Road Unseen

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The Hidden Path Photograph by By Ronnie Mills - Fine Art America

("Hidden Road," Image courtesy of fineartamerica.com)

Poem written for and submitted to "Ottava Rima Poetry Contest,"

Emile Pinet, sponsor 5/15/2024

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I walk a road unseen for many a year except in my dreams or my wakeful yearning. This misty day — my joy replaces my tears. Who would've dreamt I'd find myself returning? Some pasts morph into shape-shifted fresh frontiers – reward for growth, for humbling and discerning. I splash in puddles picking up wildflowers, now lifting my face to fate-scented showers.

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David Crandall

Date: 5/18/2024 11:01:00 PM

Very interesting poem, Sara, returning to a past with joy and morphing into a new frontier, and finally "fate-scented flowers." The last line seems very open and hopeful!

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 5/19/2024 4:20:00 AM

grateful for your visit, David, and for your kind words. Wishing you a splendid Sunday, Sara PS...I too take meds to rebuild my bones...give myself a shot every day...but it seems to be working.

Sotto Poet

Date: 5/15/2024 7:05:00 PM

Exceptional poetry on the themes of rediscovery and personal development, dear Sara. You contemplate the act of revisiting a location that has been absent from your sight and emotions for an extended period, and discovering happiness and rejuvenation in the process. The poem centers on a voyage returning to a location that has been unvisited for a considerable duration. The text delves into the concepts of nostalgia, metamorphosis, and the splendor of rediscovering one's identity in familiar environments. The poem employs a quiet and introspective vocabulary, with terms such as "dreams," "yearning," "joy," and "tears" to effectively depict the profound emotional experience of the speaker.

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 5/16/2024 2:48:00 AM

thanks for your thorough and mindful comments, kind Sotto!. I appreciate your complimentary words as well. Have a splendid day, your poetess friend in Texas, Sara

Paige Hind

Date: 5/15/2024 5:23:00 PM

Gorgeous flow, I love this- the rhyme was so done well, I felt enchanted like your forest :) hugs-

Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 5/15/2024 5:42:00 PM

awww, thank you Paige. Your comments made my evening. Color me grateful. Have a wonderful evening, hugs Sara