midnight’s hour, the fire was dead.
Mere ashes smoldered in its stead.

You left, and should you reappear,
I’ve vowed to shun you.  Now I fear
the very thing for which I yearn -
one touch. . . and then again - to burn.

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Joe Flach September 6, 2026 at 8:25 AM Andrea, I am the worst kind of PoetrySoup member; I post plenty of poems, but seldom put in the time to read other’s poems; and even more seldom write a comment. After years of hibernation I rediscovered my password and have been looking around the Top 100 poems and had to comment on this. I have always known you as a talented and likable poet, but “Cinder Girl” is absolutely brilliant. I am glad that this well-written poem opened some doors for you. Andrea Dietrich September 6, 2026 at 1:33 PM Thanks so much, Joe. And for appearing here today!❤️

Quoth Theraven August 9, 2026 at 11:36 AM Hello Andrea, Still holds my imagination whether in good times or bad. Happy Birthday wishes for a Virgo soon. https://www.imdb.com/title/tt7710360/ Andrea Dietrich August 10, 2026 at 4:09 PM Thanks, my friend

Kiki Stamatiou July 24, 2026 at 9:12 PM A very powerful piece. Deeply moving. I could feel the pain in every word. Captivating imagery. Your use of language is most exquisite. Of all the poetry I've read thus far on Poetry Soup, "Cinder Girl" is by far the best. Andrea Dietrich July 24, 2026 at 9:49 PM Thanks so very much. That poem has done some good things for me since I wrote it long ago.

Karen Jones March 11, 2026 at 9:16 PM Cool beans! I didn’t know you won your membership! And how exciting to have your wonderful work open doors for you! Congratulations on this topping soups all time best poems chart!

Csharpminor Csharpminor October 10, 2025 at 3:10 PM Dear Andrea, Ive just finished watching "Six Days of Sistine" and what an absolute pleasure it was to discover your poetry. Ive been looking for a published copy of your works but Ive been unable to find anything other than online sources. (Im from the U.K) Whilst greatful for finding your poetry to explore here, I wonder if you have any published books? If so, where can I access it/them please? Thank you for creating such magical moments of such soulful beauty. Andrea Dietrich October 10, 2025 at 8:38 PM I am so happy to meet someone who saw the movie and appreciated it. Are you able to receive soupmails? If not, let me know so I may talk with you about books. I will try to send you a soupmail right now.

Richard Evans September 28, 2025 at 7:19 PM Excellent poem Andrea. Aesthetic for sure. Thanks for sharing..................peace!

Dr. Vandana Sharma September 15, 2025 at 10:48 AM I have seen that movie, way back when it was available on the internet !!! Great job.

Crystol Woods July 1, 2025 at 6:08 AM One of your best for sure...a perfect blend of rhythm and rhyme... impressive!! Xo Andrea Dietrich July 1, 2025 at 9:47 AM Thanks so much

Byeol Captain February 26, 2025 at 12:58 AM Lovely

Mpinge Mpinge January 29, 2025 at 5:59 AM I'm really impressed with the poem which could be a perfect gift for someone on Valentine's Day, Congratulations and may God bless you and your writing.

Robert Waltrip December 30, 2024 at 11:04 AM Your correlation between nature and love is beautifully done! Your description of love's paradox between ease and unease is well-emoted. Love's questions are left unexplained, but not unanswered. Your poem is a work of love and an awesome write. Andrea Dietrich December 30, 2024 at 12:29 PM Thanks so much, Robert

Vilmos Zoltan Galyo August 8, 2024 at 2:20 AM Beautiful. Congratulations! Andrea Dietrich August 8, 2024 at 9:40 PM Why, thank you, Vilmox Andrea Dietrich August 8, 2024 at 9:40 PM Bad texting . Vilmos

Paige Hind August 1, 2024 at 3:28 PM I loved this. I wanted to read it after I read your blog. A FAV! <3 Andrea Dietrich August 2, 2024 at 9:07 AM Wow thanks, Paige

Sara Kendrick July 21, 2024 at 11:06 PM I don't think that I have seen this one, Andrea. One of your best, I would say. Sometimes love can definitely be an ember and flame then get burned out. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Sara K Andrea Dietrich July 22, 2024 at 6:48 AM This was the one that got me my lifetime membership when I first joined Soup in 2010. It won the International contest soup used to have. It's kinda my signature poem. Glad you finally saw it!

