Visitor Finale - with Maria Williams

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The Story so far…

Makani (The Rising Wind), a beautiful extra-terrestrial researcher is sent to a remote island to observe earth. She finds Sam, a shipwrecked earthling near death owing to drowning. Sam (Ka ‘Lo - ‘A Mighty Eagle’), was dispatched to identify the location and investigate unusual signal activity monitored to be emanating from a remote group of island atolls. 

Makani breaches her Mother Planet’s charter which is for observation only and specifically forbids contact.  She and Sam inevitably fall in love - a wonderful new experience to her for which she has to bear the consequences…


Makani

Surrealistic sensations immortalize as our lips seek and lock
Interchange of strange, new emotions flow as our tongues entwine
On my fevered skin your caressing fingers script my Rhapsody in Blue
A thrilling euphoric state of bliss unfamiliar to this body o' mine

Yet to construe your oeuvre - I am Makani, the Venus of your every verse
I ~ the dew that cumulates dusk to dawn on my awakening rose
I ~ the aromatic rapture floating me through your every page
I ~ the ink that elicits from your quill that no entity dare oppose

Transported through time and space, orbiting in an interstellar kiss-

But wait...

Though this rapturous music flutes a mellifluous purr
A discordant humming infiltrates these harmonious chords

Do you hear?

Hark at the sky - Oh earthling, hear that humming sound
A shuttle sent from the mothership with my Commander - He is here
My people are benign - worry not, you have naught to fear

Observe how he leaps off the hovering craft before it has grounded
His expression reflects disappointment - and with me, frustration
Fear not my love, for it is for me and me alone that he has come
I have disregarded a sacred command, in his pained eyes - a violation

My law and duty bids me that violence is forbidden
Our planet has for centuries lived in a harmonious system
So why has he taken my arm in this forceful grip?
O omnipresent Ancestral Immortals hear my plea, I need your wisdom

Speak, O wise ones, for your words I will heed
On earthly ears your voices are choral music in an evanescent breeze


Ancestral Guardian Spirits 

 “Makani, it is your obligation, you must return
Struggle not and bid your farewell, suppress this unnatural desire”

Makani

O omniscient ones though I am heavy with grief
I call my sensations to order - I will comply-
As for you my worthy comrade, this violence toward me is anathema
I must say my farewell - I will be brief
Let me be, lest I return pain for pain and orders defy


Ancestral Guardian Spirits 

"Makani, struggle not - you must acquiesce to his command
Dry your tears - Though we understand not your obsession with this alien
We deny your pain not - motion your sentiment to him from afar -

Alas, your struggle has created such woe!
Your commander has fallen, his breath of life has become
Contiguous with this planet's wind song - it is forbidden
It is forbidden... it will be viewed as a violation
We fear - My dear - We fear

Heed our words - depart now you must
To your Mother Planet you are now unable to return
Set forth now in you craft, be patient,
We will instruct you on the course you will need to set”

Sam (Ka 'Lo)

I am human, a man of flesh and blood, nothing more
     Yet I have beheld things which no man may behold
Near to death I was, washed upon some ethereal shore
     From whence I have arisen, my mates presumably dead

Why was I chosen to suffer both bliss and torment?
     Why did I not perish along with the others?
This creature before me appears to be heaven sent
     Her touch... her touch like nothing I have experienced

Or is she a demon sent to carry me away to some lonely void
     Bereft of all humanity and corporeal comforts?
And yet, these past few days I have thoroughly enjoyed
     Her sweet society, her comfort, her tender kiss

Her tears upon my tongue taste salty, like my own
     The spilt blood which runs upon the rock red, like mine
I see the sorrow in her eyes for what's been sown-
     The untimely death of her comrade troubles her so

She gently takes my hand and leads me to her ship, 
     Imploring me to come, to take me... somewhere,
Far away from here on some fantastical journey, a trip
     Into the great unknown, into the blackness of space.

She places my hand over her heart and hers upon mine as before
     Images and thoughts slowly merge into a coherent pattern
I understand - she cannot go home, we must search for
     A world to call our own, an Eden from which to start anew

Makani

Sam, my earthly love - I name you Ka ‘Lo - A mighty eagle
I ~ the Rising Wind beneath your wings, in synchrony we will soar
On Avian wings we shall embark on an adventure of interstellar travel
Colour my life as I will yours, as a technicolour journey we explore

Ka 'Lo

I peer through the tempered glass and can see the earth, my earth
     Topaz blue and angel white, a sparkling jewel in the ebon expanse
I'm surely going to miss my home, and, for what it's worth -
     The girl I once loved and must now leave behind 


* Maria has given me much credit, but the truth is that the story idea was hers and hers alone.  She's the real genius behind this story.  In the end, an enjoyable collaboration. 

