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Cinder Girl

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Cinder Girl

An ember sparked will softly glow,
and fed by fuel, will grow and grow.
I once was cinder, sparked by you,
first timid. . . till the flames then grew.

And so our start was touch of dawn,
with amber hue, for I was drawn
to eyes so welcoming and warm
I never guessed you’d do me harm.

Like morning glory, love in June
the rapture of mid-afternoon,
romance of which the ancients wrote,
our passion had no antidote.

And with the dusk, though scarlet tinged,
our love began to come unhinged,
for clouds arrived, which filled your eyes,
extinguishing bright twilight skies.

With cold of night came shadows’ pall,
and I could not tear down your wall.
By midnight’s hour, the fire was dead.
Mere ashes smoldered in its stead.

You left, and should you reappear,
I’ve vowed to shun you.  Now I fear
the very thing for which I yearn -
one touch. . . and then again - to burn.


An oldie For The Creative Collective Anthology Series Poetry Contest
of Geraldine Taylor

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Date: 9/28/2017 10:42:00 PM
Wonderfully-crafted rhyme, with a rhythmic cadence that lulled me to endearment ... melancholy and enigmatic, whimsical and witty, charming and edgy - all my favorite elements! I understand the placement, and it is well-deserved - congrats on number one of all-time! Doesn't get any better than that, my friend! Love it - blessings! :-) <3
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Date: 9/23/2017 6:58:00 PM
Great poem. Rhyme, images and most important to me irony deliver a wonderful paean to love lost.
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Date: 9/18/2017 12:30:00 PM
How it can go both ways, I love this poem!
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Date: 9/11/2017 3:33:00 PM
Andrea ... I absolutely love this!!! So good!
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Date: 9/9/2017 3:30:00 PM
Hi Andrea, Enthusiastic Congratulations on your number 1 top of PS 100 poems! Bravo!
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Date: 8/17/2017 8:08:00 AM
That is how love can be. Very forth-telling and emotional and well put.
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Date: 7/30/2017 11:55:00 AM
Nice piece here Andrea! I wish that it could place
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Date: 7/17/2017 5:51:00 PM
Deserving top spot poem.
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Date: 7/16/2017 5:51:00 AM
Excellent!
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Date: 6/15/2017 10:00:00 AM
You do have the talent to speak the secret of lovers Andrea. This is a lifetime story all in some words here. great job. :)
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Date: 6/9/2017 2:46:00 PM
Holy moly this is soo good. Deserves #1 poem *Tom Alan Quest*
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Date: 6/9/2017 6:40:00 PM
thanks, that was so nice of you to say.
Date: 6/7/2017 7:08:00 PM
Very good and well written!
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Date: 6/5/2017 8:53:00 PM
What a great little story. This is a nice write - good rhyming and meter.
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Date: 5/24/2017 5:10:00 PM
I really liked the poem. Its very touching. I love our style of writing.
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Date: 5/22/2017 11:59:00 PM
A great inspiration to a fresh writer! Thank you!
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Date: 5/15/2017 6:54:00 PM
Excellent poem read from you. A heartfelt piece. A++7, my dear lovely friend. Loved always, bl
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Date: 5/15/2017 6:14:00 AM
One touch... and then again- to burn ...I love this. Thanks
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Date: 5/13/2017 3:34:00 PM
this is a very great poem. I love it
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Date: 5/10/2017 4:55:00 PM
Sorry, forgot to rate this. Poems like this are why I give so many sixes. This is an 8! - Dean
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Date: 5/10/2017 4:42:00 PM
Oh, Andrea. This is so beautiful. The word selection and rhyme are fantastic. So glad I took time to read this! - Dean
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Date: 5/10/2017 1:33:00 PM
Came ba k to see how my Cinder girl is doing. Seems she is doing just fine. I mean hey, only no 1 on PS top 100 best. How about that. So pleased I even know you.. far off.. sorta thing.
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Date: 5/9/2017 3:43:00 AM
I love your technique with words. Well done, and thank you for sharing!
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Date: 5/8/2017 2:29:00 PM
Such a nice poem, I really enjoyed reading it however i m only 15 years old and recently started writing poetries and I wanted you to gone through them and give your honest reviews about how you think about them as if you think that some lines can be replace with better words plz don t hesitate to tell me as i ll be more than happy to hear from anyone about my mistakes and how i can overcome them
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Date: 4/25/2017 9:33:00 PM
entertaining simply intelligent what beautiful images you feel the fire , you will read it twice and again ..and ...
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Date: 4/24/2017 7:26:00 PM
Okay Andrea, I found your poem. But I still dom't know what a shared poem is. I rate this poem a 7. I like the rhyming.
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