Lanier Thomas June 23, 2024 at 5:44 PM This is a lovely poem. People never really fall out of love and often times, deep inside, hope things will turn out better, as in the last two lines. Andrea Dietrich June 24, 2024 at 8:41 AM Thanks. Yes this does happen for some people. It never did for me, but I can well imagine it

Caryl Muzzey June 3, 2024 at 1:50 PM I love this! Congratulations on this wonderful write! Hard to believe I haven't seen it before now, but I haven't been able to acquire real internet access till now. Keep it up girl! Andrea Dietrich June 3, 2024 at 6:26 PM Thanks. Glad you finally saw it. It's my prized baby!

RADHIKA AGARWAL March 10, 2024 at 12:02 AM So nice also new here please have a look at my poems:)

James Horn January 27, 2024 at 5:46 PM Jill and I were both born in June 26th, 1941 and June 30. Have you been back to Idaho lately and still teaching? Still remember you. If we could only go back 10 years, I would be on a cruise right now. Andrea Dietrich June 24, 2024 at 8:45 AM Happy Bday to you both You are the sign of Cancer like my dad and husband

Curtis Johnson January 18, 2024 at 8:43 PM Congrats, Andrea, for your placement. This is a very powerful piece. The number of views is beyond remarkable. HNY. Andrea Dietrich June 24, 2024 at 8:42 AM Thanks, Curtis

Lin Lane January 18, 2024 at 11:04 AM Most views... I'm quite certain. Congratulations, Andrea. Andrea Dietrich January 18, 2024 at 1:21 PM thanks, Lin.

Quoth Theraven December 19, 2023 at 10:04 PM Andrea, Reaching out to a bright future, and a whole new crowd. Poignant now, as an ember ever was. A spark turned to blaze, inspiring a whole new generation. What more can anyone wish for? -Richard

James Peranteau December 15, 2023 at 10:59 PM So, i were stroll'n your writes dear 'Poetess', and stumbled 'pon this write...i be thinking that this iz the contest that i made to second round? Anywho, az much az i can, i hide from longer than 40 werd writes; reading or writing (though, from time to time i can't resist a bit more). Anywho, i wuz pulled in to this title Andrea...needless to say, i agree with the prestigious award being given to the writer uv this write (((((claps)))))...much love, me......p.the.s... i hear'd that you be married...i never in your 14yearz here, knew that you were! Congratulationz! Dang, no more uv mine musing about yourn vooman ;) Andrea Dietrich December 16, 2023 at 9:07 AM How did you not know I was married. Haha. Going on nearly 50 years . Never thought I'd see such a day. This work is fictional, by the way. I was always s nice girl. Maybe the reason high school guys didn't date me. But I had some wonderful dates with guys outside high school and never got my heart broken enough to cause more than just great disappointment

James Horn November 23, 2023 at 6:38 AM sure you inspire do until you retire is your desire Andrea Dietrich December 16, 2023 at 9:08 AM ?? I am retired in a sense but remain teaching 15 hours a week.

Shane Thacker May 31, 2023 at 11:04 AM This is incredible, Andrea. And so well written. I loved it. Thank you for sharing this and congrats on all of its success. You deserve it. Andrea Dietrich May 31, 2023 at 1:09 PM thanks so much, Shane.

Luna Schwartz May 5, 2023 at 5:43 PM Personified in excellent ways, runs very smooth with great vocabulary and rhymes, everything about it is perfect. Thank you for such a great read!

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