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Cinder Girl

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Cinder Girl

An ember sparked will softly glow,
and fed by fuel, will grow and grow.
I once was cinder, sparked by you,
first timid. . . till the flames then grew.

And so our start was touch of dawn,
with amber hue, for I was drawn
to eyes so welcoming and warm
I never guessed you’d do me harm.

Like morning glory, love in June
the rapture of mid-afternoon,
romance of which the ancients wrote,
our passion had no antidote.

And with the dusk, though scarlet tinged,
our love began to come unhinged,
for clouds arrived, which filled your eyes,
extinguishing bright twilight skies.

With cold of night came shadows’ pall,
and I could not tear down your wall.
By midnight’s hour, the fire was dead.
Mere ashes smoldered in its stead.

You left, and should you reappear,
I’ve vowed to shun you.  Now I fear
the very thing for which I yearn -
one touch. . . and then again - to burn.

Written in 2007 and posted here at Soup in 2010

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Date: 5/24/2017 5:10:00 PM
I really liked the poem. Its very touching. I love our style of writing.
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Date: 5/22/2017 11:59:00 PM
A great inspiration to a fresh writer! Thank you!
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Date: 5/15/2017 6:54:00 PM
Excellent poem read from you. A heartfelt piece. A++7, my dear lovely friend. Loved always, bl
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Date: 5/15/2017 6:14:00 AM
One touch... and then again- to burn ...I love this. Thanks
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Date: 5/13/2017 3:34:00 PM
this is a very great poem. I love it
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Date: 5/10/2017 4:55:00 PM
Sorry, forgot to rate this. Poems like this are why I give so many sixes. This is an 8! - Dean
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Date: 5/10/2017 4:42:00 PM
Oh, Andrea. This is so beautiful. The word selection and rhyme are fantastic. So glad I took time to read this! - Dean
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Date: 5/10/2017 1:33:00 PM
Came ba k to see how my Cinder girl is doing. Seems she is doing just fine. I mean hey, only no 1 on PS top 100 best. How about that. So pleased I even know you.. far off.. sorta thing.
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Date: 5/9/2017 3:43:00 AM
I love your technique with words. Well done, and thank you for sharing!
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Date: 5/8/2017 2:29:00 PM
Such a nice poem, I really enjoyed reading it however i m only 15 years old and recently started writing poetries and I wanted you to gone through them and give your honest reviews about how you think about them as if you think that some lines can be replace with better words plz don t hesitate to tell me as i ll be more than happy to hear from anyone about my mistakes and how i can overcome them
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Date: 4/25/2017 9:33:00 PM
entertaining simply intelligent what beautiful images you feel the fire , you will read it twice and again ..and ...
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Date: 4/24/2017 7:26:00 PM
Okay Andrea, I found your poem. But I still dom't know what a shared poem is. I rate this poem a 7. I like the rhyming.
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Date: 4/24/2017 8:44:00 AM
Very good rhyming and charming to read!
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Date: 4/19/2017 6:50:00 AM
wow!!! not getting exact words to express but it was wow!!
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Date: 4/17/2017 2:27:00 AM
Simply the best!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 4/17/2017 3:15:00 PM
wow, I am amazed. Thank you.
Date: 4/13/2017 6:27:00 PM
Andrea, as I said before, you are one of my favorites - a genuine poet. And this is proof I'm right.
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Date: 4/13/2017 6:41:00 AM
The cycle of love, written with a most accomplished hand. Top-notch poetry.
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Date: 4/7/2017 8:23:00 AM
I must be the only one left here at the soup that's just getting around to reading this. It's just wonderful. Of all your work I've read, I miss your most celebrated piece. Forgive my disrespect...
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Date: 3/29/2017 5:52:00 PM
Wow, this is the best poem I've read on hear. Honestly, it was great.
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Date: 3/26/2017 9:52:00 AM
Loved reading this again, Andrea:) you really rock:) a 7:)
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Date: 3/25/2017 3:37:00 AM
Lovely poem ! I was not aware that poems get plagiarised so easily . Plagiarism is a huge compliment to ones creative abilities no doubt but still highly unethical.I think there should be stricter laws to deal with this. I enjoyed this poem which I got to read years after it was penned :)
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Date: 3/20/2017 8:54:00 AM
Glorious poem that forever will be true dear, Andrea! Much enjoyed! A 7+
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Date: 3/19/2017 3:50:00 PM
Truly a timeless, classic poem. Sadness weaved with beauty by a wonderful, lovely heart.:-) a fave, 7+ blessings, lynn
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Date: 3/18/2017 8:54:00 AM
Beautiful.. that was a great poem.. Can you please read mine I think I may need guidance ?
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Date: 3/12/2017 9:19:00 AM
This is poetry at its best. Great piece Andrea
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