Home » Poems » Di11y Da11y » She's So Beautiful As She Bleeds To Death

She's So Beautiful As She Bleeds To Death

ice crystals are present within the carmine blood that runs through her veins cuts on her soles, leave footprints in the snow ~ steps to follow that remain unfollowed there is no straight path, her movements match a heart's rhythm, it's beat interrupted by cold winds and unknown trauma, into a meandering last waltz - how can despair evoke beauty... whilst the life force leaves her body in trickles and drops from scratches and wounds caused by bare branches in the darkness - she moves with haunting grace, a serenity born of depleting sanguinity this may be the closing night, the coldest... bracing herself impossible but the way she moves defines her lips like scarlet blood, skin absent of colour... she disappears as she moves in time with the swirling icy mists of this night

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 10/11/2023 10:19:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a write/story. This would make a great book. Have a blessed day.....................

Di11y Da11y
Date: 10/11/2023 10:24:00 AM

Aww thanks Paula :)

I Am Anaya

Date: 10/10/2023 11:39:00 AM

Congratulations on your 1st Place win! This could be a sequel to "Wading Rhapsody's Bliss" 2/1/22. It's a fit! Chilling. Printing it out DD.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 10/10/2023 11:46:00 AM

Lovely Anaya - I think that's a first for a print out! I'll presume a frame too haha. Glad you identified it as fitting with your poem - it's a balletic Snow White in my head :) many thanks for your kind support x

Karen Jones

Date: 10/10/2023 6:46:00 AM

Congrats on your 1st place win!

Di11y Da11y
Date: 10/10/2023 6:50:00 AM

Haha thank you for your stamp of approval - much appreciated :)

Speaks Volumes

Date: 10/9/2023 1:59:00 PM

That's really beautiful D. I reckon your best ever. Puts you at No.1 in my estimation. Truly one of the nicest poems on Soup ever. I only read it once, I didn't wanna be chilled like that again !

Di11y Da11y
Date: 10/9/2023 2:42:00 PM

Thank you SV - I was just picturing an alternative snow white who doesn't get out of the forest x

Silent One

Date: 10/9/2023 12:49:00 PM

Raw and emotive take on the prompts, you wrote it so well. I could feel the cold and deadly nature to your words.. Thank you for writing and congratulations on your placement..

Di11y Da11y
Date: 10/9/2023 12:56:00 PM

Thank you Silent One, I enjoyed this prompt once I got into it.

Paige Hind

Date: 10/3/2023 9:39:00 PM

Geez this is raw. The title draws you and the poem keeps you reading.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 10/3/2023 10:52:00 PM

Thanks Paige, it's for the contest where you need a colour, season and profession but can't mention them directly - it's funny what the mind comes up with! Hopefully the red, winter, dancer was evident even without the exact words x