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This poem was winner of PoetrySoup's International Poetry Contest after I first arrived to Soup in 2010. Thanks to this poem, I won my lifetime membership here. A producer in England contacted me after he read it and wanted to showcase this poem, along with 19 other poems of mine, in an artistic movie called Six Days of Sistine. This seems like a good place for me to show a link to his movie. It is available either for sale or for online streaming with Amazon Prime.

https://www.imdb.com/title/tt7710360/

An ember sparked will softly glow, and fed by fuel, will grow and grow. I once was cinder, sparked by you, first timid. . . till the flames then grew. And so our start was touch of dawn, with amber hue, for I was drawn to eyes so welcoming and warm I never guessed you’d do me harm. Like morning glory, love in June the rapture of mid-afternoon, romance of which the ancients wrote, our passion had no antidote. And with the dusk, though scarlet tinged, our love began to come unhinged, for clouds arrived, which filled your eyes, extinguishing bright twilight skies. With cold of night came shadows’ pall, and I could not tear down your wall. By midnight’s hour, the fire was dead. Mere ashes smoldered in its stead. You left, and should you reappear, I’ve vowed to shun you. Now I fear the very thing for which I yearn - one touch. . . and then again - to burn. Original date of posting: 2/6/2010(though written earlier than that)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 8/9/2022 2:21:00 PM
Funny how I found this accidentally while researching different types of rhyme here in PSoup. It's truly an honor to know you personally (from afar) given your international notoriety and obviously, amazing poetic talent. Mega blessings, Terry
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Date: 7/19/2022 6:50:00 AM
Stunning~I see why Cinder Girl was a winner in the International Poetry contest and then sought after by a movie producer! It has that Wow factor! I will check it out on Amazon Prime. :)Paulette
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Date: 7/19/2022 6:49:00 AM
Stunning~I see why Cinder Girl was a winner in the International Poetry contest and then sought after by a movie producer! It has that Wow factor! I will check it out on Amazon Prime. :)Paulette
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Date: 6/7/2022 10:50:00 PM
A brilliant poem Andrea. It's lovely to hear how successful you are with this. Congratulations.
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Date: 6/3/2022 4:10:00 AM
She's my buddy...she'z my pal ;) This iz the first time since 2009 that i have visited this part uv Poetry Soup my dear poet! (i'm slow ;]) And low and behold; my poet friend iz numero una! Tre bien Andrea! Oh, and listen dear vooman; i've been stricken with COPD for yearz, but for the last 7 or so...yep, not so good, yet once in a while...here i iz ;) congrats dear poet...much love, james
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James Peranteau
Date: 6/3/2022 4:13:00 AM
p.s...i may be loosing my breath, yet i haven't lost mine wit girlie ;)
Date: 4/7/2022 5:01:00 PM
i adore the Romantic movement and this is a jewel among them. the mix of inspiration and emotion intertwine in this and the lovely ending, both of honey and bitters where the logic of our weakest moments reveals themselves from the shadows...great execution
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 4/7/2022 11:09:00 PM
wow, thanks so much.
Date: 4/7/2022 6:48:00 AM
It's hard to imagine any poem that is more beautiful. Congrats for being the best. Blessings.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 4/7/2022 11:10:00 PM
That was so sweet to say . Thanks so much , curtis.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 4/7/2022 11:10:00 PM
but believe me, if you knew my ailments these days, you would not consider me blest!!
Date: 4/7/2022 6:06:00 AM
An amazing poem! Congrats on all of your successes with this and your other poems.
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Date: 3/24/2022 1:03:00 AM
Great write Andrea. I like the Roman flower comparison. Your poem makes me think I can go on burning...LOL Great knowledge of things. Nice to see it applied to love. Take care. Trevor
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Date: 3/11/2022 4:34:00 PM
Just re-reading and enjoying your all-time favorite (per poetrysoup) poem, Andrea. Enjoyed it again!
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Date: 3/11/2022 10:06:00 AM
"Love's survival" --- a paucity. The proper-dress is ice-skates and blindfolds.
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Date: 1/24/2022 2:15:00 PM
Wow!
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Date: 1/19/2022 11:10:00 PM
Dear Andrea, I have returned once again to read this MASTERPIECE. A poem that will live on and on for generations to come.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 4/7/2022 11:11:00 PM
awww, thanks, Elaine.
Date: 1/11/2022 2:17:00 AM
And congratulations! For a wonderful poem.
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Date: 1/8/2022 2:00:00 PM
I'm speechless; it is a beautiful poem.
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Date: 12/26/2021 9:19:00 PM
This piece is marvelous. I love it dearly.
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Date: 12/13/2021 12:10:00 PM
Andrea, Hope when the new year has begun, I'm around to see this romance poem complete twelve turns 'round the sun. -Richard
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 12/14/2021 4:32:00 PM
ahh, I love what you said here.
Date: 11/8/2021 5:24:00 AM
At last I came here to read this GEM. Aww, what beautiful flow and rhymes and the magic it creates in the mind of the reader after reading this....just AWESOME my friend...no wonder this is the number one poem in our Soup, from a stellar poetess. Sorry for being so late in reading this excellent work Ria...BIG hugs...~ Ani
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 12/14/2021 4:33:00 PM
thanks so much, dear friend. I need to tell you something at Soupmail.
Date: 11/4/2021 5:08:00 PM
Loved the rhyming and the imagery.
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Date: 9/25/2021 1:49:00 AM
A winner Andrea in so many ways Andrea
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Date: 7/27/2021 7:08:00 PM
What a powerful and beautiful poem, I loved the evocative imagery.
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Date: 7/24/2021 9:47:00 AM
Rereading Cinder Girl is better than rubbing a magic lamp. My lucky charm. -Richard
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Date: 7/21/2021 5:38:00 PM
WOW,Beautiful..!
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Date: 7/20/2021 11:30:00 PM
Ah what marvel of a poem! Born in heart and reared by head, and I feel fortunate to have read it. Congrats for a deserving place on top of a table, and in hearts of readers.
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Date: 7/3/2021 11:56:00 AM
Andrea , I too have been ash. Palpable joy and pain.When I cast my mind back to those moments, they still bring the elation AND the inevitable sting….amazing work ! Kim
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