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I was only five years old when I witnessed my first tornado. It chewed through parts of Dallas, Texas, then made its way northeast barreling with intensity towards Garland, Texas, my hometown. I stood on the porch with Mother watching it churn, growing nearer and nearer. I stood in awe, both fascinated and frightened, feeling my adrenalin surge through my body. Mother grabbed my younger brother and I, yanking a mattress off the bed. We hovered in the southwest corner of the house listening to the tornado’s roar. The tornado was an F4. It picked up houses and buildings in nearby downtown Garland like they were nothing and disintegrated them in the air. It picked up cars like they were toys, tossing them down the streets. It ravaged the town, leaving a huge swathe of destruction in its wake; nothing that stood before it lived to tell the tale. I can still recall the sound of destruction; it was no different than setting off bombs in a sequential, long line. The devastation was just the same. The tornado passed; we and our home were unscathed. Yet, I can still hear Mother’s words echoing in my mind. “Whenever you see black and green clouds and a funnel, take cover in the southwest corner of the house. Tornadoes travel from southwest to northeast. That way the house will fall behind you.” I’m not sure how accurate her advice was. At the time I figured it was, for Mother had grown up on the Kansas prairie accustomed to seeing tornadoes.
a twirl of perfect black dancers dressed in windswept gray danced violently to the roar of heaven’s drums. lightning lit up their stage. music of the wind hailed them. they were honor bound to appear.

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Date: 11/5/2023 6:21:00 PM
Wow Sara, this literally gave me shivers. What a wonderful account of such a dreadful disaster. Your story telling is exemplary. Thank you for such a riveting tale.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 11/6/2023 4:14:00 AM
thanks for your visit, SV, and for sharing your reaction. I'm glad you found it riveting. Enjoy your Monday, Sara
Date: 11/3/2023 6:34:00 PM
A great poetic description of approaching tornadoes. Love the last verse! My first was also in Dallas Sara. I was 13. They became so frequent that we stopped taking cover and stood on the porch watching (if one seemed to come toward us rapidly, we would seek cover). I saw many dirt devils and sand storms in West Texas as a younger child...also potentially devastating. Mother Nature's tantrums. :)
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Date: 11/6/2023 4:15:00 AM
wow, Linda, didn't know you were from Dallas. Some seasons there are so many tornadoes, that one just stops taking cover. I, too, lived in West Texas, and saw many a dirt devil. Both tornadoes and dirt devils fascinate me...your notion of them being Mother Nature's tantrums is poetic. Liked it. Have a splendid day, Sara
Date: 11/2/2023 6:35:00 PM
Perhaps I was lucky. Only tornado I ever saw the full effect of was the one in the original 'Wizard of Oz!' O, Auntie Em! ~ Dorothy and Toto too
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Date: 11/3/2023 4:09:00 AM
Yes, you are lucky in never having personally experienced a real tornado. The one in the Wizard of Oz captivates me each time I watch that classic film. I love all the not-so-subtle symbolism in the movie. I grew up with black and white TV; so when the movie switched to color as they entered OZ, I stared in awe. On the screen.Wow! I ramble. Have a pleasant day, Sara
Date: 11/2/2023 6:29:00 PM
Dear Sara, a meticulous depiction of a tempestuous tornado and a captivating poem. Undoubtedly, the experience must have instilled a profound sense of dread. A masterfully narrated tale that surely sent shivers down one's spine. It is no wonder that the vivid imagery and haunting sounds have endured within your memory.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 11/3/2023 4:12:00 AM
thanks, kind Sotto, for your visit and complimentary words. You're right, witnessing the tornado instilled a sense of dread, a feeling of life being out of my control...a tremendous revelation at such a tender age. Thanks for stopping by and for your continuous support of my poetic endeavors. Enjoy your day, Sara
Date: 11/2/2023 6:07:00 PM
Great writing, Sara, I can feel an angst reading your words. I had a very similar experience with the 1957 Dallas tornado when I was 10 years old. I remember looking out the window and seeing it coming directly towards us. My mother gathered us into our hallway. The tornado dissipated about a quarter mile from our house. Have a good evening, John
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 11/3/2023 4:15:00 AM
what a small world, John! To connect with someone via PS that lived in Dallas at that time and had a similar experience. An amazing coincidence! Even at 10 you must've been frightened. I hesitated in posting my poem, but am now glad I did. Thanks for stopping by. Have a pleasant day, Sara
Date: 11/2/2023 3:23:00 PM
You as well Sara, say hi to Bill for me.
