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This poem was winner of PoetrySoup's International Poetry Contest after I first arrived to Soup in 2010. Thanks to this poem, I won my lifetime membership here. A producer in England contacted me after he read it and wanted to showcase this poem, along with 19 other poems of mine, in an artistic movie called Six Days of Sistine. This seems like a good place for me to show a link to his movie. It is available either for sale or for online streaming with Amazon Prime.

https://www.imdb.com/title/tt7710360/

An ember sparked will softly glow, and fed by fuel, will grow and grow. I once was cinder, sparked by you, first timid. . . till the flames then grew. And so our start was touch of dawn, with amber hue, for I was drawn to eyes so welcoming and warm I never guessed you’d do me harm. Like morning glory, love in June the rapture of mid-afternoon, romance of which the ancients wrote, our passion had no antidote. And with the dusk, though scarlet tinged, our love began to come unhinged, for clouds arrived, which filled your eyes, extinguishing bright twilight skies. With cold of night came shadows’ pall, and I could not tear down your wall. By midnight’s hour, the fire was dead. Mere ashes smoldered in its stead. You left, and should you reappear, I’ve vowed to shun you. Now I fear the very thing for which I yearn - one touch. . . and then again - to burn. Original date of posting: 2/6/2010(though written earlier than that)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 5/3/2021 12:39:00 PM
I loved this poem when I first read it, 3 months ago. It's beautiful. I especially love the way you ended it So true.
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Date: 2/26/2021 1:22:00 PM
I loved your reading of this beautiful poem on the episode of Unleashing the World of Music and Poetry where you were interviewed by Tammy Bowers. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cDKZfg5ZtD8&fbclid=IwAR32Vsdjo0NQyMCzqPb3ERCldLt9m7tpZkCQKYGB8CmdF0ZSID6rgpeLQwM Splendid interview ~ bravo!
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Date: 2/10/2021 7:57:00 PM
Back with more congrats, Andrea. Glad to see this wonderful poem published in the 2020 PS Anthology ~
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Date: 1/8/2021 4:48:00 PM
Hi Andrea, Just came back here after a long absence - couldn’t stay away forever. Your poem, lovely but so sad, touched me, and well worth reading the emotions running within.
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Date: 12/18/2020 8:08:00 AM
Some of the scansion was a bit troublesome for me; however, the extended metaphor was beautifully kept within words that painted the stark picture of love gone awry.
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Date: 12/9/2020 3:22:00 AM
Love this one. Will come back and read it again. Thanks.
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Date: 10/26/2020 9:15:00 AM
Your poem is a touching, exquisite piece of writing. The rhymes are perfect!
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Date: 10/8/2020 10:39:00 AM
I am touched. Just lovely!
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Date: 10/5/2020 1:47:00 AM
Absolutely wonderful Andrea, an awesome, emotional love story, poetry at it’s best. Belle
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Date: 8/21/2020 3:05:00 PM
Oh it is amazing... Read your note... I must congratulate you... May many more successes kiss your feet.. Amen
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Date: 7/23/2020 10:58:00 AM
Andrea read this with my wife for the first time we both loved it. Congratulations on an magnificent piece worthy of much praise...
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Date: 6/20/2020 2:05:00 PM
Ok after reading it again, yeah it is still your best Andrea, one hard to beat in a contest. My best ever contest was filled in a few hours mostly by new poets here, I sure missed quality writes like this one. Maybe I'll do another with poems from 2010 to last year then we would get some classic entries!
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Date: 6/5/2020 10:59:00 PM
Hi Andrea, it's nice to know that another graduate of BYU, living in Utah, is doing so well (poetically speaking.) I think we share a similar style too. Congratulations on this poem, very well done indeed. I just finished first, myself, with the poem "Oliver, A Boy." Nothing very deep about it, but you might like, for a start. And Oliver has yet to make an appearance!
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Date: 6/1/2020 4:20:00 PM
Always nice to come back to read this
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Date: 5/31/2020 4:30:00 PM
Very cool -- loved the flow, the subject, the way you expressed it. Should you have time, take a look at my poem, The Flower. I think you'll see a certain similarity in expression. But under any circumstance -- loved the poem.
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Date: 5/27/2020 2:20:00 PM
Somewhere in your five hundred or so comments I'm sure is one of mine, but let me add another. This is beautiful. I will be reading the others you have listed over time.
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Date: 5/24/2020 1:25:00 AM
This is wonderful! I love the imagery that you have gently woven. To my faves.. Cheers!
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Date: 5/24/2020 12:16:00 AM
Lovely to read this awesome poem again, Andrea.
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Date: 5/17/2020 12:59:00 AM
Andrea, Bid you a goodnight.., 'Poem Previously Added'...sigh. -Richard
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Date: 4/26/2020 11:52:00 PM
These are the words I always desire to hear.. Beautiful and strong work
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Date: 4/24/2020 6:12:00 PM
Absolutely beautiful poem! So full of emotion and flows like a drifting cloud.
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Date: 4/23/2020 11:31:00 AM
amazing piece of art. read it 100th tym now
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Date: 4/21/2020 7:14:00 PM
truly amazing, so deep and full of emotion
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Date: 4/7/2020 3:01:00 AM
Such a lovely creation. The smooth flowing words like silk are truly soothing. Thanks poet Andrea.
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Date: 3/11/2020 7:31:00 AM
Heart felt and very meaningful
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