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Walking and Writing It Down

Just taking notes as I walk for the perhaps of a poem later. Fun to share real time first drafts. Walking from out of town to into town Passed a churchyard with no church Only steps remain where worship was But the grave stones mostly stand Looking old but new With the wishes of the grief stricken Still legible and true But all those who remember surely gone The plots long since passed their 100 year lease But presumably convenience keeps them in place To stop a derelict site becoming occupied by the living Empty car show rooms, empty warehouses I should probably stick to safer streets But this is fascinating Thistles as high as my waist At the side of the path to the right Thunderous traffic to the left Three metre wide safe passage for me As long as I trot on past a giant puddle Rows and rows of car park spaces Easily accessible but fined if you do Coatings on the windows To keep the sun out Of the now vacant rooms For a site that was probably always unsuitable The salvation army building small but pristine Probably turning people away due to lack of space when surrounded by empty offices The underpass tagged and illegible By the living Except for the words 'we can try' Sirens screech by Men work on foundations and skyscrapers across the road Over the bridge of dirty water I walk Seeing evidence of new life Whilst the old rots in place Heading to the shiny section of town To the top of a sky scraper I'll walk back in company I expect Down the parallel street Edit: just researched the church which originally had wealthy parishioners and several people of historical interest are buried there, meaning I could find their photos and bios. Including knighted physicians, barons and chemists who made important discoveries. The area became deprived as rich people moved away from the centres and following that slum clearances meant the area no longer had enough surrounding residences. The church originally had space for 1700 people and was a Grecian building. It was demolished in 1964 and rebuilt but the new church lasted only a short time. There are personal accounts from those that grew up on the impoverished streets about how they played hide and seek amongst the grave stones as the church at one point was at the end of a residential street. The vault contained the remains of a renowned family who owned significant parts of the area and had political and religious significance. I've also just found a list of who is in every grave, including ages :'(

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Date: 2/26/2024 9:32:00 PM
It seems a bit if history and a bit of change. I browsed some past poems and found this gem. It is an exciting background that leaves me with questions Thank you for this poem.
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Date: 2/27/2024 2:34:00 PM
Thanks Hilda - it was so fascinating. The cheap bit of town that had been wealthy and poor and was now being redeveloped but bits of past successes and failings still remained
Date: 5/9/2023 7:20:00 PM
A wonderful tour through a landcape as it connects and settles in the mind of the beholder. Love it DD. The world comes alive, hits the senses of the reader. I like poems that absorb the surroundings, gives a place for the soul to take a stroll, find a corner to rest and take in the world.
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Date: 5/9/2023 10:12:00 PM
Thanks Paul, I loved that I'd not walked there before but the sequences linked together anyway. That grave yard is very full though (I've read the full list) there's many a poem there for sure.
Date: 5/9/2023 7:31:00 AM
Such evocative imagery paralleling vacant lots with the fullness of the city. Such a juxtaposition resonates with my walk on that railroad. I like how empty offices lacking spaces turn away people. If I make a suggestion, I think this line could be tightened. Sometimes emptiness has its fullness. Bravo.
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Date: 5/9/2023 7:52:00 AM
Thank you, none of it has been tightened yet as I literally just walked and wrote down whatever I thought as I passed it, it was just good fortune there were juxtaposing vibes. Feel free to make suggestions - I have a very relaxed attitude to what constitutes a poem and tend not to work on things to perfect them often
Date: 5/9/2023 4:34:00 AM
You could've been walking any city street in the US, DD. I would have lingered at the old church. There was a poem there. Great to read you today. have a great afternoon:)
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Date: 5/9/2023 7:08:00 AM
Thanks - I wish I'd have spent some time there looking around but just read a couple of grave stones then carried on walking. I'm going to have to look it up! Thanks for your comment

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