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 4/1/2018 2:34:00 PM
JUST NOW FOUND THIS WONDROUS CREATION. Truly a jewel and one that has great depth, flow and power! You two make a powerful team! A fav....
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July Morning
Date: 5/14/2018 2:43:00 PM
Thanks much big guy
Date: 2/27/2018 7:50:00 AM
A wonderful collaboration, Tom and Maria, though not a very happy ending..
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July Morning
Date: 3/1/2018 7:53:00 AM
Thanks
Date: 2/24/2018 11:58:00 AM
July, your grande finale was as enthralling and compelling as the first two installments of your stunning collaboration with Maria. The imagination, story-telling and seamless coordination of your talents created a seamless and fantastic journey of a write that I didn't want to end.. Consider a sequel..? Warmest wishes!
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Susan Ashley
Date: 2/26/2018 4:24:00 AM
I think the public has a right to know.. :))
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July Morning
Date: 2/25/2018 8:10:00 AM
So many unanswered questions... Did they find a suitable new world? Was it inhabited and if so by whom? Were they well-received or is there hostility? Did their love hold true? Can they procreate? Sigh. We may never know. ..
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Susan Ashley
Date: 2/24/2018 6:04:00 PM
hell yeah!
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July Morning
Date: 2/24/2018 5:17:00 PM
Yes it would be interesting to know how they fared, wouldn't it?
Date: 2/19/2018 1:40:00 PM
An entertaining and enthralling story, throughout! I am still on a break from posting poems here, but I came back for a few reads, including the culmination of this tale. Much enjoyed!
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July Morning
Date: 2/19/2018 3:08:00 PM
Das is goot!
Date: 2/14/2018 1:47:00 AM
(continued) ... the fact that it was a collab astounds me, as I just could never give way so freely as you two have here ... I truly admire that, (as I am too much of a control freak). This is going into my favs for sure, and I will be reading again. Be very proud of this one, you two, this is great penning all the way around, and I just plain had FUN! Blessings, Friends! :-)
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 2/17/2018 11:42:00 PM
I would enjoy reading it, Tom, please let me know! :-) I wrote a fun little Star Wars story that crosses paths with some familiar characters, (in my short stories - "A Stop On Tatooine"), I wrote it for a sports blog about ten years ago just for fun. I am also writing a much longer version of The Ruby Spires, and I think you'd like "Sojourn's Close" and "To Count Quantum Sheep".
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July Morning
Date: 2/14/2018 12:02:00 PM
Thanks Greg. If I ever find my star trek mini script gonna repost
Date: 2/14/2018 1:46:00 AM
Ah, a tasty sci-fi sandwich with so many layers - meat, veggies, condiments! Oh, but way beyond those basic comparisons ... just wonderful writing on multiple levels, but brought together quite well ... the first two parts just a tad more fluid than the last, but I like the switching of gears. This is a bit fantasy, a bit "hard" sci-fi, and much creativity and thought ...
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Date: 2/12/2018 9:56:00 AM
So the beautiful alien gal convinced the hunky handsome guy to go with her to outer space, to some unknown planet? Wow. She must have had some amazing power in her touch. Good job, you two.
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Becca Teagan
Date: 2/12/2018 3:40:00 PM
haha :) so true
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July Morning
Date: 2/12/2018 1:46:00 PM
Men! We're too easy. ..
Date: 2/12/2018 12:27:00 AM
Great story! So creative and fantastical. I enjoyed each and every episode. A fine finale too. A FAV for sure!
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July Morning
Date: 2/12/2018 7:33:00 AM
Exquisite!
Date: 2/11/2018 9:22:00 AM
This type of storytelling is not really my cup of tea, but both you and Maria have written a great three part write.. I do like the beginning of this poem.. Great collaboration by both of you..
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July Morning
Date: 2/12/2018 7:32:00 AM
Earl Grey it is then
Date: 2/10/2018 10:01:00 PM
I have to read this again, before I commit to making an intelligent comment. And you wonder what's going on in my mind? It must be that space food. Will comment soon on both Maria's and your page. Best smile and laugh all day.
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July Morning
Date: 2/12/2018 7:31:00 AM
I tried to convince maria to let her eat him but alas, she's a hopeless romantic ;)
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Leanne Lovejoy-Burton
Date: 2/11/2018 2:26:00 PM
Excellent collaboration. The first two parts of the story were the best. I kind of got a a bit lost in the third part, but I do like the concept of the character names and the coming together of the two lovers who are worlds apart (but then again not really worlds apart) - symbolically and through image of "wind beneath the eagle's wings".
Date: 2/10/2018 3:05:00 PM
An exquisite poem from two writers who can write in such a sublimal way. It was a poem I thoroughly enjoyed reading. Well done to both of you. A fave.
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July Morning
Date: 2/10/2018 3:22:00 PM
Cool beans victor
Date: 2/10/2018 2:17:00 PM
Have just visited Maria's post...only fair that I leave the same comments here: A hearty round of applause for both collaborators! Having followed this narrative from beginning to end I must say that I have been impressed by the seamless flow. You travel on the same wavelength. Regards // paul
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July Morning
Date: 2/10/2018 3:19:00 PM
Thanks Paul. Coming from you it means alot. Maria and I have totally different styles, but in this context I think it worked nicely
Date: 2/10/2018 1:18:00 PM
You two are great story tellers, JM and Maria. Your imagination reaches far beyond earth, as well illustrated in this final episode. Kudos to both!
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July Morning
Date: 2/10/2018 3:21:00 PM
I like to imagine we are. :)
Date: 2/10/2018 12:21:00 PM
Such wonderful fantasy poetry. You two are the best!
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July Morning
Date: 2/10/2018 3:19:00 PM
I love good scifi fantasy. thanks