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A Kneaded Life

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I’ve watched him whither. He came to me a decade ago, stooped in pain. The fine-boned features of his face and the clarity of his Irish skin still holding on to a genetic predisposition to beauty. He was a small man, but in height only, the oceans filled his heart. For a decade, I held him upright. With the help of God, his shoulders, upon which Atlas stood, released their burden, pulled back from their curl about his core. Touch was a healing balm from the helter-skelter of his life. As my fingertips and palms, the heel of my hand explored his dis-ease; he thawed, not like a snowflake but a glacier. Decades of stuffed down regret, and remorse cajoled to release with no expected outcome but rest. 

the clutter
of his life surrounds –
snow falls

Parts once strong: pride that flew, legs that skied, eyes that could take the measure of a man; now, rest every afternoon. There is no need now to mark the time. Still, he wears a watch, a Christmas gift from his love. The office lays footsteps from his backdoor. He feels they still need him.

his sailboat
sits wrapped in canvass –
winter wind’s blow  

Liquid Imagination August 2014

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Date: 4/8/2016 11:50:00 AM
An outstanding haibun my dear friend, Deb. Thank you so much for sharing not only this but the other haibun of yours. I'm planning to try one soon and I thought of visiting your works. Thank you so much for sharing. More blessings. love lots and hugs, Leonora
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 4/8/2016 3:18:00 PM
Thank you so much Lenora, haibun is a good form to learn how to write short prose in & maybe accepted as narrative non-fiction, prose poetry or memoir, so if you like to try to get paid? it's a good form to polish up!
Date: 12/5/2015 9:04:00 AM
What a lovely poem! Spectacular and mind romancing. A 7 and an excellent share
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Date: 12/5/2015 9:06:00 AM
Thank you Funom
Date: 11/5/2015 8:21:00 PM
Wonderful haibun. A masterpiece of the form!
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Date: 10/28/2015 6:25:00 AM
This piece is full of compassion, and connection. A poem full of understanding. A pain so real and tangible. Sincere, beautiful words.
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Date: 10/27/2015 10:08:00 PM
The touch of life -- how precious it is to explore the world experience with this person -- that is a gift! I wished you lived closer!
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Date: 10/27/2015 10:18:00 PM
it would be so nice to have a convention of Soupers wouldn't it!
Date: 10/27/2015 4:39:00 PM
I know you have healing hands Debbie - I have limited experience of healing except I had reiki many years ago performed by my late friend Rose - such an incredible experience :-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 10/27/2015 5:23:00 PM
I was going through a terrible time Debbie and the healing was incredible -I had had something stolen which was later found - Rose was also able to use crystals to confirm who it was who had taken it - although it could never be proven and was brushed under the carpet I am very wary of this person :-( hugs Jan xx
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 10/27/2015 5:17:00 PM
It is- isn't it! So few people touch each other- just accepting the humanity in each of us. You know it feels wonderful just to have someone hold your head for 5 minutes!
Date: 10/27/2015 4:09:00 PM
I think it flows beautifully. It really does feel like a life story or a spoken word poem. It's soft and powerful at the same time.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 10/27/2015 4:10:00 PM
Thank you Brandee!
Date: 10/27/2015 3:26:00 PM
There is a sound fill of me reading the poem on that link-try it out! Great venue as well-
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Date: 10/27/2015 3:23:00 PM
Vivid. I feel I know him. Beautiful and whistful.
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Date: 10/27/2015 3:25:00 PM
Thank you Kathie!