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Date: 11/2/2023 5:23:00 PM
I shall...he's writing poetry and working on his diet plan. He's serious about both. Enjoy your evening, Richard :-)
Date: 11/2/2023 1:06:00 PM
That must have been so frightening. A well told account. Thanks for sharing.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 11/2/2023 2:07:00 PM
yes, it was scary...the images and sounds have stayed with me. Thanks for stopping by, Richard. Have a splendid day, Sara
Date: 11/2/2023 10:05:00 AM
What a sight to see Sara! I lived in Kansas twice when I was a kid and always wanted to see a tornado, as long as no one got hurt; but as soon as the sirens started, my Mum would rush us down to the basement. I really like how the last five lines of this write form an ominous looking cloud...
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 11/2/2023 2:09:00 PM
thanks for visiting, Jeff, and for recounting your own tornado story. I'm grateful you noticed the ominious-looking cloud. Have a pleasant day, Sara
Date: 11/2/2023 9:46:00 AM
Precise description of a tornado and lovely poem. Fortunately, we have no tornados in Malta. Blessings.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 11/2/2023 2:10:00 PM
thanks for visiting, Victor, and for your comments. You're fortunate you don't encounter tornadoes. I live in north Texas; storms and tornadoes are pretty frequent in October and then again in April. Have a blessed Thursday, Sara
Date: 11/2/2023 8:51:00 AM
Fascinating description. Love the memory revived by dancers -- my wife grew up in the Dust Bowl, having to lay down on the ground, on her way home from school, having to cover her face as driven sand tore at her garments and cut her arms and legs. Great writing!
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 11/2/2023 9:06:00 AM
thanks for stopping by, Joe, and for sharing your wife's experience with tornados. That must've been scary for her. I can't imagine. Thanks for your kind words...have a splendid day, Sara
Date: 11/2/2023 7:55:00 AM
An unfortunate event for some. Natures blender! Well done Sara, and the picture ominous!
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 11/2/2023 9:07:00 AM
thanks for visiting, Mark. "Nature's Blender" that's a perfect description! Thanks for your complimentary words about my poem and the picture. Have a splendid day, Sara
Date: 11/2/2023 6:17:00 AM
Wow, obviously I know they are deadly serious but I'm from little old England so to me it's all unimaginable. I loved the movie Twister, I don't mean to belittle or offend or lessen it in any way but that's what we see of tornados, your poem and writing gave me a snapshot of something I can't comprehend so thank you.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 11/2/2023 9:08:00 AM
thanks, Clive, for stopping by. Yes, tornados are almost unimaginable. Your comments didn't belittle or offend. The "Twister" movie captured the terrifying sense a tornado brings. I appreciate your words...have a pleasant day, Sara
Date: 11/2/2023 5:08:00 AM
Whoa iv never seen one, but surely sounds scary. You’ve described your experience so seamlessly in flawless flow of words! You really are a brilliant storyteller, you can describe things in a fascinating manner that keeps readers wanting to read till the end, i think you can write excellent stories for children too, maybe publish a book of short stories. Amazing work! And that picture is perfect for this! And also has that informative touch too. Pleasure always reading you beautiful soul! Fave
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Date: 11/2/2023 9:04:00 AM
thanks for your kind and complimentary words, dear Ink. I'm grateful for you and your positive, uplifting comments. Thanks for encouraging me to be a storyteller. Been a storyteller since childhood. I've written over 200 memoir vignettes/essays and a novel. My mother for created in me a love for words and my father with my love of storytelling. He always told me stories. Thanks for faving this one as well as ADIEU. have a pleasant day, Sara

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