Cinder Girl

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Cinder Girl

An ember sparked will softly glow,
and fed by fuel, will grow and grow.
I once was cinder, sparked by you,
first timid. . . till the flames then grew.

And so our start was touch of dawn,
with amber hue, for I was drawn
to eyes so welcoming and warm
I never guessed you’d do me harm.

Like morning glory, love in June
the rapture of mid-afternoon,
romance of which the ancients wrote,
our passion had no antidote.

And with the dusk, though scarlet tinged,
our love began to come unhinged,
for clouds arrived, which filled your eyes,
extinguishing bright twilight skies.

With cold of night came shadows’ pall,
and I could not tear down your wall.
By midnight’s hour, the fire was dead.
Mere ashes smoldered in its stead.

You left, and should you reappear,
I’ve vowed to shun you.  Now I fear
the very thing for which I yearn -
one touch. . . and then again - to burn.

Written in 2007 and posted here at Soup in 2010

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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  1. Date: 2/17/2017 5:22:00 AM
    I see this theme in some of your other works. Life is quite an experience, and you capture its many aspects and contradictions with a gentle and passionate set of images and synthesis of words. Very special you are.

  1. Date: 2/14/2017 5:30:00 PM
    nice rhyme

  1. Date: 1/28/2017 1:13:00 PM

  1. Date: 12/21/2016 8:00:00 AM
    This is truly a classic poem, Andrea:) love the metaphor:) congratulations on your win:)

  1. Date: 12/20/2016 7:41:00 AM
    One my personal favorites! Congratulations, Andrea! This one is always a winner! ...Fran

  1. Date: 12/19/2016 8:51:00 PM
    Wonderful poem Andrea. We protect ourselves from past loves, knowing how vulnerable we are to them

  1. Date: 12/19/2016 9:08:00 AM
    Excellent poetry, Andrea! I have read this before and it moves me every time. Congrats on your win :)

  1. Date: 12/18/2016 9:09:00 PM
    This one is the flagship!!! Congrats again Andrea

  1. Date: 12/17/2016 4:18:00 PM
    I can see why you picked this one for the contest. Despite fashions and tastes changing as fast as they do these days, this shows that good poetry never ages. Congratulations on your well deserved win! :-)

  1. Date: 12/17/2016 8:42:00 AM
    A classic all time best poem!

  1. Date: 12/17/2016 4:22:00 AM
    "You left, and should you reappear,// I’ve vowed to shun you. Now I fear// the very thing for which I yearn -// one touch. . . and then again - to burn.//" That last stanza alone... I absolutely love this poem, it's truly amazing...

  1. Date: 12/17/2016 2:54:00 AM
    A really lovely poem Andrea :)

  1. Date: 12/17/2016 12:31:00 AM
    Excellent write, Andrea. I hope you are well and have a wonderful Christmas with your family. You are such a presence here on the Soup and I truly admire your generousity of spirit. God bless!

  1. Date: 12/16/2016 11:32:00 AM
    Very nice, Andrea! Congrats! Love the final line!

  1. Date: 12/16/2016 10:29:00 AM
    Congratulations Andrea :)

  1. Date: 12/16/2016 9:51:00 AM
    comments galore on this one. I'll add one more - Nice placement. i'm sure my little contest wasn't the first time

  1. Date: 12/16/2016 9:46:00 AM
    Congratulations on your very best Hugs eve

  1. Date: 12/15/2016 5:20:00 PM
    love it girl Hugs

  1. Date: 12/11/2016 10:32:00 AM
    really very nice, great job, your word selection was so well done

  1. Date: 11/22/2016 12:20:00 AM
    Quite lovely in its inevitable melancholy. No. 1 for a reason. Quite gifted - write on... :-)))

  1. Date: 11/19/2016 12:46:00 AM
    That was very cleverly written, and I loved the way it flowed.

  1. Date: 11/15/2016 6:13:00 PM
    Really nice, loved it. Congrats.

  1. Date: 11/1/2016 12:26:00 AM
    I really enjoyed this poet's style of writing it got to the point and made you feel the pain as a good writer should do the use of poetic terms are wonderful made me feel that i had been cheated on.

  1. Date: 9/28/2016 5:16:00 PM
    Andrea, This is a phenomenally descriptive sonnet. I loved it! Thanks!

  1. Date: 9/28/2016 12:17:00 PM
    Andrea, I'm a newbie, posting my poem for the first time and took time out to read other poems. And I must say congratulations on this very beautifully written poem. I read it and immediately I was inspired to continue on this new journey on which I've embarked.