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When doves cry

the sky scatters tear-seeds - diamond-hard shards of stars that jewel his dark water-tomb with crystals of light. The clouds are floating feathers. Now what hand will seize this weeping dove of grief and squeeze? Whose fingers will grip the silk-white wing and wring the lily of its neck? The ringnecks wail their long lament... His Symphonie Fantastique, a sabbath night's dream - grizzled groans and moans and distant screams, shrieking strings, fading cries of the meek and weak - a tormenting dirge in his dying ears. He was all hate, fate and fear, incandescent, suspended from the gibbet of public jeer, all care cremated, with a yearning for burning. Raging ashes imprisoned in a small salt urn flung far into far-flung waves to churn the unfathomable black light depths. Wings alighting like white lightning splitting the crying sky: a choir of doves from above to transcend and ascend and soft-sing him home.

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Date: 10/10/2023 6:39:00 AM
How you paint imagery is beyond beautiful! I am captivated and in awe of your word weaving! So creative! I love how you do internal rhymes in your lines something i noticed from what ive read from you, and also the unique way you describe things, whilst not overdoing it but making them flow seamlessly, is beyond impeccable! A gifted poetess you are, you dont just weave words but emotions, and they would touch any readers heart! Exquisite poem this is! I love it.
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Date: 8/27/2023 11:12:00 AM
breathless from the journey, I sing your praises for this lamenting, heart touching sensation. It is the voice of, not just a heart, but a soul. God bless you always with prayers for the best always, Love, Gina
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Date: 8/24/2023 1:16:00 AM
Oh my, this is a breathtaking piece myriad tones of darkness and sombre emotions, so delicately infused in gorgeously carved lines.. I'm in awe of your pristine, exquisite and eloquent wordsmithery.. I love so many lines here.. "Diamond-hard shards of stars", "jewel his dark water-tomb with crystals of light", " Whose fingers will grip the silk-white wing and wring the lily of its neck", " Splitting the crying sky" Ahh, so poignant and heartfelt. This definitely has become one of my most favs!
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Date: 8/15/2023 1:14:00 PM
Lovely poetry, Charlotte. I especially like the phrase, "soft-sing him home. Your descriptions were eloquent. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill
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Date: 8/15/2023 8:29:00 AM
One of my favourite Prince songs. I like the Genuwine version as well. I like what you did with this theme. Great imagery and storytelling.
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Date: 8/13/2023 11:51:00 AM
Surreal. Ethereal. Quite brilliant Charlotte. You manage to tell a story using just imagery and..get this.. seriously..it read just as wonderfully when I read it starting with your last stanza to the first. Cheers - Gary
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Date: 8/12/2023 2:44:00 PM
Back with congrats Charlotte, knew it was a winner, called it with the first comment!
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Date: 8/12/2023 1:23:00 PM
In slowly read it catching the rhymes I enjoyed the learning. Increase my vocabulary with words I already knew but when you can use them in poetry there is a value in that.
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Date: 8/10/2023 12:48:00 PM
Exceptional... this poetry site is so fortunate to have you sharing here--this is 100% art!!
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John Hamilton
Date: 8/12/2023 2:43:00 PM
I agree 100% Craig!
Date: 8/10/2023 7:37:00 AM
This is what happens when guys fall in love, they become basket cases. Death is cruel, though, and I suppose suicide is the cruellest way to go. Great words, enjoyed.
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Date: 8/10/2023 1:08:00 AM
Congratulations on your top win, Charlotte. It puts me in mind of Picasso's Cat with Bird ... a touch of personification in the interpretation. FAVing this poem.
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Date: 8/9/2023 7:16:00 PM
Congratulations on the top win! Brilliant
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Date: 8/7/2023 10:48:00 AM
Well, I'm trying to figure this out. Did he die at sea? A bad man? But then the last line seems to offer hope. In any case, you certainly pulverized the theme, in a good way
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/10/2023 2:48:00 PM
Back for another look. I could never write like this. In the end, I'm a simple storyteller. You rate
Date: 8/7/2023 8:24:00 AM
Ah-mazing!!! You certainly are one of the best writers on this site Charlotte, this is a sure winner in my book!
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