Saw unseen

Beneath the teeth of the saw lies I Lay still, knowing moving, moving... There's no quiet I can be Beneath the teeth Though the mind whirrs Even if I don't move I'm in pieces by the end By any hand

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Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 3/28/2024 7:24:00 AM

Dear DD, I loved how your poem delves into the unsettling tension between stillness and chaos, where the unseen danger lurks beneath the surface. Through haunting imagery of the saw's teeth and the mind's relentless whirring, you have created a visceral portrait of vulnerability and inevitability. It's haunting that even in the silence, there's a cacophony of dangers waiting to unfold, leaving one shattered by the end, by any hand. Loved It!! - Blessing Daniel

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/28/2024 11:29:00 AM

Thank you Daniel - if we could just switch off, half the torment would never occur. Thank you for your exploration of the poems deeper meaning, appreciated