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Cinder Girl

An ember sparked will softly glow,
and fed by fuel, will grow and grow.
I once was cinder, sparked by you,
first timid. . . till the flames then grew.

And so our start was touch of dawn,
with amber hue, for I was drawn
to eyes so welcoming and warm
I never guessed you’d do me harm.

Like morning glory, love in June
the rapture of mid-afternoon,
romance of which the ancients wrote,
our passion had no antidote.

And with the dusk, though scarlet tinged,
our love began to come unhinged,
for clouds arrived, which filled your eyes,
extinguishing bright twilight skies.

With cold of night came shadows’ pall,
and I could not tear down your wall.
By midnight’s hour, the fire was dead.
Mere ashes smoldered in its stead.

You left, and should you reappear,
I’ve vowed to shun you.  Now I fear
the very thing for which I yearn -
one touch. . . and then again - to burn.

Original date of posting: 2/6/2010(though written earlier than that) This was
1st Place Winner of Poetry Soup's International Poetry contest 2010 back before there were trophies. I do feel it is one of my very best poems. Compared to a few others of mine that got trophies, it is far worthier!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Date: 12/8/2019 11:11:00 PM
Wow - an emotional adventure.
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Date: 11/29/2019 6:45:00 PM
This poem was awe inspiring. It was a nicely flowing piece. Congratulations on the trophy cup.
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Date: 11/15/2019 11:26:00 AM
Wonder what inspired you to right this poem. After finding filings silver plated, And many things had anticipated; While we waited, Getting educated, Were excited then highly elated. Great to read your great works; Were pleased by all of the perks; Poems did grow, In each long row; Are tired of Trump and his jerks. Roger Stone convicted on 7 counts.
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Date: 11/15/2019 9:42:00 AM
Lovely poem I thoroughly enjoyed reading your meaningful words. Well done & thanks for sharing x
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Date: 11/2/2019 7:27:00 PM
Wonderful, something many of us has been through , thank you for wording it in such a beautiful poem. It still burns!
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Date: 10/18/2019 12:26:00 AM
Deservedly the best. Great analogies, great transition and deep emotions!
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Date: 10/12/2019 10:43:00 AM
Andrea - a beautiful poem and so beautifully written and heartfelt - DHolmes
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Date: 10/5/2019 9:57:00 AM
So delighted for you Andrea, I'm amazed this epic poem hasn't been awarded a trophy before:-) hugs Jan xx
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/5/2019 1:52:00 PM
thanks so much, dear friend.
Date: 10/4/2019 6:41:00 PM
WOW!!!! This was wonderful. When I grow up as a writer, can I be like you?????
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Date: 10/3/2019 11:36:00 PM
This is definitely trophy worthy Andrea! Congratulations my friend. xxoo
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/5/2019 1:53:00 PM
Thanks, Connie. She made my day with the trophy.
Date: 10/3/2019 4:18:00 PM
Back with more well deserved congrats, Andrea.
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Date: 10/3/2019 3:18:00 PM
Ha! Of course this should win. Although, are you sure you wrote it? I could SWEAR I heard it in a movie... ;-) ;-) xx
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/3/2019 4:10:00 PM
haha, I wonder if that movie will ever go anywhere!! I am yet to receive my copy of it!!
Date: 10/3/2019 2:56:00 PM
Congrats on your win in Tania's contest! Way to go!
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Date: 10/3/2019 1:31:00 PM
This was the perfect choice for this contest, WOW! Congratulations my friend
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Date: 10/3/2019 1:11:00 PM
There you go, your wonderful poem finally got the trophy it has deserved for a very long time. Congrats Andrea.
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Date: 10/3/2019 1:02:00 PM
Andrea, congratulations on your Trophy win with this very deserving and beautiful write !
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Date: 10/3/2019 12:37:00 PM
BIG CONGRATS, Andrea! :-) Janice
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Date: 10/3/2019 12:27:00 PM
This piece definitely has been deserving a trophy. Long overdue congratulations Andrea. :), xomo!
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Date: 10/3/2019 12:16:00 PM
Congratulations, you and you alone shine on the podium today, girlfriend! I am happy and proud for my extremely talented and wonderful friend. Love, CayCay
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/3/2019 12:42:00 PM
Caycay, it's YOUR birthday today, and here I am getting to have the podium too. thanks so much, soul sister! have a beautiful birthday!
Date: 10/3/2019 11:50:00 AM
Andrea, congratulations on your top trophy win with your beautifully written romantic poem with excellent rhyme and form!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/3/2019 12:15:00 PM
oh my gosh, Tania. Thank you thank you so much!!
Date: 9/25/2019 8:04:00 AM
I don't remember if I read it before, but just did and love it. It's a beauty for sure. Bless you
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Date: 9/14/2019 10:35:00 AM
Nice one
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Date: 9/7/2019 10:28:00 AM
This really is lovely, Andrea. I can see why it's so popular. Fave.
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Date: 8/21/2019 12:21:00 PM
This poem is very beautiful!
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Date: 7/23/2019 11:20:00 AM
Beautiful poem. Thank you for your amazing talent, it is truly inspiring. God bless.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 7/23/2019 5:23:00 PM
thanks so much. Very kind of you.