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Einstein reportedly explained RELATIVITY thus, ‘When you sit with a nice/pretty girl for two hours you think it’s only a minute, but when you sit on a hot stove for a minute you think it’s two hours. That’s relativity.’

He brought the bottles of coke over to where I was seated on the wooden bench under the gazebo at the bottom of my parents’ garden. The glass was covered in condensation, except where his sweaty palm had made contact with it. I knew in my heart of hearts that he was about to pop the Big Question. He took a hefty gulp of his soda and started to cough, covering his mouth with the same fist that clutched the coke bottle. I pretended not to notice and instead, fussed with the hem of my summer dress. He looked sheepishly at me and took a deep breath before coming out with it: ‘Would you mind if I dated your sister … instead of you?’ ‘Of course not,’ I lied. I could see the eager face of my sister through the rose arbour. Walking over to her took the longest time.

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Date: 6/11/2023 8:33:00 AM
LOL, yes, that's a good example of relativity! Thanks very much for the place in your contest - I really struggled with the form, so was relieved I 'got it right' - I very much enjoyed it too
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Date: 6/11/2023 9:49:00 AM
That is why I turned to prose for a bit: to break the spell.
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Date: 6/11/2023 9:48:00 AM
That form is all about unlearning everything you think you know, and starting from scratch: "See Spot run." That is what it felt like to me when I started my research 2 years ago. Now, it is like seeing the images in my head and putting monosyllabic words to it. Starting up high (clouds, mountain, ... Bring it closer... Contrasting ... Concluding).
Date: 6/11/2023 2:31:00 AM
This is the time when you want your sister to utter the words. Actually, I would rather date your brother.
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Date: 6/11/2023 2:53:00 AM
Brilliant comeback! Love it :)
Date: 6/11/2023 1:05:00 AM
What a lucky break - no one needs a lifetime of germy coke :)
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Date: 6/11/2023 1:17:00 AM
They must bring back the original recipe + life would be so much sweeter:)

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